As I don't have the time to work on new piece at the moment, I made this little remake of a remake.
Two years between the first version and this one.
This exercise proves to me that, as I've been thinking for some time, I've entered this delightful period where my sense of observation and my ability to see faults have progressed and are out of step with my skills, which need to be improved.
You can see the two versions side by side after the " keep reading " cut.