#bc I was fine with seeing Ash as this strong stern sexy guy who takes himself too seriously

[yourqueenb]

I’m liking Guarded overall so far, but I have mixed feelings about the writing for Ash. On one hand, I actually like how stoic and serious about his job he is. He’s basically everything they tried to make Agent Gray from TPA out to be, but (unintentionally) funnier and sexier. Like I didn’t even need a chapter from his POV to know that he’s lowkey into MC.

On the other hand though, they’re pushing the “I need to protect MC at all costs” thing way too hard. He’s not even her personal bodyguard yet, so some of the things he was saying/doing/thinking just ended up making him almost sound like the stalker to me. And then him constantly thinking about how he can’t pursue her was just annoying. Like we get it, it would be unprofessional and you have some mysterious bad experience from the past. Let’s move on 🙄

I feel like the dual perspectives thing could be really good in this book, but PB has got to learn how to write internal conflict and show instead of tell. They also need to give these characters things to focus on outside of each other

#choices guarded #choices #choices stories you play #playchoices #choices app #like the first chapter was actually really enjoyable #but the second one started to feel off after the first scene #going from Ash tending to MC’s wounds to being teased by his coworkers about his feelings for her was really cute #best scenes so far #and him thinking about how his heart was racing 🥺 #but if they can’t get it together with everything else then they just need to stick to MC’s perspective #bc I was fine with seeing Ash as this strong stern sexy guy who takes himself too seriously #and is very obviously flustered by MC’s advances but is still trying to hide it #again we really didn’t neee the second chapter to know that #pixelberry studios #pixelberry