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seenashwrite · 5 years

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Notes From Nash: Season 15 Episode 2

We're back! And by that, I don't mean back for episode #2, I mean we're back in the little town, same little town we were in for the majority of episode #1. And as far as how ep #2 compares with ep #1.... um.....

The writers ain't in no damn rush to advance the plot or further character development, are they? So this is basically ep #1 all over again with some guest star overload as a substitute for those two very important aspects of storytelling I just mentioned.

[stares at date]

They've got *how* many eps to wrap up the show?

Hoo-boy.

Spoilers below the cut.

Changing it up from last time (see link at bottom), I thought I'd go in order of the ep this post. All right. Let's roll.

From the mom who gets 86'd in the opening------

And, PS: That's not disemboweled. Don't use the word if you (a) don't know what it means and/or (b) won't let make-up/effects do their job.

-----to the rest of the people, I care nothing. There was no point giving all these extras lines and whatever little backstories, I give no fucks. Mainly because, gee, I don't know, I signed up for a show about two brothers goin' out there and gettin' after it, and thus far we've gone about two inches and gotten nothing.

Are we still in this little town?

More questions, borrowing from the dialogue some here:

"Remember when we did the thing with Amara?"

"God's sister?"

"And the soul bomb? And here's how it worked? Remember? Because you participated? REMEMBER?! I'm not just saying this for the benefit of, oh wait, no one, because the chances of brand new viewers coming into the game this late is virtually nil, so everyone - including us, here, in this scene, our characters - already know this backstory, ergo the only reason for exposition anvils is to benefit those viewers, who - as we've already established - likely don't exist. So let's run through this for the benefit of, I have to assume, the writers who don’t actually, you know, watch the show as evidenced by--- well, we’d be here all day."

Nope. No, no. Those aren't questions I had. Because I've been watching the show for a good while now. This exchange should’ve been something to the effect of - “I was thinking - remember how we did the soul bomb, with Amara? Do you think you could pull off something like that? To trap them?” and then Rowena responds with uncertainty but will give it a try, etc. I mean, the writing in this ep is thus far pedestrian.

There's still no explanation for why these ghosts - especially these super notorious ghosts like Ripper and Lizzie and who-fuck-ever - were lingering so close together that they were able to be trapped by the stupidest ex machina spell in the writing world. And what of the others? The entirety of hell escaped. We've seen, what, maybe 20? Could there maybe have been a throw-a-way line to Belphagor something like “Did you corral the worst douchebags together”, or “Is there a bar in hell where the worst douchebags hang out or something”, or “this is just our luck that the worst douchebags landed here” or WHATEVER, just SOMETHING to acknowledge they (the writers) recognize that Convenient Super Bad Ghosts Are Convenient.

IT'S KETCH, BITCHES!

I love this character. What a breath of fresh air that snarky piece of ass has been. I hope he doesn't get killed. He will. Because we can't have anything good. But there is some good, which is the Ketch-Rowena flirting. Honestly, I'm fine with Rowena getting action from anyone. She's awesome and she's earned it. Ketch is primo catch, though. (I'm not sorry for that sentence. I am, but I'm not.)

The repeated use of Belphagor's name pleases myself and my podcast co-host. Should you wish to know more about that demon, please do check out our podcast. Don't look him up first, trust us. That they have chosen this particular demon's name is just *chef's kiss*, though I do hope it's not a foreshadowing for how the rest of the season is going to go. Okay fine, I'll spoil it: he's a shit demon. He deals in poo. Literally. I'm not lying. Go forth to the podcast @youtotallymadethatup - just about every post links you to where you can listen. /shameless self-promo

IT'S AMARA, BITCHES!

Let's hope that wardrobe does her better than that ill-fitting black dress this go 'round, she deserves better.

"You're the darkness, I'm the light."

STOP IT. STOP. FUCK. STOP.

Are we still in this little town?

Blah blah blah Castiel Dean angst repeating essentially what's already been said at the end of 14 and last week blah. "You know what's real? We are." Not if it's an alternate timeline, my love.

I keep forgetting just how many spaced-out chains you need to have strewn about your standard meat packing plant and/or factory, well played, set dec and props. That.... that was sarcasm.. (Look, I got no beef with the crew, they're just playing the cards they've been dealt, and their hands are garbage, just a pile of same ol' same ol' stereotypical, unimaginative stuff, so bless them. I hope every single one of them has a job lined up next year, truly. They have more than paid their dues and earned it. Lord knows especially since certain parties took the reins, good night nurse. I've digressed. )

IT’S KEVIN BI----

This is dumb. This is actually dumb. In case you didn't see my half-time post, and I quote:

That is *three* in under twenty minutes. Like, it’s episode 2. You’re blowing your wad. Pace yourselves. AND MAYBE SOME STORY ADVANCING, THAT WOULD BE AWESOME

This bullet thing could be hella interesting. It *could* be. I wonder if it will be.

