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If your character has a trait you consider one of their key features and it is never challenged in anyway, that trait will probably have about as much impact as their “tiny mole on their left buttcheek” trait. 

For that trait NOT to fall totally flat, one or more of these things need to happen:

The trait exacerbates a situation in a bad way. (An extremely honest and trusting character reveals an important secret to the Big Bad’s lackey)

The character is given a choice to either act according to their traits or to subvert them. Often the subversion has the better outcome. They either maintain their trait and take a risk, or character development ensues. (A greedy character must escape. Leaving behind their riches goes against their very being, but it would allow them to escape easier. If they try to take some of their treasure with them, they do so at massive risk.)

 The character is put in an environment or must work with a person that opposes their trait. (An extremely tidy person must live in their slob cousin’s filthy apartment for a week. / The character has a debilitating fear of being alone and they are stranded on their own on an island.)

The character is put in a situation that requires them to suppress their trait (A hotheaded character needs to have polite discourse with someone they hate)

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Hi I am not so great at writing facial features. Like, describing faces in a story. I would love some tips about how to do it from you. :)

Oh boy, there’s so many things you can describe! 

 Think about your character’s appearance and if there’s anything distinctive about a certain trait. Maybe they have an unusually small nose. Maybe they have larger ears that stick out, maybe their eyebrows are incredibly thick. There’s so may different things to describe!

Looking at pictures of other people can really help because you can compare pictures and see how different their features are. Try looking for anything noticeable that sticks out to you as a defining feature. There’s also a number of charts on Facebook that depict the different types/shapes of eyes, eyebrows, noses, etc. I find those incredibly helpful to look at, so it might be worth checking some out!

Here’s a list of things to consider when describing facial features:

Actual structure, like cheekbones; is their face more angular and sharp, or soft? Do they have noticeable cheekbones? Are they high or low? Is the jaw defined or no? Squared or rounded?

Shape of the head; is it ovular? Circular? More squared? Is it long? 

Nose; is it a large or small nose? What is the shape like? Is it hooked? Turned up? Wide and rounded? Thin and pointed? Straight? Crooked?

Eyebrows; consider the thickness and shape. They could be thick or thin, large or small, straight or arched.

Lips; are they large? Thin? Full and plump, or flatter? 

Misc.; does the character have any other noticeable features on their face? Freckles? Scars? Blemishes? Pimples? Birthmarks? Moles?

Eye shape; shape of the eyes can be a little harder to convey, as many eyes are rather similar in shape (some variation of a sideways teardrop shape). Still, you can note if the eyes are more heavy-lidded, if there’s any wrinkles or laugh lines around the eyes, if the eyes are turned up at the ends or down. 

Also, you could include whether your character has a monolid or not (basically whether the crease around the eye is visible or not, this is often seen in Asian men and women, especially Eastern Asian, and Indigenous peoples, though not always, and many other people throughout the world have them as well.) 

***If you have an Asian character and you’re trying to describe their eyes, please take the time to look into how to properly describe them and certain phrases and words that should be avoided. I’ve included a link below about describing “Asian eyes” and the history behind it:

http://writingwithcolor.tumblr.com/post/101967940901/wwc-guide-describing-asian-eyes

One last thing is, you don’t have to spend a large amount of time describing your characters and every single detail on their face. Give your readers enough information to satisfy them, and then allow your readers’ imaginations to do the rest. So totally go ahead and describe your characters, but don’t feel obligated to include a description of every single facial feature of your character.

Here are some charts I found that may give you ideas (note that these don’t include the only types/shapes that are possible, these are just common ones)

Eyebrows

Eye shapes

Face shapes

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Writing Tip

because I see this everywhere and most people don’t know about it. The hyphen(-), the en-dash(–) and the em-dash(—) are three completely different things with completely different uses. If you write fanfiction, it’s likely that your readers won’t care, but if you want to submit a manuscript for publishing, you need to know the difference. 

The hyphen (-) is the basic symbol you find on your keyboard, and it’s meant to only be used for hyphenated words (well-being, two-thirds). 

