"๐๐ฐ ๐ฆ๐ฃ ๐ฆ ๐ซ๐ข๐ข๐ก ๐๐ซ ๐ฆ๐ซ๐ฑ๐ฏ๐ฌ๐ก๐ฒ๐ ๐ฑ๐ฆ๐ฌ๐ซ. ๐ฆ ๐ด๐๐ซ๐ฑ ๐๐ฉ๐ฉ ๐ฌ๐ฃ ๐ถ๐ฌ๐ฒ ๐ฑ๐ฌ ๐๐ข ๐๐ด๐๐ฏ๐ข ๐ฆ'๐ช ๐ก๐ฌ๐ฆ๐ซ๐ค ๐ฑ๐ฅ๐ฆ๐ฐ ๐๐ถ ๐ฏ๐ข๐ฎ๐ฒ๐ข๐ฐ๐ฑ ๐ฐ๐ฌ ๐ก๐ฌ๐ซ'๐ฑ ๐ฐ๐๐ถ ๐ฆ ๐ซ๐ข๐ณ๐ข๐ฏ ๐ก๐ฆ๐ก ๐๐ซ๐ถ๐ฑ๐ฅ๐ฆ๐ซ๐ค ๐ฃ๐ฌ๐ฏ ๐ถ๐ฌ๐ฒ. ๐ฆ ๐ช๐ฆ๐ค๐ฅ๐ฑ ๐๐ข ๐ฅ๐ฒ๐ช๐๐ซ ๐๐ค๐๐ฆ๐ซ, ๐๐ฒ๐ฑ ๐ฑ๐ฅ๐๐ฑ ๐ก๐ฌ๐ข๐ฐ๐ซ'๐ฑ ๐ช๐ข๐๐ซ ๐ฆ ๐ฐ๐ฑ๐ฆ๐ฉ๐ฉ ๐ ๐๐ซ'๐ฑ ๐ก๐ข๐ฐ๐ฑ๐ฏ๐ฌ๐ถ ๐ถ๐ฌ๐ฒ ๐ด๐ฆ๐ฑ๐ฅ ๐ช๐ถ ๐๐๐ฏ๐ข ๐ฅ๐๐ซ๐ก๐ฐ ๐๐ซ๐ก ๐ฆ๐ฃ ๐ถ๐ฌ๐ฒ ๐ด๐ข๐ฏ๐ข ๐ฐ๐ช๐๐ฏ๐ฑ ๐ถ๐ฌ๐ฒ ๐ด๐ฌ๐ฒ๐ฉ๐ก๐ซ'๐ฑ ๐ฑ๐ข๐ฐ๐ฑ ๐ฆ๐ฑ. ๐ฅ๐ฌ๐ซ๐ข๐ฐ๐ฑ๐ฉ๐ถ ๐ฆ ๐ก๐ฌ๐ซ'๐ฑ ๐จ๐ซ๐ฌ๐ด ๐ด๐ฅ๐ถ ๐ฆ'๐ช ๐ด๐๐ฐ๐ฑ๐ฆ๐ซ๐ค ๐ช๐ถ ๐๐ฏ๐ข๐๐ฑ๐ฅ. ๐ฆ ๐ฏ๐ข๐ฃ๐ฒ๐ฐ๐ข๐ก ๐ ๐ฐ๐ฑ๐ฏ๐๐ซ๐ค๐ข ๐ด๐ฌ๐ช๐๐ซ ๐ฐ๐ฅ๐ข๐ฉ๐ฑ๐ข๐ฏ ๐๐ซ๐ก ๐ฑ๐ฅ๐ข ๐๐ฆ๐ฑ๐ ๐ฅ ๐ ๐ฒ๐ฏ๐ฐ๐ข๐ก ๐ช๐ข. ๐ฐ๐ฅ๐ข ๐ฑ๐ฒ๐ฏ๐ซ๐ข๐ก ๐ช๐ข ๐ฆ๐ซ๐ฑ๐ฌ ๐ ๐ฅ๐ฆ๐ก๐ข๐ฌ๐ฒ๐ฐ ๐๐ข๐๐ฐ๐ฑ. ๐ฑ๐ฅ๐ข๐ซ ๐ฑ๐ฅ๐ฆ๐ฐ ๐ฌ๐ฉ๐ก ๐ช๐๐ซ ๐ฐ๐ฑ๐ฒ๐ช๐๐ฉ๐ข๐ฐ ๐ฆ๐ซ ๐ฌ๐ซ๐ข ๐ก๐๐ถ ๐๐ซ๐ก ๐ฅ๐๐ฐ ๐ฑ๐ฅ๐ข ๐๐ฒ๐ก๐๐ ๐ฆ๐ฑ๐ถ ๐ฑ๐ฌ ๐ฐ๐ฑ๐ข๐๐ฉ ๐ฃ๐ฏ๐ฌ๐ช ๐ช๐ข. ๐ฅ๐ข ๐ด๐๐ฐ ๐ฃ๐ฌ๐ฏ๐ฑ๐ฒ๐ซ๐๐ฑ๐ข ๐ข๐ซ๐ฌ๐ฒ๐ค๐ฅ ๐ฑ๐ฌ ๐ฅ๐๐ณ๐ข ๐ ๐ก๐๐ฒ๐ค๐ฅ๐ฑ๐ข๐ฏ ๐ด๐ฆ๐ฑ๐ฅ ๐ ๐ช๐๐ฏ๐ฑ๐ถ๐ฏ ๐ ๐ฌ๐ช๐ญ๐ฉ๐ข๐ต ๐ฐ๐ฌ ๐ฐ๐ฅ๐ข ๐ฑ๐ฌ๐ฌ๐จ ๐ฅ๐ฆ๐ฐ ๐ญ๐ฉ๐๐ ๐ข. ๐ฆ๐ซ ๐ ๐ฐ๐ฑ๐ฏ๐๐ซ๐ค๐ข ๐ฑ๐ฒ๐ฏ๐ซ ๐ฌ๐ฃ ๐ข๐ณ๐ข๐ซ๐ฑ๐ฐ ๐ด๐ข ๐ฃ๐ข๐ฉ๐ฉ ๐ฆ๐ซ ๐ฉ๐ฌ๐ณ๐ข ๐๐ซ๐ก ๐ฑ๐ฅ๐๐ฑ ๐ด๐๐ฐ ๐ฑ๐ฅ๐๐ฑ.. ๐ฒ๐ซ๐ฑ๐ฆ๐ฉ ๐ด๐ข ๐ฉ๐๐ซ๐ก๐ข๐ก ๐ฆ๐ซ ๐ฑ๐ฅ๐ฆ๐ฐ ๐ฅ๐ข๐ฉ๐ฉ๐ฅ๐ฌ๐ฉ๐ข. ๐๐ซ๐ถ ๐ฎ๐ฒ๐ข๐ฐ๐ฑ๐ฆ๐ฌ๐ซ๐ฐ? ๐ค๐ฌ๐ฌ๐ก ๐ก๐ฌ๐ซ'๐ฑ ๐๐ข ๐ฐ๐ฑ๐ฒ๐ญ๐ฆ๐ก. ๐ซ๐ฌ๐ด ๐ฆ'๐ช ๐ฉ๐ข๐๐ณ๐ฆ๐ซ๐ค ๐๐ข๐ ๐๐ฒ๐ฐ๐ข ๐ฆ ๐ซ๐ข๐ข๐ก ๐๐ฉ๐ ๐ฌ๐ฅ๐ฌ๐ฉ ๐๐ฃ๐ฑ๐ข๐ฏ ๐ฏ๐ข๐ฉ๐ฆ๐ณ๐ฆ๐ซ๐ค ๐๐ฉ๐ฉ ๐ฌ๐ฃ ๐ฑ๐ฅ๐๐ฑ ๐ฐ๐ฅ๐ฆ๐ฑ. ๐ฑ๐ฅ๐๐ซ๐จ๐ฐ ๐ฃ๐ฌ๐ฏ ๐ฑ๐ฅ๐๐ฑ ๐๐ซ๐ก ๐ข๐ณ๐ข๐ฏ๐ถ๐ฌ๐ซ๐ข ๐ด๐ฌ๐ซ๐ก๐ข๐ฏ๐ฐ ๐ด๐ฅ๐ถ ๐ฆ'๐ช ๐ซ๐ฌ๐ฑ ๐ซ๐ฆ๐ ๐ข. ๐ฑ๐ฅ๐ฆ๐ฐ ๐ฆ๐ฐ ๐ด๐ฅ๐๐ฑ ๐ฅ๐๐ญ๐ญ๐ข๐ซ๐ฐ ๐ด๐ฅ๐ข๐ซ ๐ถ๐ฌ๐ฒ'๐ฏ๐ข ๐ซ๐ฆ๐ ๐ข"
So what didย happen after happily ever after?ย
To put it simply everything changed. The man formerly known asย โthe Beastโ started with his name and I guess with good reason too. In Fabletown heโs known as Cain Jonah Beaufort and if you were curious as to why, look no further.
