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queer-whatchamacallit · 1 year

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So I’ve started a project of how I would rewrite criminal minds if given the opportunity and also the ability to research a lot of things

One of the main critiques is that everyone (Spencer) experiences an unrealistic amount of trauma that doesn’t progress them at all or makes them worse characters

This is how I would rewrite Hotch’s leaving, so it’s still traumatic but not in a senseless ‘way too many serial killers have attacked this guy’ kinda way

Jack has spent most of his life disliking that his beloved dad wasn’t there a lot but knowing that he couldn’t change this at all

He doesn’t want to say anything because he knows it’ll make Hotch feel bad, but sometimes he wonders if his dad doesn’t want to be home with him

He’s 11, and Jess tells him that Hotch is going to be late coming home again. He confides all that in her

She just tells Aaron that Jack has been having a hard time lately with the fact that Hotch is unreliable

He promises he’ll make it to Jack’s friend hangout because they all want to hear about him being in the FBI, but they had to reschedule twice

Jack starts being more distant with him

It all culminates when Hotch is working a case in New York and a snow storm is just starting to fall

It’s like 4 pm, and they’re not really getting anywhere in the case

Then Hotch gets a call from Jess saying that Jack just had a seizure lasting almost 6 minutes, and she already called an ambulance

Hearing this, he immediately drops what he’s doing, packs up his go-bag and takes one of the police cars to the airport

All of the flights are delayed because of the snow, so he starts driving in the snowy soon-to-be dark all the way to Virginia

Maybe an hour into the drive, he’s just crossed the border into Pennsylvania, there’s snow blowing wildly across the view of his headlights, it’s gotten a little bit dark, and in his desperation, he hits the car in front of him

*insert dramatic cut away to everyone else working on the case in show, except I have no idea what the case would be, so we’ll go back to the this*

It would later prove to only leave a little dent on both cars, but he put the car in park, gripped the steering wheel with whitening knuckles, and bashed his head back into the seat as hard as he can

He let out a sigh between gritted teeth and got out to greet the other driver

“One hell of a storm, huh?”

Hotch hummed. He didn’t have time to talk about the fucking weather

“Are you alright? You’re shaking.”

He’d hardly noticed. “I’m fine, but believe or not, I’m in a bit of a hurry, so I don’t mean to be rude, but I really can’t waste much time.”

“Sure thing.”

The two exchanged everything they needed to exchange before getting out of the biting cold, and Hotch resumed driving

He made it to the hospital around midnight

Jack’s doing pretty okay, but even if he knows Hotch couldn’t have gotten there any quicker, it still feels horrible that he wasn’t there for him for a very scary experience

Hotch decides to work from the office for the next couple cases, but it very quickly starts to make him antsy

A little over a month later, Jack has another seizure (this time 4 min but still) and gets diagnosed with epilepsy

Knowing that he hasn’t felt this uncomfortable in a job since his time as a prosecutor and knowing that he can’t have a repeat of fearing for hours that he might not be there for Jack, his favorite person in the world when he’s confused and terrified, he leaves the BAU

I don’t know how much of this v you’d be able to see in show, but I just like thinking about it

He starts working as a high school psych teacher in Jack’s school district (being near DC, there wasn’t exactly an opening for a criminology teacher)

He’s able to be a much better father to Jack, and he doesn’t forgive Hotch right away, but they slowly grow back together

With the reliable school schedule, Hotch is able to start attending therapy appointments and repairing the very bad everything about his brain functions

Jack convinces him to start a podcast about his BAU experience and basic profiling, and it’s fairly successful

Garcia finds it and shares it with the rest of the team

A couple years later, everyone has a sort of reunion, and Hotch seems happier than anyone’s seen him for as long as they can remember

#I would have made this an actual fic if I had any knowledge of car accidents #epilepsy or hospital stays #the special interest half: criminal minds #criminal minds #cm #aaron hotch hotchner #aaron hotchner #jack hotchner #jessica brooks #mr scratch #peter lewis #rewrite #criminal minds fix it #fix it au #rewrote #status epilepticus #high school teacher hotch