The en-dash (–) is a slightly longer dash. It’s usually the width of an uppercase N, hence the name. You can find it by looking through the ‘insert symbol’ option in MS word or many word processors, and it is meant to be used to show a particular distance, or for intervals (May–August, 1900–1916, pages 12–22)

The em-dash (—) is what people most commonly use, but they refer to it as a hyphen. It’s the longest dash, about the size of an uppercase letter M, and you can either find it through the list of symbols in your word processor, or some word processors actually automatically transform two hyphens (–) into an em-dash  (—). It is meant to be used as a break in the sentence, in a place where a comma, semicolon or colon would normally be used or as a break in dialogue. (Her niece—the daughter of her oldest sister—is the one over there.) 

*All three types of dashes are normally meant to be used without any spaces on either side of the dash. 

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Hello, Shaelin, I recently found out that there are so many writers on twitter! Do you have an account there? What do you think of twitter as a writing platform? (Sorry for my english, im not a native speaker🙊)

Yep! I’m @shaelinbishop there. I honestly don’t use it muchhh to engage with the writing community, but I should try to get better since it’s a pretty big community and one of the most important platforms to have. Publishers value twitter follows more than other social media platforms so if you can start setting up a platform there it’s great. 

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Re: questions to ask an editor, Are contracts typical in the process? If so, what are some must-haves? Red flags? Also, is it "old" to have an expectation of confidentiality between editor/client? Some writer/editor blogs on tumblr have gotten popular by vaguing about clients and some older writers are becoming hesitant to hire anyone with a substantial social media following.

Should You Use a Contract When Hiring an Editor?

(The original post that Anonymous is referring to is here.)

Hi there! Yes, absolutely. I should’ve included that in the post! Typically, after deciding to work with an editor but before paying them a deposit, you should receive a contract. The one I personally use is a standard editorial freelance contract. It includes a description of services, scope of work, and delivery agreements. There are also sections outlining payments, termination, work product ownership, confidentiality, and severability.

I don’t think it’s old school to have confidentiality between editor and client. Here’s what my contract says under that section:

Editor will not at any time or in anymanner, either directly or indirectly, use for the personal benefit of Editor,or divulge, disclose, or communicate in any manner any information that isproprietary to Client. Editor will protect such information treated as strictlyconfidential. This provision shall continue to be effective after thetermination of this Contract. Upon termination of this Contract, Editor willreturn to Client all records, notes, documentation and other items that wereused, created, or controlled by Editor during the term of this Contract.

If your editor doesn’t offer a contract, ask for one. Personally, sometimes I get lazy and skip the contract if I’m working with a client who I have an established relationship with, or if it’s a very small job. But I always write them up for new or out-of-state clients, big jobs, and whenever anyone wants one.

Remember that a contract for a small editing job is more than legal protection. It prevents future conflicts because everything is in writing, and it shows you that the editor you’re working with is professional and legit. If you ask for a contract and they won’t produce one–run!

Hope this helps!

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Welcome again Reese! There aren’t a lot of writers on Tumblr who write contemporary so it’s great to have you here :) And your WIPs sound super interesting!

Writeblr reintro

Hello! I’ve been here for roughly a year, but have been off and on active as of late while I deal with a bunch of personal stuff.

Name’s Reese, I’m 26 and NB (they/them). Have been writing since I was wee, very small, I was. Six or eight, I think. I wrote my first “novel” (probably more short story) at 11, and have lost it to time. :(

Anyway, I genre-jump. I am happiest in contemporary or realistic, because I enjoy primarily exploring emotional aspects of characters, and while that’s possible and awesome in other genres, people expect more action and adventure from fantasy than they do contemporary :p

I have a few contemporary WIPs (Shadowed, about a teenager handling some fucked up shit, From the Roof of my Mouth, about two idiots crossing the beidge of emptional intimacy fear, Quin 2.0, about a ???-aged fellow creating his own happiness), but also something like… mystery/suspense? about a local cryptid in a Minnesota farm town (Easthallow), a fantasy novel about a drug that causes magic (Rhydos), and a number of almost-ideas in the scifi-genre.

My work is hosted @reeseweston or at reeseweston.com. I use my main (this one) to reblog other writers’ work, and for off-topic posts (which are few and far between, because I primarily follow writeblrs.)