( ๐๐ช๐ฒ๐ท. ย a Hebrew name meaning spear or possessed. Both of which he felt described himself when he moved to Fabletown. Specifically he felt as dangerous as a spear, but not quite himself - as if he were possessed. Once he lost Belle he felt that he lost everything including his sense of self. There are moments in the day that he doesnโt even recognize himself or feels that heโs in some dream watching someone move his hands and his legs.
( ๐๐ธ๐ท๐ช๐ฑ. a Hebrew name meaning dove. There is a lot of irony as the last thing he feels is peace and is under no impression that he brings peace to those around him. The meaning he was more interested in was the sailorโs nickname for bad luck. Of course it went both ways. He felt that there was some bad luck on his part that he had to move and watch his life change, but a smaller part wonders if itโs less about the circumstance and more about him or that he deserves it for everything heโs done.
( ๐๐ฎ๐ช๐พ๐ฏ๐ธ๐ป๐ฝ. a French surname meaning โbeautifulโ and โstrong place, fortressโ. This was the one piece of himself that he kept from the Homeland and was possibly the only thing he was proud of or felt that he emulated. He felt that his physical appearance was the one thing he had for his advantage in Fabletown. The second part was more of a reminder that he once was strong like a fortress and wants to get back to his own self or at least the version of himself he was when he was with Belle.
I know youโre thinking.ย โbut that doesnโt sooooooound like the Beast.โย Listen it all checks out. Hereโs his birthday and character traits and you can compare for yourself.
Cain and The Beast share the same birthday of October 31, 1981 making him 37 years old and a ๐ผ๐ฌ๐ธ๐ป๐น๐ฒ๐ธ. His sun sign isnโt surprising to anyone. While he can be ๐
๐ถ๐๐๐พ๐๐๐ถ๐๐ andย ๐๐๐๐๐๐๐พ๐๐๐, he has an easier time fitting the negative stereotypes of scorpios. Heโs more known to be ๐น๐ธ๐ผ๐ผ๐ฎ๐ผ๐ผ๐ฒ๐ฟ๐ฎ, ๐ฐ๐พ๐ช๐ป๐ญ๐ฎ๐ญ, and ๐ป๐ฎ๐ผ๐ฎ๐ท๐ฝ๐ฏ๐พ๐ต above all else.ย
Yeah, itโs no wonder heโs been harboring so much anger and negative energy since Belle left. Just how much did our prince fall? Well since you asked..
Heading Gastonโs words, he vowed that if he were going to be painted as a beast, then he was going to show them aย ๐ซ๐ฎ๐ช๐ผ๐ฝ. In Fabletown he didnโt hesitate to align himself with the ๐ฟ๐ฒ๐ต๐ต๐ช๐ฒ๐ท๐ผ and fit in quite easily. To everyoneโs surprise, he got a job working at ๐ฆ๐ธ๐ท๐ญ๐ฎ๐ป๐ต๐ช๐ท๐ญย as a ๐ญ๐ช๐ท๐ฌ๐ฎ๐ปย by night and a ๐ถ๐ธ๐ญ๐ฎ๐ต by day. Having never worked a day in his life, it was even stranger to hear that he hasnโt quit yet. The reason heโs kept these jobs is simple. Itโs a consistent source of validation that his ego especially needs and although he would never admit it, itโs nice to feel wanted. Having peopleโs eyes on him at Wonderland is a different feeling than it was in the Homeland. Back there he was only seen as a monster that held a woman in his castle against her own will. Here, in Fabletown, he almost feels appreciated... even if both parties are under the influence of alcohol and other drugs.