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mysticchessecake · 1 year

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I rewrote Fallen dreams lol- Angst

#monkie kid #lego monkie kid #mk #lmk #qi xiaotian #lmk mk #lmk sun wukong #monkie kid mk #Dreams of Destiny #a03 #lmk fanfic #a03 fanfic #rewrote

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thatgayonejd · 2 years

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100% the first person Aphmau met when first getting into the village was Garroth, but the first person to take care of her was Donna. Aph lost both her parents when younger, and Donna had always wanted kids, so Aphmau was going to be who she took care of. Donna was more like an older sister than a mother to Aphmau, but Aph was greatful either way, and it also helped Donna get ready for her own kids.

Garroth wouldn't say so out loud- expecially after Aphmau turned 18- but he really, really liked raising Aphmau with Donna- even though he wasn't attracted to her, he really liked raising Aphmau- or well, raising a child, really. Ofcourse, he mostly came off as a very protective older brother, but he was still excited.

#aphmau #minecraft diares rewrite #rewriting time #rewrote #having fun

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lapoema · 2 years

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aroma a amor, amor— aroma a amor, a mora, afecto del efecto

repite la playlist en loop la canción la noche gira alrededor del sol eso le gusta al cortinado que se mece sin aire a su propio son no hay vos ni yo

gira el mar centrífugo lo que le excede se hace espuma en medio de la noche efecto expansivo el mirar hebra de boca sin voz para llamar a la escriba que escruta el horizonte camino del trayecto volcar miel en su pecho y que lleguen las lluvias al refugio abismal de las abejas

#rewrote #rebrote #esqueje #invertido

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aroacedavestrider · 7 months

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bonjour girl is that a rodent in your pocket or does y,our penis know how to make ratatouille

#ih #goodmofning. 3:14am #shoutout to gray . why are we awake #dave speaks #my post #<- tags i rewrote seven times each ithink #goodnigiht im going to bed

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loveinstreams · 10 months

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like don’t you get it? by hunting ghosts you become a part of them. a presence that lingers. the memories you are making here right now is also what will survive of this place. it’s also what will haunt it.

#‘’it’s my bridge now. they will put my name in graffiti. children will come and tell tales of me’’#<- rewrote the story.#ghost files #bfu #buzzfeed unsolved #watcher #don’t listen to me I’m insane

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ma6bu8su7aq · 1 year

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Mofos - Big Titty Ebony Chick Brittney White Takes Cock Cute Ass Desi Indian Spanked and Gapped! Venezolana morena con culote en leggins gris nos llevamos bien las maduras y yo ADULT TIME Stacked Lesbians Julie Kay & Valentina Nappi 69 By The Fire Cojiendo En El Patio Con La Profe De Fitness Gosto de pau grande e grosso our new roommate fucks my boyfriend on hidden cam Naked bondage artwork and sexy gay guy The Master Drains The Student Surfistinha chupa de mais

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fe8hqvmsdktig · 1 year

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japanese mature big tits masturbating She made for Swallowing Cum Japanese teen in pantyhose wild group sex Teanna Trump Fucks White Cocks Instead Of Studying power bottom kosmin fucked bareback by daddy pornstar DALESSANDRO for CrunchBoy shoot My Wife kissing my big hard penis Short teen tasting lezbo Inked jock tugging until cumming hard while teasing feet Granddaughter plays strip poker with Grandpa Sub college teen pussylicking at hazing

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marikodraws · 1 month

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You're the one person I refuse to lose to! You're the one person I refuse to lose.