I like reading pretty much all the things, but I mostly play in LGBTQ+ fiction, or read fiction with characters that fall into that group.

Hello, writeblr, nice to meet you all again!

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How to use multiple POVs

3 Tips for using  multiple POVs

Using multiple POVS means the narrative switches between the perspectives of two ore more characters.

1.Distinct character voices  If the voice sounds the same even though it’s written from a different character’s point of view, it creates the impression that there is no difference between the characters. So take some time in not only developing distinct characters, but also in giving your characters individual, distinct voices. 

More on creating distinct character voices can be found here

2. Use an indicator for POV switches Always give your readers a clue when the POV switches. The most common way is to write the POV character’s name at the beginning of the section or use the POV character’s name as the title of the chapter.

3. Don't switch POVs too often If the POV switches every other line, it is very likely that your readers will be annoyed. The most common way is to switch the POV when a new chapter begins. It’s also possible to switch the POV when a new scene begins, but keep in mind tip no.2 and don’t forget to indicate that the POV switches with the next scene.

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The Editing Agenda: Those Darn Dashes

When it comes to formatting and punctuation issues, hyphens and dashes take the cake. Their use in books is incredibly inconsistent, which leads to a lot of confusion for anyone trying to learn them. This article will give a thorough breakdown of each kind and their uses as they pertain to fiction. Keep in mind that the rules I’m covering are the ones that are the most beneficial for fiction writing—there are some that won’t be addressed in this post. And all rules mentioned are based on The Chicago Manual of Style, 16th Edition.

Hyphens

Phrasal Adjectives

Phrasal adjectives are a short group of words (usually two but sometimes three or more) that link together to modify another noun. They typically precede the noun and are very common in fiction writing.

Example 1: rose-colored glasses

Example 2: four-chambered heart

A fantastic resource for this can be found on The Chicago Manual of Style website: http://www.chicagomanualofstyle.org/16/images/ch07_tab01.pdf

This chart shows you the breakdown of various combinations of adjectives and how they should be punctuated, including permanently hyphenated words and exceptions. The CMOS advises following Merriam-Webster’s dictionary for determining which words and phrases should always be hyphenated. Some of examples of this are the words life-form, run-down (not to be confused with rundown, which holds a different meaning), and short-lived.

Compound Name

Hyphens are also used for compound names, including surnames, first names, and other names.

Example 1: Merriam-Webster

Example 2: Mary-Kay

Example 3: Theta-Gamma

Word Division

The most common word division breaks where you’d find hyphens would be line breaks, syllable breaks (often used for pronunciation purposes), and prefixes and suffixes. Which isn’t all that common in fiction writing. However, you will often see it in dialogue, particularly with stuttering.

Example: “W-w-where’d you l-l-leave it?” Tom asked.

Separators

Hyphens can also be used to separate letters and numbers. That’s that type of thing you see with phone numbers, ID numbers, and the like. However, a great use for separation hyphens in fiction writing if when have a word that you need to spell out completely or partially.

Example: The sign read: “C-A-U-T.” The rest had long worn off.

En Dashes

Dates, Times, and Page Numbers

The en dash’s main purpose is to replace the word to. The most typical occurrence of this would be with dates, times, and page numbers.

Example 1: He held office from 1929–1932.

Example 2: The event is Saturday, 2:30p.m.–4:30p.m.

Example 3: Tonight’s assignment is to read pages 32–45.

You also might see this with scoring/votes and with an unfinished number range.

Example 4: We won our last game 13–2.

Example 5: The magazine (2003–) has produced six volumes so far.

However, you should always use the word “to” instead of an en dash if “from” precedes the range.

Example 6: He joined us from 11a.m. to 12p.m. but had to leave for lunch after that.

Directions and Compound Adjectives

En dashes are also sometimes used with words, as can be the case with directions.

Example 1: I took the London–Paris train last week.

And sometimes—very rarely—an en dash is used with compound adjectives. This is where it gets tricky because the intended meaning can often get muddled by using this method, so it’s usually best to reword and find a more elegant solution when possible.

Example 2a: I’d like to find more Taylor Swift–style music.

Example 2b: I’d like to find more artists like Taylor Swift.