I know, how sad! Donโt you worry, young one. Heโs more motivated than ever. Just look for yourself.
As silly as it sounds, he main motivation is to win Belle back because he thinks that is the solution to all his problems. With his logic, that would make everything go back to the way it was before they moved to Fabletown. Which was possibly the only time he recalls being truly happyย
Once he realizes that isnโt the answer, itโll change to focus on proving himself to anyone that will listen and also himself. He currently doesnโt think heโs capable of much else right now and at some point heโll hopefully prove himself wrong by getting out of his current mindset and pushing himself outside of his comfort zone.
All of his current motivations are centered around regaining control over his life and getting his self esteem back. Itโs less about the nostalgia and more about feeling of being untouchable again. Which is what he intends to do.ย
What? Did I forget something? Oh you want the tea. My God, Cain was right you are needy, but very well. Sip away.
Eventually (when he gets past this hurt phase and drug abuse) heโll realize that he can be the person he wants to be without Belle or anyone really. Finding his autonomy would be the first step in his โrecoveryโ which would ideally lessen his drug usage as well and maybe he wouldnโt overcompensate at the gym anymore either. Itโs amazing what the fear of getting a beer gut will do to someone.
He would also find another outlet for his aggression (probably not something creative like art, but weโll see if thatโs actually his style) and once that inner peace is restored it would help him switch sides since he would cease to do things out of spite.
Heโll realize his mistakes and (finally) grow as a person. Even though the original version of him that he wants to go back to was somewhat of an achillean, the final stage of his โrecoveryโ would be to recognize he isnโt invincible and be able to sit with that thought. Itโs a dark rabbit hole Cain doesnโt quite let himself go down yet
To avoid getting hurt his general relationships (if any) at the moment are quite superficial and even then heโs still pretty distant. Part of that is because heโs afraid of what other people will see when he lets them in and the other part is that theyโll leave him as a result. Heโd never admit it but he secretly wants someone to love him and accept him as is.
All in all, heโs generally an asshole to most people he encounters to drive them away so they donโt even have a chance to get to know him before leaving. This also benefits him as itโs his way of making everyone as miserable as he feels thinking it will help fill the void he feels (which it does not)
I hope that satisfied your needs, but since Iโm feeling generous today Iโve included his interview post Exodus. Enjoy!
INTERVIEW WITH CAIN AKA THE BEAST.
โ๐ ๐จ ๐๐ ๐ช๐ ๐ฆ ๐๐๐๐ ๐๐๐ ๐ฆ๐ฅ ๐ฅ๐๐ ๐ผ๐ฉ๐ ๐๐ฆ๐ค?
Cain shrugs. It was the first time heโs really given the question much thought. โIt was leave or die. So I guess it was an inconvenience more than anything,โ he responds after a moment. Comparing his life in Fabletown with his old one doesnโt do him much good. He can see the similarities especially with the isolation and for a moment he wonders if anythingโs really changed since he left. โHow am I supposed to feel about it? Excited? Scared? Fables were disappearing so I wasnโt planning on staying there.โ
๐๐๐ค ๐๐ฅ ๐๐๐ฃ๐ ๐๐๐๐ฆ๐ค๐ฅ๐๐๐ ๐ฅ๐ ๐๐๐๐ ๐๐ ๐ฝ๐๐๐๐๐ฅ๐ ๐จ๐? ๐ป๐ ๐ช๐ ๐ฆ ๐๐๐ค๐ค ๐ฅ๐๐ โ๐ ๐๐๐จ๐ ๐ฃ๐๐?
โNo. It was pretty similar,โ he replies without entertaining other thoughts. His answer wasnโt a lie either. He believes he acts pretty much the same in both worlds. โThe only thing that changed was my employment which I thought Iโd never do.โ Itโs the second part of the question that makes him hesitate. A flood of memories suddenly wash over him to remind him of a simpler time, one when he thought he was genuinely happy, and had everything he ever wanted. Then as quickly as it came, he forces himself to come back to reality and a lie immediately escapes his lips, โno. I donโt miss it.โ
๐๐๐๐ฃ๐ ๐๐ค ๐ช๐ ๐ฆ๐ฃ ๐๐๐ง๐ ๐ฃ๐๐ฅ๐ ๐ก๐๐๐๐ ๐๐ ๐ฝ๐๐๐๐๐ฅ๐ ๐จ๐ ๐ ๐ฃ โ๐๐จ ๐๐ ๐ฃ๐?