These ghosts are painfully uninteresting. The guy playing the Ripper is horribly miscast. This needed to be someone who... who.... I dunno, is a good actor. He's not. Sorry, Pops. I mean, even Osric (who is an excellent actor) couldn't elevate that scene.

This episode is painful.

Are we still in this little town?

Ketch got knocked out, left alone with ghost, deffo gonna get possessed.

Are we still talking to these ghosts? Why? Why is Kevin thinking he can go up against them alone? I'm not exactly sure what threat they are to him, can't he just disappear and whoosh somewhere else? I missed something, I must've missed something. It doesn't matter, none of this matters.

Okay, Belphagor says there's at least a hundred. Still, what would that be, like 1/2500000000th of hell? Why are the Winchesters, of all people, and now Rowena concentrating on this stupid little town----

Are. We. Still. In. This. Little. Town.

---why in the fuck aren't the most renowned hunters of modern time and their angel friend and the powerful witch friend and the friend with immense tactical knowledge regarding weaponry for supernatural shit not at the bunker strategizing and planning and... and... and.... I just....

Lookit, I've said this before: especially in fantasy/sci-fi stuff, if you are logical in every possible place you can be, if you nail the simple shit, then the audience is exponentially more likely to buy into the fantastical stuff, and also to be more forgiving (or not notice altogether) when you inevitably whiff, because nobody's perfect, of course. But this show in later years has notoriously screwed the pooch on the easy stuff, and here we are, in some needlessly convoluted mess right out of the gate in the last season ever.

::sighs::

Oh, look. Because of course he's possessed. You left him alone with a ghost. I'm neither a professional writer nor a psychic, I'm just thinking "What is predictable as possible?" and saying that. You try it. It's worked for me so far.

"I tried to heal him it didn't work" - well maybe he's still residually possessed. Or maybe you suck. Sorry Cas, you don't deserve that. It's not you. It's not me, either. It's them. It's the writers. I don't know what this line is about unless they're teeing up Cas to be even more neutered than he already is. I legit don't know, I can't think, I'm so irritated right now.

"Nothing to hold you anywhere" - what? Really? Seriously? So what are you and Dean? Y'all ain't his family? Let that little badass haunt the bunker. He'd be the most awesome research assistant ever. Now THAT is a good plot point, have ol' Kev be home base, helping coordinate whatever's coming. Oh here we go, swishy swishy hand, magic hole, nobody knows why this demon can do all this shit, and Kevin's gone. Why? WHY. My idea is better. No way Osric would blow your guest star budget, it appears to be shaping up to be immense, especially with all the money you've saved so far on location(s).

Shoulda kept him rest of season, let him assist, then his final reward is getting into heaven for reals when Cas (they'll probs kill him, tho) or Amara (maybe, seems too obvi a choice tho, and she doesn't give a shit about beng a ruler, we knew that back in whatever season that was) or Jack (because why not, it's the most ridiculous idea, since he's got the mind of a toddler, meaning it's something the writers would think is a great idea) or Billie (wild card guess) is the new God. Or have him brought back to life, fuck, I don't care.

So is the bullet trapping Chuckster on earth, is the question, and if so what kind of all-knowing deity puts a weapon in the hand of a potential enemy that could render him even a *touch* weaker? Where's the long game, there? What could any possible reasoning be?

Okay, well, the scenes between Emily and Rob have been the best part of the episode, as well as the interaction with Ruthie and DHJ. Everything else fell flat. J2M seemed to be bored and phoning it in, and it's not often that can be said about any of those three.

I swear, if the preview shows that we're still in this little town for episode #3.... wait, is that the crypt from ep #1?.... are.... are we.....

ARE WE STILL IN THIS LITTLE TOWN

What have we learned? Other than Chuck, no character development. The plot remains that some ghosts-interchangeably-used-with-souls from hell are trapped in a confined area, and it was via a tenuous spell provided by a demon whose motivations are unknown, and there's something up with that bullet wound. We knew those already.

(There's possibly something wrong with either Cas or Ketch -- or else that's something that will be completely forgotten was ever mentioned -- but we don't know either way and we don't know what it is, therefore we didn't learn anything; if this does ultimately turn out to be something, then we'll count it as a learned item for that episode.)

So, minus learning that Chuck is weakened somehow and that at least for right now Amara’s not exactly in his corner, we're in the exact same place story-wise that we were in last week.

And looks like we'll be back there again next week.

See you next week, I guess.