🧤 Ta-da! Here's the comic I did for @rivalszine

#rivals zine #thank you for having me 🙇🏻#persona 5 #goro akechi #shuake #fanart #comics #i usually do a lot of dialogue revisions in the process of making comics #but the amount of times i completely rewrote that 4th page...#words stopped being words lmao #i was like what am i even trying to say #i think it hits tho

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cyberels · 1 month

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later, loser.ᐟ ᯓ★

˗ˋˏ 𝐄𝐋𝐋𝐈𝐄 𝐖𝐈𝐋𝐋𝐈𝐀𝐌𝐒 𝐗 𝐑𝐄𝐀𝐃𝐄𝐑 ˎˊ-

☆ ellie discovers the quickest way to get a girl underneath her

daily click! palestine masterpost

☆: sometimes i start writing without a plot in mind to get myself out of a funk and and and this is what i came up w lol so sorry if it’s doodoo ass

☆ warnings -> mention of blood, injuries, all that good shit that comes with skateboarding, probably really inaccurate skating talk, drugs, tbh probably really bad writing but bare with me here, no concept of stranger danger from reader when she sees a hot girl (ellie) for plot reasons lol

☆ skaterboarder!ellie yayyy she wears glasses because i said so &&&&& also ellie works at a vinyl shop and reader works at a bakery :)

☆ ☆ ellies playlist! ☆ ☆

u don’t have to listen but i made it to listen while i write and i thought it’d be fun to add

my masterlist

ellie was no stranger to making mistakes, she’s human, it happens… however, she usually doesn’t make this many stupid choices within the span of one single hour.

today, ellie was running late.

mistake number one.

she practically flew out of the door and hopped on her board, mumbling a half assed apology to her neighbor who she accidentally shoulder checked on her way out when she put on her headphones.

she’s probably going way too fast, but she’s been skateboarding for years, she can handle it. she still has the penny boards that she started skating on when she was 12 hanging up in her living room, right beside some of her other boards she’s had since then that she’s either destroyed or replaced. she weaved in and out of the people walking practically effortlessly, not caring if she was pissing anyone off, they’d live. she’d never have to see them again, anyways.

she opened her phone to turn on her music.

you, on the other hand, were taking your time; you had a good while until you had to be at work. you’ve created a habit of looking for ladybugs in the bushes outside your apartment complex after you noticed that the plant is home to many of the little insects. usually you just glance at the plant as you pass by, but today, you fully stopped to look.

unfortunately, you were unaware of ellie being just feet away from you.

guess you’re no stranger to mistakes, either.

granted, ellie would have had enough time to stop… if she was paying attention.

which she was not.

mistake number two.

you hear a string of curse words behind you. you barely manage to turn around before you’re pushed into the bushes by a girl who promptly lands on top of you. her skateboard rolled away pathetically. it’s almost like it was embarrassed, too.

if there had been any ladybugs, they were definitely squashed now.

you open your eyes slowly to find the other girl hovering just above you. her necklace dangles temptingly close to your lips as she pushes herself up. she's still on top of you, her face just inches away from yours. she blinks a few times, slowly taking in the situation. she seems lost in thought, the wheels in her head turning painstakingly slowly as she tries to comprehend what's happening and her part in it.

she’s taking way too long to get off of you, though, which only serves to frustrate you more.

“hellooo? can you get up?” you mumble through gritted teeth to the girl above you, turning your head to the side to avoid her gaze.

in hindsight, you probably should’ve asked if she was okay, but right now all you wanted to do was get up and pretend like this never happened.

you don’t even want to know how many people saw you fall.

“oh— oh fuck.” ellie stuttered, taking one last glance at you before she moved herself onto the sidewalk, not finding the strength to stand up fully just yet.

she grabbed her headphones that had been flung off in the impact. small scrapes lined the side of them, but at least they probably still worked. she put them around her neck, letting her head fall back in her hands. she took a deep breath, trying to get a grip on her emotions and the situation.

you sigh as you get up, and ellie can tell you’re mad based solely on how the exhale of air sounded.

“uh… you good?” you ask after an uncomfortable pause, eyeing the other girl. it was obvious you didn’t really care, but at least you tried to be polite.

you were still taking your time collecting yourself, brushing leaves out of your hair and wiping blood from your hands onto your jeans (thank god you wore black jeans today). you were definitely going to be sore tomorrow, but other than your scraped up hands, you were fine.

just really pissed off.

ellie looked up at you and then immediately looked back down, running her hands over her face once more. “yeah, i’m… good.”

you roll your eyes as you hold your hand (the one with the least amount of scrapes) out towards ellie, offering to pull her up. you can't help but feel pity as she sits on the sidewalk. not in a sympathizing way, but more of a "damn, this girl looks pathetic" way. she hesitates for a second, but then grabs your hand and smiles weakly.