It suddenly felt as if Cain were in Fabletown for the first time again. No matter how hard he tried he couldnโt quite remember the name of any place - or perhaps he just never paid attention. It felt that he fell into the same routine of going to work, getting drunk or high, going home, and repeating. After a while a name comes to mind and he lets out a chuckle in the irony. โI hate to admit it, but itโs probably Gastonโs Tavern. Thereโs not a lot going on in his head, but he knows how to make a proper drink.โ
โ๐ ๐จ ๐๐ ๐ช๐ ๐ฆ ๐๐๐๐ ๐๐๐ ๐ฆ๐ฅ ๐๐๐๐๐? ๐ป๐ ๐ช๐ ๐ฆ ๐ฅ๐๐๐๐ ๐๐ฅ ๐ค๐๐ ๐ฆ๐๐ ๐๐ ๐๐๐๐๐๐, ๐ฃ๐๐๐ฆ๐๐๐ฅ๐๐, ๐ ๐ฃ ๐๐๐๐ฅ๐๐๐ฃ?
Much to his dismay, heโs engulfed in more memories.This time heโs forced to remember turning away the fairy that ended up changing his life. He can feel his anger sink into his stomach and his fist clench momentarily. He releases the pressure as he considers the question what if I had let her stay? A small part of him believes nothing would have happened, but another part knew she sought him out and would have casted her spell on him anyway. After taking a deep breath, he answers the question that was actually asked. โMagic should be heavily regulated. On the other hand, unsolicited magic should be banned. If we can have laws on consent, it should apply to magic as well.โ
๐๐๐ ๐๐ ๐ช๐ ๐ฆ ๐ฅ๐๐๐๐ ๐๐๐๐๐๐ ๐๐๐ฅ๐ฅ๐๐ โ๐๐ โ๐๐๐๐๐ โ๐ ๐ ๐?
โWho?โ He immediately asks. He was never good with names or so he wants people to believe. Of course he remembered her. After a brief pause, he continues speaking,โif sheโs careless enough to wander through the woods by herself without even glancing around to see whatโs there, sheโs careless enough to get murdered.โ To his surprise he remembered her story better than he thought or at least remembered the version he rewrote for himself. โAnyone really could have done it. She didnโt seem all that bright or attentive. It was almost like she asked for it.โ
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Daybreak Academy: Chapter 19
A Long Spoon
Summary: In which Aced joins in on karaoke night.
Word Count: 1,439
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โ โฌ โ โฌ โ โฌ โ โฌ โ โฌ โ โฌ โ โฌ โ โฌ โ
Aced wasn't an idiot; he knew he had been placed in the proverbial dog house for the past month. He and Ira refused to look each other in the eye. Invi would just barely look at him, her scrutinizing eye glaring at him for another screw up. Gula and Ava seemed to have forgiven him- but there was still the fear of him lashing out again. They didn't say it, but he could feel it.
The only witness who seemed to have completely forgave and forgotten what Aced had done was Ephemer. But even then, Aced could still feel the boy's discomfort when Aced raised his voice. And he tried really hard not to; he could face a lifetime of rejection, as long as it didn't come from a kid he liked. Unfortunately, Ephemer was the only kid Aced truly liked- even more so than the students of Aced's own house. It was awful, and pathetic, but it didn't change the situation any.
This wouldn't have happened if he hadn't had lost his temper. He had gone to tell his house not to interrupt the Unicornis debates, and yet some smart aleck did anyway. In all honestly, the stunt had likely been prepared some time in advance. The Moogle that was once operated the school store admitted to having sold several firecrackers to students over the past month or so, and that was when all Aced saw was red. He threw that Moogle out Invi's office, he almost ripped its head off, and when Ira tried to get Aced to cool down, Aced had punched him square in the jaw.
He needed to get out and do something. Anything was better than just sitting here and moping about his own temper problems.