Version 2b of the above example flows much better and is less confusing than the first, so it’s definitely the better choice.

And with two sets of compound adjectives where the sets are acting as coordinate adjectives to each other, a comma is the best option.

Example 3: This run-down, high-maintenance property will end up costing a lot of money.

Universities

The last use of en dashes is one that you probably won’t find in most fiction writing, but it’s useful to know nonetheless. You will sometimes find universities with multiple campus locations using an en dash to include the location name.

Example: I put my application in for Fordham University–Westchester.

Em Dashes

Em dashes are used to set off phrases and clauses in a manuscript that require an abrupt break, either to draw attention to it or because there is a large shift in the train of thought. This is one of the most useful tools an author has in fiction writing when it’s used correctly and sparingly. Note that em dashes should NOT be substituted with ellipses; the two serve different purposes.

Em Dashes vs. Ellipses

Em dashes are used for interruption or to set off an explanatory element. An ellipsis is used to indicate hesitation or trailing off.

Example 1: “Lucy, where did you put—”

“It’s none of your business!” Lucy shouted from the other room.

Example 2: I stumbled down the stairs—the power had gone out earlier that evening—before I found my way to the bathroom.

Example 3: “I don’t know…” I admitted. “I hadn’t really thought much about it.”

Interrupted Thoughts

Sometimes the interruptions can come in the form of narrative thoughts.

Example: Justin’s feet pounded against the ground as he blazed down the trail. Awesome. If he kept up the pace, he’d beat—a tree root caught his foot, and he was sent sprawling into the dirt.

And if you have a character that is having trouble forming a sentence due to the circumstances at hand and/or heighted emotions, em dashes can be used to indicate stammering between words (not syllables).

Example: “What I meant was—why can’t we—oh, just forget it,” Julie spat out.

Words and Phrases

An em dash can also be used to set off noun or pronoun at the beginning of the sentence.

Example: Cowards—they were the ones who sought power.

Another common use for the em dash is before the phrases “namely,” “that is,” “for example,” and others similar to those.

Example: We spent most of the afternoon in the garden—that is, until the heat got to be unbearable.

Note: You should never use em dashes within or immediately following an element that already has a set of em dashes. Not only would this look terrible aesthetically, but it could also cause potential misinterpretation.

Interrupted Dialogue

The last use of em dashes for fiction is probably one of the trickiest, but it can also be the most useful. If you have a line of dialogue that is split up by an action in the middle, you can use em dashes to set off that action.

Example 1: “Well, the thing is”—Tommy quickly turned his attention to his feet—“it’s just not working out between us.”

Note that the em dashes go outside of the quotation marks in such a case, and the quotation is a continuous line of dialogue that is being split. The first word of the dialogue after the split should be lowercase. You can’t use this method if you have two separate sentences that have an action in between. In that situation, you’d use periods.

Example 2: “You really mean it.” I could hear my voice catch in my throat. “I just don’t understand what happened.

Two-Em Dash

One type of em dashes that is not commonly used in fiction writing that is probably my favorite is the 2-em dash. The 2-em dash is used to omit words or parts of words that are missing or illegible, or to conceal a name. Two em dashes are most useful for the genres of fantasy, thriller, and mystery, where characters might come across documents that have damage to them. The example below is from a snippet of a work in progress of mine: book one of the Ansakerr series.

My dearest I——,                                                                        

If you are reading this, I have long since p—— away. I can only pray that my —— box and this letter have fallen into your hands and your hands alone. There is much you have yet learn to about me. There is still a D——k O—— out there, one more dangerous than you can imagine. For now, you are protected, but be on your toes, my girl. One day soon, I fear the p—— will fade, and you’ll need to be ready. He is coming.

The key will lead you to A——. It will hold the answers you’re looking for.

Deepest love and affection,

Grandma Bea

Notice that most of the missing parts are for key elements, including names, places, and very specific items that are clearly key for the plot. If you craft these parts well, you can purposely mislead a reader in the narrative, giving a bit of a twist to your story.                                                                                  

Formatting and Stylistic Use

No spaces should be used around hyphens or dashes except in the case of the 2-em dash when it is being used to completely omit a word. This is probably the most common error regarding formatting of hyphens and dashes that I come across. Though there is some debate about spacing among various sources, the CMOS is pretty clear about it. But again, as with anything else in writing, consistency is the most important.