“thanks.”

as much as you know that this situation partially is your fault, you’re still annoyed. you had spent so long getting ready today just to have some idiot push you into dirt.

when you speak again, your words come out harsher than you intended… not that you minded. “yeah. watch where you’re fucking going next time.”

ouch.

okay, maybe (keyword: maybe) ellie had caused the worst part of this, but she wasn’t going to sit here and take you blatantly being rude when you’re just as much to blame as she is. “maybe if you didn’t think you owned the sidewalk, i wouldn't have ran into you.”

you reach down beside you and grab her, now shattered, phone and her (also shattered) glasses. you raise your eyebrows as you look over the broken screen.

“maybe if you were paying attention.” you pause, wiggling the phone in front of her face. “you would’ve realized i stopped walking.”

she snatched her things back, she didn’t have a comeback for that.

her phone was fucked… usable, but the screen was shattered so badly that if she scrolled on it she’d probably slice open her thumb. small price to pay, she figures.

it’s not like she’s gonna buy a new one… but she would have to cough up the money for new glasses, though. damn it.

“why the hell did you stop walking anyways?”

you hesitate, looking back at the bush sheepishly, vaguely gesturing towards it as you speak again. “i— not that it’s any of your business— i wanted to see if there were any ladybugs on the leaves.”

“…oh.”

well now ellie just feels like a dickhead, because that’s actually really cute. that was not the answer she was expecting.

you continue looking away and ellie sighs, attempting to push past you to grab her skateboard.

mistake number three.

the second she takes a step, she falls into you again, her ankle completely giving out underneath her. you catch her, your arms wrapping around her hips as you hold her up.

ellie has never wanted to die more than she did at this moment.

her face was literally sandwiched in between your chest. she pushed herself back, hopping slightly.

what the fuck just happened?

“oh my fucking god. i’m so sorry. i– oh fuck, this is so awkward.”

yeah, awkward was one word for it. you stare at her blankly for a moment before you kick her skateboard towards her.

you could feel her touch lingering on your body like she was still there. if your hands were just a little lower you would’ve…

“its– it’s fine. dude, are you sure you’re alright?”

you sound more like you care this time, at least.

not that you do care, or anything,

just trying to make sure she wasn’t seriously hurt.

that’s all.

“i’m fine.” it was an obvious lie, but she was preoccupied with thinking about how she was going to skate to and from work if she could barely walk… she’d have to deal with it, she decided. there wasn’t any other option for her right now, she was already late.. “i’ll be fine.”

“very convincing.” you reply, looking her up and down. “you’re not seriously about to get on that thing again, are you?”

“not that it’s any of your business, but i don’t have any other choice, i’m gonna be late to work and this is all i have to get me there.”

you narrow your eyes at her.

no way this girl was reckless and stupid.

“what? you can’t be serious… you’re still going to work? are you an idiot?”

ellie doesn't answer right away, glancing down at her skateboard for a bit. you’re right, she should call out, but she hated the prospect of missing a day of work. money had been tight, even one missed day would be hell for her and her bank account.

“you gonna give me the money i’d lose if i called out?”

you opened your mouth to reply, but she was already flying past you, very clearly having a hard time but also very clearly not caring.

“don’t stop in the middle of the sidewalk next time, dumbass!” she yelled, leaving you standing in the same spot just watching her leave.

…and kinda wishing she’d come back.

just so you could get the last word.

when you walk into work, it’s unfortunately obvious that you’re pissed off, if the way your manager immediately asks what happened as soon as you clocked in was anything to go by.

you’re thankful for the excuse to rant, though.

“god, abby, where do i even start? i literally just walked out of my apartment and some girl on a skateboard slammed into me and we both went flying into a stupid plant. got a face full of bush and not even the good kind.”

“jesus,” abby laughed, picking a leaf out of your hair. “was she hot?”

“was she hot? is that seriously all you’re gonna say?”

“...well?”

