#its not even like twigkit has been hogging the book at this point! i gotta count but im pretty sure most of this has been alderheart!

[yuridovewing]

Oh god the “tell don’t show” syndrome is. Bad. It’s bad here.

#i know about twigbranch’s apprentice problem being solved offscreen but damn #so. needlepaw joins the kin. she takes violetkit with her. we do see that scene #but we skip to a gathering where THERES BEEN AN OFFSCREEN BATTLE?? #why are you skipping the battle in the battle cat books. especially when shit actually happened during it #why not show that through violetkits eyes?? that sounds terrifying for her! #show her desensitization to violence show how needletail functions in battle #but instead we get alderpaw being Told this secondhand bc we gotta get a useless alderheart chapter in #and we dont even get twigkits reaction bc WHAM 4 MOON TIMESKIP she’s already accepted this whooooo cares #bc alderhearts reaction to violent cats holdimg violetkit hostage is so much more important than her ORPHANED SISTER. #its not even like twigkit has been hogging the book at this point! i gotta count but im pretty sure most of this has been alderheart! #twigkit didnt get a pov until like chapter 5 or 6 and im 180 pages into this #im pretty sure she’s literally only had two up til this point. we REALLY couldnt sacrifice the pointless alderheart chapter? #im not opposed to multiple povs in one book. i am doing that. a lot of books do that really well (read bullet train) #but you have to balance them and decide ‘’what needs to go to this character to progress the plot’’ #they shot themselves in the foot with alder as a pov bc he adds jack shit at this point that twigbranch cant #avos liveread