WIP Wednesday
Here's another bit from my WIP chapter 22 of Tactical Disadvantage, this time with an emphasis on the 'in progress' part of 'WIP'.
(This what my fics/chapters sometimes look like if I haven't fully figured out the emotional thread and I'm starting to get lost. This chapter has half a dozen pairs of red and blue text marking prompts and responses in significant emotional shifts to help me try to make sense of it. Plus blanks I haven't filled in and things I haven't decided yet.)
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She waited for Catra to take the bait, unsure if they were flirting. She gave a tiny smile for reassurance when Catra glanced sideways.
Catra’s expression clouded in response. She dropped Glimmer’s hand.
“Is everyone in position?” asked Catra, pointedly changing the subject as she fixed her gaze on the ship.
Glimmer stared at her. [Need an extra beat between dropping her hand and the next sentence, where her emotional state/thoughts stall before starting to rise.] She was torn between begging Catra to explain [demanding that Catra explain?] herself and shoving her with exasperation. “Uh, yeah,” she managed. “It shouldn’t be long now.”
[Catra says something professional-sounding.]
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RELEASE THE AUGUST CUT!!!! (tbhc doc)
OKAY SO the document has some incredibly embarrassing notes and ideas + its linked to my email with my full name so i'm not gonna share a link to it BUT here are some screenshots from it + pictures and stuff
re-reading some of these, i have no idea what the fuck i was talking about
i have no idea when these photos are from but they are sooooo tbhc the frontman #To Me
i liked the idea of the frontman coming with his band to the moon and being the in-house lounge band, (hence part one being "lounge singer shimmer") and playing there for a while. the part in star treatment about being a little too wild in the 70s, i think, could be imagined as the frontman is now a little past his peak - or at least, this is how the public/audience sees him. which i say because i think that a lot what builds up the character is the perception of how they are viewed by the people who consume the product, in this case, the art and the singer. i was reading annotations of tbhc songs on genius.com and i found this one for the lyric "maybe i was a little too wild in the 70s" that i wanted to use a bit as a background for the character: Alex Turner himself could never have been too wild in the 1970s; he was born in 1986. As such, here he is most likely playing the role of an aging rock star whose career peaked in the 70s and is now forced to get by as the resident singer at the futuristic Tranquillity Base Hotel and Casino on the moon. This narrator crops up a number times across the record and is used to draw parallels between his form of isolation and that of Turner.
i didn't want to see it as "forced" to take the job as the lounge singer, but instead as a way to seperate from earth, and who the singer was in the 70s - too wild. to be able to become a more refined artist (for lack of a better word). it might've been a post from you, or from a mutual or something, that talked about how alex turner will sing about the melacholia of achiving your dreams and the sadness that can come with that. i can't find the post but i do think this idea is very interesting, and can lend into the characterization of the frontman, and what drives his emotions. genius says this about star treatment: Turner personifies a washed up lead of the fictional band The Martini Police, and crafts a rich metaphor for how idolized celebrities are never seen except from a distance, similar to the light of a star. i think that the frontman should feel very disconnected to the people around him, less so to his band, but especially the guests at the hotel. just like how the monkeys went from am to tbhc, i wanted to add that a bit to the plot. the frontman, now sliding away from the 70s persona he had, wants to branch out and try something new. but sex sells! even though he no longer wants to be that guy, or play that role, he still wants to make something people will love. so its a bit about deciding to just do your own thing and create the art that you want to create without the worry of what the consumers will think. art, not a product.
i hope this makes sense. please tell me to shut up if it doesn't.
i also wanted to play a bit into the idea of double lives, and personas and playing character, although i haven't quite worked that out yet fully. that's why i called part seven i think it was??? "i suppose a singer must die." i also considered using "what a death i died."
i think also themes from the car can also be pulled into this, because i think, more than any other two am albums, the car and tbhc are a little connected. with mr schwartz and how he, the actor mr schwartz, is connected very much to the people working on the set, who help him get into character. big ideas with coming up with something new and being excited about it. "your horrible new sound" lyric in sculptures of anything goes. the lyric about keeping on the costume to use as a writing tool in body paint. themes of being a performer rather than being a lover and being in love. but idk man, maybe this makes no sense at all. but the car and tbhc are sister albums To Me because they are my two favourite am albums and they will always be loved by me. ALSO pretty visitors and the look into fame at such a young age. also the dream synopsis and the bourne identity by tlsp.
i also thought a bit about how the hotel might look. the taquería - "the information action ratio", a lounge, obviously, where they will perform, a pool, a spa, all that stuff. so its most like a resort than a hotel. and i thought the line "everybody's on a barge /floating down the endless stream of great tv" and the idea of giving the hotel a little movie theater called "the barge" as a little nod to the lyric. visually, 2001: a space odyssey is, of course, a huge inspiration in terms of looks. i don't know if you've seen 2001 but there's this spot on a space station where its all very white and blank except for massive, bright red chairs. i like the idea of decor like that, maybe even a spot just like that, to pay homage to the film. i think also "retro realism" is a good jumping point. how people from 50 years ago imagined what the future would be like. blade runner, that sort of thing.
i think also "retro realism" is a good jumping point. how people from 50 years ago imagined what the future would be like. blade runner, that sort of thing. 1950s astropunk. taking inspiration from older science fiction movies rather than newer ones. also vintage interiors and hotels that look like the one in the shining.
i did also think about the idea of leaning more into a horror, like psychological, but i think it should be more of a study in character. a tbhc horror film would still be cool though.
so yeah. idk if any of this makes sense and maybe i'm off my rocker and don't understand the album at all. but it's a little fun to think about.
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the photo album annotation thing reminded me of something they did in my kindergarten: whenever we drew something they'd ask us what the drawing was and then they'd just write anything we said, weird phrasing and incorrect grammar included, on the side of the drawing. it's VERY funny to read back on and seems like something eret would do with drawings yogurt makes for them :)
That is such a cute idea and definitely something I think Eret would do.. when yogurt is older they sometimes go through the drawings together I think <3
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tss.asenheim.org is a website that makes retro PC-98 visual novel games playable in your browser. super fun if you like old (16bit+) game graphics and visual novels, or are just curious about video game archival projects. i found it once, searched in vain for the link for weeks, and JUST found it again so i decided to post it here in case i lost it again.
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