As for formatting the different dashes, mainstream word processors include symbols for each that you can insert into your document. In fact, some of them even automatically convert two hyphens used together into an em dash. While most publishers will accept em dashes in the form of two hyphens (in fact, some even request that you submit manuscripts that way), when it comes to actual printing and online publishing of the material, you’ll want to make sure they’re replaced. Your document will look more professional when you use the correct symbol, and your readers will likely notice as well.

Tip: To quickly find and replace any stray instances of two hyphens with an em dash symbol, use your word processors Replace function.

Lastly, when it comes to use with other punctuation, a question mark or an exclamation mark can precede an em dash, but never a comma, colon, or semicolon. In other words, if you use an em dash where one of the latter punctuation marks would typically be used, the dash takes the place of the punctuation.

Example: He bent down to tie his shoe—but he stopped when he saw Alyssa approaching.

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How to Stand Out in the Slush Pile 101

Submission piles in the writing industry are lovingly nicknamed “slush piles,” because most of the stories are … more like slush than stories. Here are some tips to make sure your opening is more story and less slush.

1. Make sure you follow the proper manuscript formatting.

For some of the submission piles I’ve been involved with, a template of the proper format was available for download. Nonetheless, the majority of submissions didn’t follow it. Some people don’t indent paragraphs, don’t even have paragraphs, or use weird fonts etc. Don’t add pictures to your manuscript—keep it simple and professional. Save and send it in the proper electronic format, which is usually a Word document.

For some publications, if the story isn’t formatted correctly, it is immediately rejected.

If you cannot find the formatting guidelines, you are usually safe using standard manuscript format, which is the traditional way of formatting.

2. Unless you are an advanced writer, communicate character, setting, and conflict (or tension) quick.

Most submissions get rejected in a matter of paragraphs or pages. Often pieces that get rejected are missing either a sense of character, setting, or conflict (or tension) in the opening. Sure, some stories get away without having all these things, but they better be hecka good in other ways. When I say “opening”–for some, that’s the beginning paragraphs. For others, it’s by the end of the second page.

Setting in particular seems to get left out. I’ve read scenes where the setting is never even hinted at—I don’t know if the characters are in a hospital, a bar, or a circus.

When it comes to conflict, you don’t necessarily need a bomb going off. In fact, you may not need a ton of conflict on the page itself—but you need the promise of significant conflict to come, or in other words, you need tension.

Here are two posts that may help with that:

Tension vs. Conflict

Are Your Conflict Significant?

3. Use character names.

Too many new writers “hide” their characters’ names. A bunch of vague pronouns doesn’t help me figure out who is doing what. Ex: “He (who?) held his hand over his (his own mouth or someone else’s?) mouth. The chief (is this “he” or a different person?) couldn’t believe this was happening. He (the chief?) struggled. Then the man (the “he,” “chief,” or someone else?) forced the hand away from his (whose mouth?) mouth.”—who is doing what? How many people are there?

4. Don’t open your story with a dream—usually

Dreams can be such a letdown. One submission I read was really good, and I was going to set it aside, and I got to the end of the second page and the first two pages were a dream! Don’t even open your story with a short dream. It’s too cliché in the slush pile. If you NEED a dream in it, don’t do it in the first few pages.

Of course, like all of these, there are exceptions, but whenever you break a rule it’s got to be really good and you’ve got to have a good reason for breaking it.

5. Make sure your character is actually doing something on the first page.

Make sure there is some movement, and better yet, make sure there is tension. Too many submissions start with a character just sitting and thinking about something, usually something that happened in the past.

If possible, have at least two characters interacting in the first scene. It’s way more interesting than the 50 other stories that start with one character thinking.

6. Avoid flashbacks.

Number 5 is usually paired with something like this: “It all started a month ago,” or “Maybe I should start at the beginning,” or “This all started last week.“—and then the story goes back to the real “starting” or some sort of flashback. If that is where the story started, start there, and then you won’t have to tell me “how it started.” I’ll see it.