The headmaster looked over at the calendar. March 29. Sunday. This was the week that the Vulpes house was holding their open mic night. Wearily, he then turned his head to the nearest clock. He had enough time to make it. Would Ava even be at the auditorium? The special activities each house had was typically all student lead- the headmasters themselves had little to do with it. Maybe he could convince a student to come with him, like Ephemer, or one of Ephemer's friends.
Who was Ephemer even friends with now anyway?
Aced buried his face in his hands and groaned. He really needed to take a page out of Ephemer's book and try to make friends at the drop of a hat. Maybe he wouldn't feel so alone if he did. How many friends did he have outside of the other headmasters and Ephemer? None, that's how many.
โI really need to get out of this office.โ Aced grumbled to himself. And with that, he forced himself up off his chair and started to head out the door.
A part of him felt like he was sleepwalking as he headed to the auditorium. This month had honestly been so much of a blur; being under a scrutinized eye tended to do that, he believed. His mind didn't even quite register when he entered the auditorium and sat down on one of the plush seats. Aced dimly looked around the room as some last minute preparations were made; students adjusting the lights, another was making sure the microphone was properly connected, and a few others were eagerly waiting to be the first to show off their various acts of the night.
โWell, hello there stranger.โ a kind voice said to Aced, causing him to jump a little in surprise. He looked up to see the school's music director. April, was it? April Tremaine. She was older than him, but was about Ava's height. Small, thin, and looking like she could snap in two if hugged the wrong way- that was April Tremaine.
โGood evening Ms. Tremaine.โ Aced greeted, sounding far more worn out than he anticipated. โDo you mind if I sit in on open mic night?โ
โNot at all!โ the woman smiled. โAnyone's allowed to go up there if they feel like it- even us teachers.โ
Something in Aced ignited with a miniscule hope.
โCan I?โ he immediately asked. April raised a neatly manicured eyebrow in -what appeared to be- amusement.
โOf course!โ she agreed, grinning at him. โI'm MC-ing tonight, so I'll pencil you in.โ
โThanks you Ms. Tremaine.โ
โNot a problem, honey.โ came the genuine reply. Aced smiled at her. He didn't know much about the music director, baring the fact that she had also attended Daybreak Academy back in the day. If memory served, she also had a child attending the school now. But he couldn't remember if it was a boy or a girl, or even what their name was.
Aced gave a sigh as the first act started to go on stage. He tried to relax, trying to understand these kids with voices not as great as they thought, but there was just something nagging at him. Just as the thought came to him, Tremaine was announcing for him to come up on stage. The defeated bear made his way up to the stage and took his place at the microphone.
These kids aren't even going to know this songโฆ he bitterly thought to himself. But then again, the song wasn't exactly from his generation either. Aced gave Tremaine a small nod, signaling that he was ready. She then nodded back, giving the kids in charge of the sound system the cue to keep the microphone powered on. Half singing, half monologuing, Aced started the song.
โHave a little song, won't take long. Sing it right, once or twice. Oh lordy me, didn't I shake sugaree? Everything I've got is done and pawned...โ
As Aced droned the lyrics to the best of his ability, he didn't feel any better. If there was any good side to humiliating himself, it was that no one was really paying attention to him. Would he even be able to recognize the students in his house? What did it matter if they saw him here? Might even teach them some humility.
โChew my tobacco, spit my juice. We'd raise Cain but it ain't no bit of use. Oh lordy me, didn't I shake sugaree? Everything I've got is done and pawned. Everything I've got is done and pawned. Everything I've gotโฆ is done and pawned...โ
With the song concluded, Aced took a small step away from the mic. He gave the audience a weak smile before stepping down from the stage. As Aced got off the stage, there were only five students giving moderate applause. Not bad. He didn't expect anyone to clap for him.
He didn't even see the happy thumbs up Tremaine was giving him. Instead, he sat right back down in the seat he was in before. This time, however, there was a girl with carrot-red hair with two low pigtails sitting in the seat next to him. Aced was quick to notice that the girl tensed as he sat down. It bothered him so much that he turned at her, and asked without thinking;
โTell me- am I really that unapproachable?โ
At first, the girl could do nothing but stare at him in shock. It eventually turned into one more conflicted.