“i hate you so much… but yeah, she was.” you admit, defeat obvious in your tone. you’re well aware that this would’ve been a lot easier for you if you didn’t find the dumb skater attractive. you’d been close enough to her face to see every detail… her freckles, her eyes, her lips— damn it. you couldn’t get her out of your head.

this felt like a sick joke.

abby clapped her hands together. “this isn’t a completely bad thing! did you get her number?”

“no, abby, i didn’t get her number. i was too busy trying to get her away from me because she was stupid and annoying.”

“you’re no fun, could’ve got yourself a skater girl.” she frowned. “are you okay though?”

“you should’ve led with that question, you know?” you huff, looking at the scrapes on your palms again. “i’m fine.”

“yeah, yeah. i should’ve.” abby tosses a pastry towards you. “here, for your troubles, on the house. go sit down in the break room for a little bit, you look like a mess.”

“gonna ignore the last part. thanks, abs.”

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“jesus fucking christ.” ellie mumbled to herself, hopping off her board before she opened the door to the small vinyl store she worked at.

“late again, williams— oh. oh wow. you look like shit.” austin, the owner of the shop spoke, nudging ellie as she walked by. he was wearing a stupid smirk on his face which made ellie more aggravated.

asshole.

“real nice.” ellie grumbled, putting up her skateboard and backpack. “sorry for being late, won’t happen again, i just— some people are so stupid, you know?”

“by ‘some people’ do you mean you?” he laughed, spinning on his chair. he mocked the way ellie spoke, doing a high pitched voice that sounded nothing like her.

god, he was a 30 year old man-child, but he pays her… so… whatever. she’ll deal.

“ha-ha. good one.”

“ya gonna tell me what happened or are ya gonna leave me guessin’?”

“what happened is people don’t know how to walk anymore.” she scoffed, taking stock of the money she had to count before putting it in the drawer. “so fucking stupid.”

“by the looks of it you don’t know how to walk anymore, either. you gonna be able to work? i’m not payin’ ya to sit around, so if i need to call someone else in…”

she glared at him, trying to see if he’d explode if she stared hard enough.

he was right though, unfortunately, ellie was walking like she had just learned how to. it wasn’t the worst injury she’s ever got from skateboarding, but it was definitely inconvenient.

“yeah, i’ll be fine.” ellie snapped, shifting her weight to her good foot to avoid making her injury any worse. “jesus christ, it’s a twisted ankle. i’m not missing a limb.”

“but—“

“drop it.”

he put his hands up in mock surrender, the smirk still on his face. “oooookay, okay. whatever you say williams. you were still late though, let’s go back to talkin’ about that. what’s the count at now? is this the fifth or sixth time this month?”

“i’m sorry, i’m sorry. shit’s hard when you don’t have a car.” ellie sighed, punching in the numbers on her register. “i’ll do better. today was not my fault, though.”

“am i gonna have to be more strict with you? everyone else shows up on time, you know?”

“yeah, yeah. whatever.” ellie rolled her eyes, trying to focus on work and push the pain out of her mind. “everyone else has a car.”

ellie really did not like austin. his whole holier-than-thou attitude irked her to no end.

still, it beat being jobless, so she knew she shouldn’t complain.

“don’t let it happen again.”

“i won’t, i swear. i’m really sorry.”

“right, okay, i’m gonna go to the bathroom real quick, you alright out here?”

she bit her tongue, holding back a groan.

austin ‘going to the bathroom’ was his way of saying that he’s gonna get really fucking stoned and then sit around and do nothing all day. this was a daily occurrence, at this rate.

“yeah, yeah, i’m good.” ellie mumbled, shoving away the annoyance she felt when he walked past her.

austin was a dickhead, but he was never outright mean, not really. he just… he thought he was better than everyone. a classic ego-centric prick.

as much as she hated him, she did like having a job— and being able to afford a place to sleep at night.

“ohhh, ellie, i gave you more shifts, like you asked.” he said before he walked out, smiling at her. “take a look at the schedule when ya get the chance.”

he has to be kidding.

she’s been begging for more shifts since god knows how long ago, and he decides to give her more now? when she doesn’t even know how she’s gonna be able to make it to work?

amazing. just what she wanted!