7. Don’t start with a character running away from something really vague.

There are way too many stories that start this way. It might sound like a cool opening, but after you’ve read 12 of them, you realize it’s not as cool as you first thought.

8. Don’t start with a long “telling” explanation of something, like “The city was surrounded by mountains, and we were told to never leave the city. The mountains have been around since the beginning of time when the gods got angry and decided to keep us locked up in one place. Back when my grandmother was alive, she used to tell me stories about people who left the city and never returned…(on for 1 ½ pages)” While this info might be interesting, there’s no immediacy. I’m just being told information. The slush piles can sometimes be loaded with this opening. At least give me like a page of something concrete and immediate before “explaining,” or “telling” me something.

9. Don’t start a story with your character waking up on an ordinary day doing ordinary stuff.

Again, that’s not really where the story starts. But too many stories start there. Give me some tension.

10. Avoid purple prose.

First off, if you can write detail that appeals to the senses, do it, because too many submissions are missing strong imagery in the opening. If you can write striking metaphors or similes, put one in the opening also. But don’t go overboard. I read one submission that took a paragraph to describe one action about ten different ways. Only about two things actually happened on the first page.

But don’t write purple prose. If you don’t know what purple prose is, it might be a great idea to spend some time researching it on Google this week. Basically, it’s overwrought, melodramatic description.

11. Don’t submit your writing exercises as a story.

I’ve seen a few submissions that I think were supposed to be practice exercises–like that exercise in creative writing classes where you have to try to describe something without saying what it is, or where you use only dialogue to tell a story. Those are great exercises, but (in most cases) they shouldn’t be sent in as professional pieces for publication.

12. Don’t include a bunch of pointless info about your character.

Reading two paragraphs about how your character’s choice of music is different than his mom’s isn’t going to help me get to know your character, and it’s not important unless your story involves music (in the case of this submission, it didn’t).

Some people try to “find” their character by giving them too many quirks and random details etc. But those are only the surface of the character—instead try to focus on how your character changes in your story, and what you need to establish first to show that change.

I have a bunch of posts on character that you can find in my Writing Tip Index.

13. Follow the submission guidelines.

In one submission pile I worked with, the publication was meant to showcase local writing, so if someone from Arkansas submitted, we couldn’t take the submission. In another, the guidelines stated that the story should be appropriate for a general audience. That means that the story that starts with people having an affair and uses the f-word about 12 times in the first page is probably out.

14. Use correct English and spelling.

And watch for anything that sounds awkward.

15. Unless otherwise stated or inappropriate, do state your writing credentials somewhere—a cover letter, query letter, or just the body of an email (depending on submission guidelines). Even minor writing credentials put a better flavor in the editor’s mouth because they imply you have some idea of what you are doing. At least that’s been my experience.

With that said though, ultimately the story is what needs to be amazing.

Above all, use correct formatting, start with immediacy (not explanation), and have the setting, character, and conflict or tension established in the opening. That will put in you in the top 20% of submissions, from my experience.

Also, keep in mind that great writers have broken a lot of these rules. In fact, great writers usually do break some rules. But this is “How to Stand Out in the Slush Pile 101,” and unless you are an advanced writer, you should put your best foot forward by following these guidelines

Good luck! And if you would like more advanced information on how to write the starting of your story so that it gets out of the slush pile, you can check out the book Hooked by Les Edgerton.

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What are the best 3 tips for writing in your opinion? There are so many posts about how to write smth, but I always wondered which 3 tips helped you the most.

Hi, darling!  Thanks for your question :)  This is very much up to opinion, of course, but a few things came to mind right away…

My Top Three Writing Tips (via Mod Joanna)

1. Trust yourself – and your instincts.

As modern-day writers, we have access to the internet – which means not only do we have countless online resources telling us exactly how to write, but we read more classic, brilliant literature than any generation of writers before us.  All this information is running through our heads as we pick up a pen or open a new document, thinking of the perfect way to say what we want to say.  And it’s damaging.

