#like i would believe that for instance. julian would know about road work ahead and pull it out for every station maintenance scenario

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actually its a lot harder to pull of the ‘drop a lil meme in here and there and make it not pull you out of the narrative too much for the sake of an audience wink’ thing in like. a series like locked tomb than a series like star trek. star trek is set at most a couple centuries from now. presumably there’s a lot of cultural flotsam still filtering through the populace. the holodeck jokes often function, for example, on the interplay between ‘pop culture jokes that humans know about but aliens are brand new to’ and it’s extremely funny. tom paris’s silly flash gordon adventures are silly because he’s, in-universe, a nerd about really obscure stuff none of his earth coworkers think is interesting. or like. you guys remember the gag in eccleston’s run of doctor who where lady cassandra plays ‘classical music’ and it’s toxic by britney spears? that bit was ten years ago and it’s still hysterical because the joke is worked into the text in a way that allows it to be funny to both the characters AND the audience. tomb meanwhile is ostensibly TEN THOUSAND YEARS from now so i know these guys dont know none pizza . the joke’s not for the characters. i know that’s all you muir. hey reader remember none pizza? what a laugh that was and yes. it WAS. but now ive been yanked bodily from what was building up to be a seriously tense and interesting scene and you did it to remind me of none pizza? dude i was busy now im distracted

#locked tomb #yes it's funny for mr god lyctor man. but its not funny for his audience of other characters #im trying not to complain TOO much bc i really did enjoy it so much more on the second read #but like i always want to drop references while im writing too and then i remember that if im not very smooth with them #they WILL divert from the story in a way that is not funny just flat and confusing #im still not sure if im good at funny. but i know when funny does and doesnt work #like i would believe that for instance. julian would know about road work ahead and pull it out for every station maintenance scenario #and that miles would dope slap him because he also knows about road work ahead #but the characters also HAVE to be in on the joke or i think it's way less funny . if the joke is just for the audience then it's #i dont know. flatter . it doesnt have to be funny for the characters in the SAME way it's funny for the audience #but maybe im just very particular #q