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how about "love"?

[Send me a word from my WIP!]

There is no love in this story. Only suffering.

Lol, just kidding (?) Here’s one:

Indeed, there are many stories that the man who meets with Princess Satsuki cannot tell.

He cannot tell, for instance, the story of a demon who had fallen so deeply in love with a human that she would do anything for her.

He can only say, when Princess Satsuki asks if a demon could ever truly care for a human being, that he hopes so, he thinks, somewhere deep in his heart that is freezing away.

Anonymous said: heart

The demon clutches the spot, his hands closing over the heart that is no longer his and his alone, and he thinks, more than anything else, It is so heavy.

Anonymous said: brain

Well, I got brains, even though it honestly should just be a singular brain, haha:

“I’ll eat your soul,” said the creature. “And suck your blood and knock out your brains….”

Anonymous said: sister

His mother and his mama are outside waiting for him. His sister is there too, her arms crossed, what might be considered guilt covering her face.

Anonymous said: air

By this time, the mother is quite soaked to the skin. The cold, biting air seems ever colder against her, and when the wind blows, go-o, go-o, the mother wonders if she is not going to soon be a corpse upon the ground, too.

Anonymous said: fire

“You are indeed very sorry,” says the empress. The fire in her words has vanished now. There’s an air of calm to her, as though she is very tired of this whole affair.

Anonymous said: scissor

Surprisingly, no instances yet!

But scissors will play a part later on…

Anonymous said: dark

She ran hands through her dark hair, and red demon noticed more than he had ever noticed that beneath his mama’s eyes were great black circles that were so dark they almost seemed to resemble bruises.

Anonymous said: rainbow

The last draft only has one instance of “rainbow,” and I think I like one from the original short story this whole novel was based on better:

The empress was exceptionally beautiful. She was blessed with magic, and everyone knew it, for her eyes shone like bright red rubies, and her hair was a sparkling, never-ending rainbow of colors. Light followed her every movement, and to be in her presence was to be filled with beauty in every fiber of your being.

Anonymous said: wall

Now, Ryuko tries her very hardest to make it seem that she is not crying. The last time Mouse called her by that name that boils her very blood, Ryuko had responded by grabbing him by his tail and threatening to throw him to the wall.

Anonymous said: surreptitious

This is not a word in my usual vocabulary, lol. But how about “secret”?

Across the years, the man will meet with the girl many times, and she will come to him in the way he had told her was best, through the secret passages hidden in the palace’s underground tunnels, because he cannot always be rescuing her from the cold and snow, you see, because he hasn’t much time left in the world before he really does become a ghost.

Anonymous said: pets

I got nothin’…

But if this is about the pets people have, don’t worry! Guts is in the story, and he actually does stuff:

The mother had been trying very hard not to give up hope ever since they had discovered the girl gone, but as the sun shines down upon her and the father and the dog that they had brought along in a fruitless attempt to smell the poor child out, she feels very hopeless indeed.

Anonymous said: cold

Since this fairytale takes place in a land that’s magicked to be frozen over, there is a lot of cold, aha.

Here’s one:

I am a fool, then, the princess thinks as she runs out into the snow, and she feels it must be true. She is not clad in her usual attire for leaving the palace, wearing only her practice clothes and fine palace slippers not meant even for grass, let alone ice and snow. A chill comes over her and deep inside her, a kind she had once thought she was used to from being in the presence of her mother, but the intensity of this cold is more than the princess could have ever imagined, and even her older master manages a mangled, ravaged cry at her actions.

Anonymous said: empty

All the beds are empty. The doctor sits on one with his wife and daughter and dog, kishi, kishi, creak, creak. The man sits on another with his own daughter, gii, gii, squeak, squeak.

Anonymous said: face

His face burns as green as the trees and as green as his blood at the sight of her. He shakes his head, as though he is simply imagining this girl left collapsed in the snow, but there is a wonderfully sweet scent in the air that he recognizes with a sickening, sinking feeling to be the scent of her blood.

Anonymous said: bones

I only have something that I’ve already shared:

But the little red demon knows this story. It is the story that fills his blood and built his bones, and it is the story he will dedicate his life to believing.

Anonymous said: eyes

“You would rather die, wouldn’t you?” he asks. He is crying, and his words are not comprehensible, though he knows that they should not be comprehensible to the girl anyway, spoken in the language of the demons. He says, “If I had the power to wake you, and if you opened your eyes and saw me, you would rather die than accept my help, wouldn’t you?”

Anonymous said: shadow

I got shadows, and I’m not sure that it’s the right usage of that idiom, lol, but:

But that day, that night, that time when the two first come together, and they are bathed in a dim but powerful starlight, the girl does not speak a word. She is silent, her body blue and her breathing nearly vanished. The fluttering of her heart, and the once-loud haa, haa, wheeze, gasp that had filled the air, are both only shadows of what they had been only moments before.

Anonymous said: bad

Princess Satsuki nods very solemnly. “A fourth stillbirth would be a bad omen,” she says.

Thank y’all for sending so many words! I don’t think I’ll take any more ‘cause I might just reveal the whole novel in little bits like this, but if you’re curious, you can read the little (incomplete) short story that this book started from right over here. It’s not very good, and the plot has undergone a lot of changes, but… maybe it gives an idea of what the final product will look like.

(Also, I was inspired by Seanan McGuire’s Sailor Moon fairytales, which are super sweet, and y’all should totally read them.)

#criticaaaaaaaal #replies #writing #blood #klk fic #klk fairytale au #ahhh thank you for all the interest in my project!#it is my baby :')#i think i might try to draw some stuff for it but i'm not much of an artist ^^;#kill la kill

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