This information is useful, but when you sit down to write, shut that noise down.  Get rid of external distractions, too, until it’s just you (and whatever background noise you like) and the page.  Write, and as you’re writing, pay attention to what you’re feeling.  If you’re not interested in the scene you’re writing, trust that and change it so that it’s more interesting.  If something you put down feels mushy, or dramatic, or out of character, trust that and change it.  If the chapter feels too long but chapters are “supposed to be a certain length”, or if your description feels long-winded but “you need to establish the setting”, or you can just sense something isn’t working but you don’t know – stop.  Find it.  Change it.  It’s that simple.

The biggest question we get on this blog (and that I’ve seen on most other blogs) is, “Should I?”  Should I keep this prologue in my story?  Should I make my character more flawed?  Should I write from second-person POV?  Should I do x if other people say I should do y instead?  And while I can give you my opinion, the most important answer I have is this: if you’re asking the question, you know the answer.  If something works but you still want it to change, you need to change it.  If something doesn’t work but it’s easier to leave it that way, you need to change it.  If something works and you don’t want to change it but other people think you should… don’t.

Do what feels right – not what’s easy and not what’s directed to you.  The more you listen to your internal voice, the easier it will be to hear it.

2. Let the first few hundred words suck.

This rule is especially important the longer it’s been since you’ve written, and it’s an easy one.  When you first start, don’t expect anything quality in the first few hundred words.  You have to get into the page first – dip the toe, brace the cold, get your hair wet.  Start the engine and see how it feels, and don’t put any pressure on yourself.

In my experience, starting has never been easy, even during weeks when I write 1K+ a day, every day.  And yet for some reason, I always give myself 200 painful words before deciding, “I’m not getting anywhere today.  Forget it.”  And that’s usually when I’m right on the cusp of something good, and I can tell because when I do push myself past that point, I get something good.  It’s been a lifesaver for me!

For a lot of writers, when we know we’re capable of our heights, we aren’t gracious with ourselves.  We kick ourselves for struggling.  We lament writer’s block.  Instead, we could look at each day as a new pen – it takes a bit of scribbling to get the ink flowing, but that doesn’t make it a bad pen.

3. Be in your scene, not at the window.

No matter what POV you’re writing in, it’s important that your readers are immersed in the story; and if your readers are going somewhere, you have take them there.  Instead of writing from a bird’s eye view, you need to write from the view of someone in the room – even if that person isn’t a character, but your ghostly figure levitating in the middle of the scene, narrating for the rest of us.

This is especially important in relation to your sensory description.  One of the most off-putting and common problems in the stories I read online is a lack of any sensation besides sight.  I can sit there for three minutes reading about the interior decoration of the room before finding out if the characters are even there, or what they’re doing, or what they’re thinking.  Don’t overwhelm my mind’s eye, please!  Instead, tell me:

what’s going on in your character’s body – because they’re probably aware of it.  If he’s sitting in the waiting room, let me feel the rumble of his stomach because he forgot to eat on the way there.  If she’s cuddling someone, what does that person’s shampoo smell like, and where is their hair tickling her skin, and is their breathing matching up or is hers more ragged and if so, is she anxious, or excited, or exhausted?  Engage me with what the characters are feeling and I’ll feel it, too.

what’s going on in the room – so I can be there, too.  Is that the TV I’m hearing, or just crickets outside, or just my breathing and the clock ticking in the next room?  Does it smell like the food I half-ate, or the dog who likes to sleep here, or beer because my roommate is drunk off their ass?  If it’s an action scene, it probably smells like sweat.  If it’s a love scene, it probably tastes like toothpaste.

what’s going on in the world – especially if this is a world-heavy story.  In the city, cars honk outside, and the new girl from the suburbs will not be used to this, and it’ll probably crank up her stress.  In the apocalypse, you may hear some random screaming from the victim of a mugging, or gunshots from the neighbors who are always causing trouble.  In space, you don’t hear anything, but silence is its own sound and it can be crazy-making.  The sci-fi future probably smells like metal and disinfectant, and a pixie society probably smells like pollen and whatever you’ve decided pixie dust smells like.  Tell me all about it.

That’s what comes to me, but I’m sure every writer out there has a different set of tips they hold close to their heart.  I hope everyone feels welcome to add their opinions in the reblogs/comments :)

As always, thanks again for the question and your patience

– Mod Joanna ♥️

If you need advice on general writing or fanfiction, you should maybe ask us!