“great.” ellie muttered, shooting him a glare even though he was already gone. “more hours that i don’t know how the hell i’m gonna get to.”

she shook her head, austin wasn’t worth getting this pissed about— especially when he did try to do what she asked.

the store was never busy in the morning, so she sat in austins chair, finally taking a second to herself. she went over her options on how this was going to go.

she could have asked dina for a ride, if dina wasn’t off on some work trip about three hours away for the next two weeks, taking her and jesses shared car with her.

terrible timing.

she’d take public transportation if it was reliable and also if she didn’t have a few bad experiences with it already.

that wasn’t really a good option.

uber was definitely not an option. she already was going to have to buy new glasses and eventually pay for her phone to get fixed, she wasn’t about to drop $50 a day on ride.

she was screwed.

nothing was working out for her right now— the universe was laughing at her, just like it always did.

she wanted to kick and scream, but that wouldn’t help anything, plus she wouldn’t be able to kick very well right now.

oh well… she’d be fine, she’d just have to push through it.

her phone buzzed in her pocket and she winced when she seen the cracked screen again, it was so wrecked that it barely let her type in her password.

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was ellie stupid for agreeing to go out of her way when she was already struggling to walk? yes.

does she care? no.

jesse was a good guy, he’s done a shit ton of favors for her, so this was the least she could do.

she’d never been to the bakery, but she always smelled it when she’d pass by, and it always looked like it’d be good. she did deserve a little treat after the day she had, anyways.

thank you jesse and jesse’s money.

when ellies shift is over, she feels so much worse than she did earlier, and austin repeating that ellie looked like shit over and over again wasn’t helping.

ugh.

“you’re a wreck, williams—“

“—goodbye austin, byeee. i’m leaving, out the door, shifts over. see you tomorrow.” she slammed the door shut, letting out a frustrated sigh as she got on her board again. “god. fuck off.”

the bakery wasn’t far, it was literally right across the street, but it felt like it was miles away to ellie. she leaned on the wall for a second to catch her breath before she walked inside.

it was a cute shop, one of those places you see on pinterest or instagram, with the led light signs and fake plants, it was actually really nice. she doesn’t know why she never came here before.

“let me know if i can help… oh god. it’s you.”

she looks over at you and she starts to wish the fall had just killed her on impact.

“please… pretend like this morning didn’t happen. i don’t want to deal with arguing right now.” ellie sighs, not giving you time to reply to her before she goes into saying her order.

she looked at your name tag as she paid, she could barely see what it said, her eyes squinting slightly as she tried to make out your name.

you scribbled little smiley faces and stars around your name, which was cuter than ellie would like to admit.

“go sit, i’ll bring your stuff to you after i box them, ‘kay?”

“i can wait here.“

“sit.”

“fine.”

she sat at one of the booths, attempting to use her phone without losing a finger. she wasn’t even paying attention to the content, just scrolling mindlessly as the memories of this morning replayed in her mind over and over again.

she was hoping to never see you again.

maybe coming here was a mistake.

“here.” you say after a few moments, placing the boxes on the table. “enjoy.”

you were being kind, but she could read behind the curtness of your tone.

you thought she was dumb. she could always tell by the way you talked to her; that look of disdain on your face.

“thanks.” she said, and then the silence took over again. it was obvious that neither of them wanted to start another conversation after the way the last one ended.

ellie couldn’t help but notice how just scraped up your hands were. you had bandages on them, but the blood that seeped through was bright red, like it was demanding to be looked at.

demanding ellie to feel bad for what she did.

damn it, she really should’ve just paid attention this morning.

would’ve saved her a lot of trouble.

she got up, sucking her teeth and hissing as she shifted her weight. she leaned on the table for balance as a few curse words left her mouth.

“god, you’re the dumbest person i’ve ever met.” you declared, confirming her suspicions.

she scoffed, trying to shake the pain away from her ankle.

man, this sucked.