โThose who eat with the devil should have a long spoon.โ she decided in a rather quiet voice. At Aced's bewildered expression, she clarified; โIt's easier to be cautious when you don't know how someone will react. You areโฆ an unpredictable headmaster. You try to keep to yourself, but you are still loyal to your students. The members of Ursus tend to do reckless things because they know you would back them up. N-not in a mean way, or anything! They respect you because you respect them. They trust you because you would fight tooth and nail for them if you could. Even if you were the least approachable headmaster, you still have one of the biggest hearts.โ
For a moment, the only response Aced could give was a blank stare.
โIs that really how you feel?โ
With a small gulp, the girl nodded.
โWhat house are you in?โ
The girl averted her eyes. โVulpes.โ
โOf course you are.โ he sighed. โAva's house has always been filled with blunt, but kind, kids like you.โ
And with that, Aced relaxed a little as the rest of the open mic night went on. Strelitzia, on the other hand, was so confused that she refused to look at anything. Had she been too blunt? Geez, she wouldn't have done that two months ago, that's for sure. But still, what was all that about...?
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galaโs writing tips: Dialogue Edition
Iโve been thinking about doing this for a while now, so here you go! Iโm gonna try to do a series of posts with quasi-abbreviated writing tips, from me to you, on various topics. If you disagree with me on any of my advice, cool! Iโm just one teacher, and this is just my perspective. Either way, take what you want and leave the rest <3 And happy writing!!
Advice for...Writing Dialogue!
Forget every awful thing your English teachers have ever told you about the wordย โsaid.โย โSaidโ is the ONLY dialogue tag we should ever really be using, with few exceptions. Dialogue tags have taken on too much of the burden these days when it comes to characterizing speech, when they should be near invisible. Especially when used too copiously, flashy dialogue tags can tend to be cumbersome and annoying to read, slowing down your pacing and constantly reminding the reader that they are Reading Dialogueโข when they should just be immersed in the scene. I feel this has a lot to do with the influence of film and television on our writing, and the incessant urging of high school AP Lit teachers that we NEVER EVER REPEAT WORDS EVER. But thatโs bullshit. First of all, repetition has a lot of positive functions, and I hate this blanket moratorium on it as if itโs evil. Second of all, fiction is NOT film and television. Keep that in mind forever!! And instead of relying on fancy tags to spice things up and characterize your dialogue, use actions and description to imply your characterโs state of mind as they speak.ย ย
When writing dialects, avoid overdoing the phonetic spellings and excessive punctuation. It tends to be cringy, and trust me when I say, you will never capture a dialect perfectly by spelling accents out the way they sound phonetically in your own subjective head. Instead, when writing original fiction, do your best toย describe the dialect ahead of time (itโs okay if itโs not 100% perfectly accurate in every way--remember that fiction is not film and itโs not real life--lots more goes into writing a compelling character than just their dialect) and just type the words the characters are saying, as theyโre normally spelled. If youโre writing fanfiction, keep in mind that your reader already knows how your characterโs voice sounds, so thereโs no need to (literally) spell it out for them. Remember that CADENCE (tempo and rhythm of speech) and DICTION (word choice) are much more important in terms of characterizing a dialect and a speaker than simple phonetic spellings in the language.ย
When writing dialogue in scenes, donโt forget to address BODIES and ENVIRONMENT. The first thing you really want to avoid isย โFloating Head Syndrome,โ ie: speaking characters floating in a vacuum who do not have bodies. A good way to solve this is to give your characters something specific to do while talking, which addresses the body and also allows characters to manipulate and/or move through the setting, creating opportunities for description. Mixing action with description of setting in scenes with dialogue will also help you pace your dialogue more effectively, as I know pacing is one of the hardest things to figure out and improve when writing dialogue.