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cawolters · 5 years

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|| A Five Point Writer’s Guide To Zest ||

Okay, so I’ve gotten a few Qs after my last few wip uploads from my ‘Rise of the Blood Dawn’ trilogy, and they are all centered around the same theme:

“how do I write believable and hot smut, without making it effy?”

And as a self-proclaimed perv, I decided to make a post about how I prefer my smut to be written, and hopefully it will be helpful to some of you guys.

It really boils down to five points for me:

The wait

The push

The headspace

The act

The cool

Yup. Let’s get to it!

Oh, and this post is entirely tame. I even cut the gifs in post-edit, so you can read on in peace.

1) The Wait

It’s importaint to remember that smut is basically erotica, but it’s not. Think, up-skirt-shot mangas vs hentai. Or GoT vs an actual porn. Smut is a tease. You get to see a lot, but not everything.

Your lemon scenes should never get as graphic as erotica and there should be a much longer build up to the act. Erotica is sex scene on top of sex scene, and though there can be a complex plot/emotions/development in play (some of my favorite mangas and comics are erotica, and they are lovely! MakaMaka is extremely sweet and wonderful 18+ recommend), the plot usually takes backseat to make room for tha GRAPHICS.

It’s different in smut. Here we have time. Pages and pages to hold off on.

Make the reader fall in love with the idea of your characters together,before they even get to touch! You can do this by adding inner monologue, fantasies, misunderstandings, sensual imagery, get them alone in a dark room and then tease the Kiss with an interruption.

And make sure that when they finally DO kiss, it means something. It makes their worlds/their character development/the plot, shift, for better or for worse.

II) The push

The two MCs has been sending each other looks all night, and now they cannot stop themselves any longer. They have to be stupid. They have to kiss, to touch, to sneak into the broom closet and make things happen.

Timing and motivation is everything here! You should ask yourself a few questions before getting them together: Why is their physical relation beginning now and not sooner? What has changed? Why do they want to be together/or what does this act bring each character?

It’s vital for the reader to understand the MCs motivation, and it’s also very neat when you can make the reader curl their toes when turning th page, because the timing is right. It’s a blackout, she has just dropped her dress, they’re all a lil tipsy, wups.

III) The headspace

The mental landscape is so importaint in good sexscenes because if your head isn’t in the game, the game can be quite dull and even a tad uncomfortable.

Really know your characters here. What do they like? What don’t they like? Do they even know themselves? And are they getting what they need?

How is the mood between them? Are they sweet and gentle, then use ‘soft’ words and slow pace. Ex. Her face was a waving lake of emotion, quiet but deep, and endlessly drawing. Or rough with each other? Then use action and fight words! Ex. I scratched off his shirt. He threw me against the wall.

Also, if there has to be a sense of urgency, use short sentences with moderate length-variation. Ex. She grabbed me. I kissed her back. I was on fire. My fingers slipped between her legs, and I was instantly drowning instead.

IIII) The act

Smut is all about how the chemistry prolongs and pushes the plot. The electricity, the edging and the wait, is going somewhere. It should always have a point. And yes, in my opinion, that point can be the sex in itself.

But, because it’s so awaited you, as the author, have to deliver a solid payoff. Smuts usually do not cut from panty drop to the next morning.

However, there’s no need to be too detailed. You can be vague and use imagery, you can even be subtle about the whole description of the sex itself, but also remember that sometimes a cup is a cup. It’s the hardest of balances, and unfortunately I can’t help you find yours.

But. Never use nicknames for genitals. No srsly. Never.

Instead, describe what the act is doing to the characters. Feeling hot? Short of breath? Tensing? Forgetting how to speak? To think?

And in general, don’t just focus on what happens below the belt. Give them lots of kissing and touching to build up the bliss.

Lastly, just a anatomical reminder, girls do not always orgasm at the end of sex, and the sex is not always over, when the guy does.

V) The cool

So, they’ve done the deed. The MCs have had their moment of ecstasy, and now what?

This is here where you discribe the time ‘after’, and theres usually a natural lull. If not for a chapter or two, then at least for a line.

At this stage we have defused some of the tension, by giving the MCs and the reader what they physically want. Next, it’s time to give them what them what they emotionally need. Is it to be loved? To trust again? To find confidence that they can handle what’s coming?

Once you’ve defined what your MCs truly need, you can start stressing the next set of strings, stretching them until they break in the next wave of conflict.

And remember: The plot should not be entirely defused just because the sexual tension has been, make something push your characters further, make their actions and what they did to each other, matter!

That’s that! I really hope you could find a piece of this advice that helped you! If not, please massage me and I’ll give it another go.

And fyi, this post was originally flagged because I used ‘smut’ in the title of it, so bewared if you are about to make such a post. If this gets flagged again, I will retype it in fan fiction.net ‘code’.

@themildestofwriters @stuffylana @mouwwie

-ciao-

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