“shut the hell up.” ellie snapped. “you don’t have to be so snarky, you know? i’m already dealing with the consequences of my shitty morning, you can drop the whole, ‘i’m better than you’ bullshit. if you listened earlier, you’d have known i said that i have no other choice.”

“i did listen, idiot. i don’t mean to sound like i’m trying to be better than you, okay? i’m sorry. but you seriously don’t have anyone that can help you out? do you have friends?”

“i have friends, asshole. they’re just either busy or i don’t want to inconvenience them. what’s it matter to you anyways?”

you don’t really have an answer, you’re not sure why it matters. maybe it’s because ellie looked really miserable, or maybe it’s because it had been partially your fault that she’s hurt… or maybe both. but you couldn’t shake the feeling of guilt about the situation she was in.

“i have a car.”

ellie paused, looking up at you. she wasn’t sure if she heard you correctly, or if this was just some weird, shitty joke.

“okay? congratulations?”

“don’t make me spell it out.” you reply, annoyance clear in your tone. “i’m saying, you’re obviously hurt, and it’s kinda my fault, so… if you needed a ride…”

“no.”

“don’t be stubborn. look, i get it, we’re not on the best terms right now, but i can’t just let you go like this without at least offering, y’know? plus, you seem like you could use the help.”

ellie’s mind was screaming at her to accept— it was logical. you offered a ride, she needs a ride, she should accept your offer.

“i could be a serial killer for all you know. you don’t even know my name.”

“yeah, okay. you? a serial killer? i’d just run away. not like you’d be able to chase after me.”

“hey, i can run pretty damn fast, you know?” ellie hissed. if she wanted, she could definitely chase you down… but she’d rather not do that at the moment. that was probably not a great idea. “hell, i could be an axe murderer.”

“what’s your name?”

“huh?”

“are you dumb?”

“…it’s ellie.”

“‘kay, ellie, now i know your name and if you’re observant— which i doubt but i’m gonna play devils advocate— you know mine. nice to meet you. now we know each other. i’m not gonna sit here and play 21 questions, do you want me to take you to your place or not?”

“what if you kill me anyways?” she asked, she was kidding, she just wanted to piss you off.

“i am not gonna fucking— you know what, you’re annoying. never mind.”

“wait. i’m sorry.”

fuck.

maybe this whole thing about you wasn’t so bad. you were just— abrasive.

she swallowed, forcing herself to stay calm. “i’ll take a ride.”

“what’s the magic word?”

“die.” ellie hissed. “you’re not funny.”

“almost! that’s four words. do you want a hint?”

ellie stared at you blankly for a few seconds before answering. “i am not saying please.”

“you just said it.” you grinned. “look, i get off at 6:30, that’s like… 20 minutes from now, if you don’t mind waiting. i’ll come get you when i’m off, sound good?”

“yeah. that sounds good.”

this is such a bad idea.

#max writes ☆#btw #ladybugs symbolize positive change #and luck #will make a part 2 eventually maybe i’ll actually finish this series #ellie williams #ellie williams x reader #the last of us #tlou #ellie williams x y/n #ellie williams x you #wlw #ellie williams x female reader #ellie williams x f!reader #sorry i know jesses ooc but i rewrote it like 10492 times i can’t get it to sound good

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A mini rewrite of Waterboyy the series, cuz it was very disappointing. Part 1

Ok this is a show that came from a time where GMMTV wat at it's gmmtvness, a time where Earth was at his debut and was yet to be paired up(no Mix in sight for quite some time), New still had to have his moment to shine with Tay and SOTUS was still one of the only Thai BLs there, I wanted to watch in 2019 but never got to watch it until this year and to say I was disappointed is un understatement, especially by the love stories, so here are the thigs I would have changed if I was in charge of the show:

I would have made Apo, Meen and Kluay main protagonists, they are freshmen A and K join the swimming club, that has Waii, Sung, Puth and Pan in it, I would cut off Fah, Wan and ESPECIALLY Coach Mai.