When writing scenes of dialogue, avoid excessive interiority between exchanges. Interior monologue is definitely OKAY, but you donโt want it to be outright replacing writing that focuses on setting and action. Spoken dialogue in conjunction with only or too much inner-monologue will result in Floating Head Syndrome.ย
You want your dialogue to move FAST, usually, and the way to make your dialogue feel fast is through efficient pacing. Excessive description of anything in the middle of a dialogue exchange, including setting, exposition, and inner-monologue, is going to slow down your pacing and make your dialogue feel cumbersome. So will overzealous tags. The best way to practice and improve your pacing is honestly just to READ A LOT. Donโt take pacing cues from film and television. Read the masters and read them a lot. A few really great writers to study for pacing in dialogue are Ernest Hemingway, Raymond Carver, Ann Beattie, Raymond Chandler, and James M. Cain. Seriously, read Cainโs crime novelย Double Indemnity. Youโve never seen dialogue so thick with tension and so beautifully paced.
Next: How to make your dialogue sound realistic? This is a big question. First of all, itโs best to try and remember that in fiction, dialogue doesnโt have to be โrealistic.โ Dialogue serves all sorts of purposes aside from simply communicating information, and the way that it sounds or appears on the page can often be a function of the writerโs style as well as characterization of the speaking character. Fiction writing is not method acting. In fiction, our main medium is LANGUAGE, not pictures and sounds, and itโs actually really important to remember this. With language, we can simulate and even mix all five senses. We can create impressionistic images and layer in symbolic or ambiguous meaning as well. There are no rules that say dialogue must be realistic.ย
Continued: Instead of focusing on making your dialogueย โrealistic,โ focus making sure each speaking character has their own AGENDA, ie: characters hear what they want to hear and will often respond accordingly. THIS is how real people talk--past each other. Never have two characters answer one another in a repetitive and direct fashion. The least realistic thing ever is the idea that when two people are talking, the conversation at hand is the ONLY thing theyโre focused on. A really good exercise for practicing agenda is to write a scene in which two characters are discussing something serious, but only indirectly, ie: they can never overtly refer to or announce the exact thing theyโre discussing. Think about it like: The conversation theyโre having is right here, but the thing theyโre talking about isย โover there.โ Itโs in the room, but itโs not on the table. A really good short story for studying how this can be done well is Ernest Hemingwayโsย โHills Like White Elephants.โย No, Iโm not telling you to write like Ernest Hemingway, but he writes agenda better than any other writer out there.
Moving on: When starting a scene, skip the small talk. When two characters meet up at the bar, itโs not necessary to go through the wholeย โHey, how are you?โย โIโm fine, how are you?โย โJust super. The weatherโs been nice.โย โI agree.โ This is boring. Itโs implied. Itโs not doing any work. So skip it. Again, fiction is not real life. If you sit and listen to an irl conversation between two people sitting at the next table at Starbucks, you will find yourself bored as hell in about two minutes. Thatโs because irl, thereโs so much filler, and in fiction, we get to cut it out. Because itโs boring. This is just another reflection of how dialogue does NOT have to be โrealistic.โ Because instead, you can toss off the small talk in a single sentence of description and then get straight to the point: They met at the bar. Frank ordered a gin gimlet while Leonard ordered a vodka soda. After a little small talk, Frank cleared his throat and finally asked the big question. โAre you sleeping with my wife?โ he said. Here, we have a little writing to set the scene and establish the setting and context, and then we get right to the tension.ย
That said, in conclusion: TENSION is the most important factor to consider when writing a scene of dialogue. Tension can come in all forms. It can be romantic, menacing, ominous, sexual, etc. But there must be something rubbing against the grain, otherwise, your reader is going to get bored. Tension killers include all of the above: small talk, too much exposition (ie: establishing plot points and background context), characters talking to one another in a direct and one-dimensional manner, pacing that is too fast (not enough attention to setting and/or bodies), pacing that is too slow (clunky dialogue tags and too much inner-monologue/description between each dialogue exchange).ย
To incite tension, make sure you are always aware of a couple different things: 1.) What is at stake in the scene? ie: What has the potential to be lost and/or gained? It can be small or big, but there must be something at stake; 2.) What do your characters want, and what is keeping them from getting the thing they want?; 3.) Is the passage of time, OR the environment playing a role at all, in terms of adding tension or conflict to the scene?; 4.) What is the ultimate purpose of this scene in the overall text, and how can you deepen that purpose by addressing BOTH plot and character?ย
I hope this helps in any way!! As always, if you ever have a writing question, drop me an ask. I have been writing and teaching writing to many different skill levels for a long time, and ll do my best!! <3 -gala
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