for the romance I would set it as 3 couples, Apo and Waii but make the storyline and Waii WAY less toxic but keeping the dad situation cuz that was a good conflict with a bad execution, Pan and Namkhaeng cuz sorry but you can't erase the only lesbian in the show, you can have other bisexual characters like Waii and Namkhaeng but let Pan be lesbian, and the last one will come as a surprise but Kluay and Meen listen I really liked Kluay and Achii but the rivalry and tension between K and M was so good(Mond and Victor i feel had more chemistry with each other than theire acrual series partner lost opportunity) so I would like to make them enemies to friends to lovers AND the main couple

So the setting would be: A,K and M are starting their first year in uni, differnt major and A doesn't know the others but K and M where friends and part of the swimm club in HS and got estranjed because another club mate sabotaged K and blamed it on M ant the latter couldn't prove his innocence and gave up cuz they weren't that close so they drifted apart, and now the 3 of them all enroll to the swimm club, no track and field only swim club and also no clubs drama cuz that part was awful we only get the swimming club and the fact that they are doing bad in competition have basically no people signin up to it and the school board are gonna cut them if they don't performe better, so when they get 3 new freshmen they all celebrate cuz the year prior they had no new people and they are all seniors now.

Apo and Nam are bffs since highschool, and they always support and help each others, they where the person they came out to for eachother and they always help the other when they have a crush or go trough heartbreak.

Waii still have a difficult relationship with his dad, that is dating the senior that got him in the swim club, instead of his friend, that is now graduated (that he actually had feelings for but hadn't realize that yet), his dad is still the coach of the club and Waii is still antagonistic torwards him but does what he says in the end for the club, he still has internalized homophobia and has a girlfriend but they break up at the beginning of the show because she understood before him his real feelings so decided to break it off and will help him with Apo later on after he finally came to term with himself.

Pan is openly gay, she was dating a girl but like in the actual show she broke up with Pan to be with a guy and she took it pretty bad, and decided to stay away fron relationships until she graduated, but when she meets Nam at a party they organized, cuz Apo invited her, she start to like her but is afraid Nam will end up treating her the same as her ex.

The swimm club is very close to one another they all love each other a great deal, and Nam, Puth and Sung are trying to pach thigs between Waii and his dad with weird plans that in the end never works.

Apo ends up sharing the dorm with Waii like in the show, and at the beginning the relationship is coldly cordial in the dorm, Waii treats him with cordial disinterest outside of the club, he is aware he needs the freshis to keep the club afloat(ah pun!)

So last thig is the dorm arrangements, first of all no more multi people dorm, it make no sense and it's less drama filled, so 2 people dorms, Kluey and Meen share a dorm, Pan does not live at the dorms, it isn't mandatory to do it but a lot of students do it cuz it is more convenient to the commute but she was rooming with her ex and after the break up she doesn't wanna share with any girl in case the past repeat itself, Nam as well doesn't live at the dorm she prefers to live with her parents cuz the house is very close to the school and she didn't want to move all her things in the dormroom, Sung and Puth share the dorm, and Apo share with Waii cuz the freshman are an odd number, there where no single rooms Waii had his roomate leave, cuz Waii's year also had an odd number and he had to share with an upperclassmate for 3 years, so now they got to share the dormroom.

And this concludes the base of the rewrite, this is the starting point the world built and the introduction of the characters, I intend to make 3 other separate posts about how I would have the couples progress, one for each couple

So this is part 1, I know that this is a very old show that nodody cares about anymore, or have ever cared about, the idea just came to me at work and I tought it would have been fun to write it down, I have to say I am in no way a writer this is just for fun and for myself, cuz even if nobody reads it, it was a fun experience to write down how I would change a show that I didn't enjoy to make it more my 'vibe'

Thank you to everybody that has arrived here! even if you didn't like it please be gentle I never do things like this, nor I plan to cuz I will not sit trough a bad show only to make a post like this thank you! and also cuz it took me a week and a half only to make this part!

By and a good day/night depending on your timeline🥰

#thai bl #thai drama #bl drama #rewrite #rewrote #waterboyy the series #this is so long!#and i still plan on making 3 more parts...#this was a bitch to write it took me more than a week #p.s. I am NOT a writer so if you think this is trash please be kind and skip it #I will probably delete this in a couple of weeks too

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