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5 Better Ways to End Your Story

1. The Dialogue Gut-Punch

I usually imagine this ending happening after some great, destructive plot twist or long-kept secret has been revealed to the narrator and/or reader. There is shock and awe and maybe some betrayal. This is where you fully feel the effects of what has changed, the beginning versus the end. And in this case, the end is not ideal.

Maybe the resolution’s scene has been set, but that’s not offering enough closure. How to tie up the loose end? A short (and I mean short) piece of dialogue. It usually involves a sense of resolve and acceptance, even if the resolution at hand is otherwise displeasing or harrowing. The gut-punch comes from that acceptance, that acknowledgment of what has been lost in the quest to fulfill their goals. Doesn’t always mean defeat or a pyrrhic victory, but all protagonists must lose things while trying to gain others. This is where that character and the reader feels the loss in the wake of a resolution. 

2. A Question and an Answer

This is a lot like #1, only there’s a different setup. Instead of a scene being laid out and then one line of dialogue, there are three components. The scene is set, a question is asked, then an answer is provided. The end. The question and answer usually revolve around the reflection of what has changed. A “what now?” for all intents and purposes. Can be used for a mysterious ending to a standalone or a setup for the next installment in a series.

It is worth noting that the answer does not always have to be dialogue. For example, a character could ask: “So this is what we have left?” and then a (brief) description is given of a ragtag crew that’s survived the whole story. Play around with it. 

3. The Full Circle

There are a couple ways to go about this ending. Two, in particular, are my favorite.

A) The story begins with a scene that has a very specific tone and attitude of the main character(s). The end of the story is a very similar scene (through setting, circumstance, characters, etc. as long as it’s obvious the last and first scene parallel each other). However, the last scene has the opposite tone and the opposite attitude. If the first scene is hopeful and the MC is full of naivete and energy, then the last scene is melancholy and the MC has been washed away into tired hopelessness. Or vice versa. Offers sufficient closure to standalone works. For a series, it would be quite satisfying to take the first scene from the first installment and mirror/flip it for the last scene in the last installment. 

Or

B) The story comes full circle through setting (or circumstance) only. In this case, the first (or inciting incident) and last scene share a setting. But the scenes do not mirror each other overtly or consistently. The significance relies upon the setting and the changes that have been made to the setting because of what has happened. It’s a good way to symbolize similar changes in the character(s). Maybe the story begins in the MC’s childhood home, where it is bright and full of life, but when the story ends in the home, it has become desolate and empty. Something has happened to the home over time, just as something has happened to the character over time. 

Note: there is also the divergence from these two examples where the character in the beginning is not the character in the end. Most everything else remains the same. It’s been used to show succession, defeat, loss, and the passage of time. 

The Full Circle allows a nice platform to approach the reflection, the resolution, and the changes all through subverted scene similarities and symbolism. 

4. The Joke

Pretty simple. The last line is a comedic remark. It should still involve a level of reflection and/or resolution for closure and cohesiveness. And please make sure it matches the overall tone of the story (not just the scene). 

And now #5, the long one…

5. The Cliff-Hanger (But it’s actually used to its full potential)

So many times, especially with TV shows, I see a story end with a dull, exploitative cliff-hanger. Sure, it works. But it doesn’t work as well as it could. These endings usually rely upon a plot twist that has no previous setup or mild, unbelievable danger. So let’s fix that and use the crap out of a cliff-hanger’s potential. 

The plot twist with no previous setup is boring and unfair. The reader (or watcher since I brought up TV) should be thinking “oh my God” not “what the hell?”. The difference is “what the hell?” equates to confusion and sometimes the fracture of their suspension of disbelief necessary for all fictional stories. “Oh my God” equates to excitement, shock, and enthrallment. ENTHRALLMENT is the key word here, as a cliff-hanger should reel you in further just as the story ends and you become impatient for the next installment. So how do we get “Oh my God” with a plot twist (there are other ways to get “Oh my God” but since (bad) plot twists are common, we’ll use that as an example)? The answer is: we build it up, we add foreshadowing and clues for the reader to find. Let them feel like detectives as they fill in informational holes and fall down rabbit holes of speculation, even if they don’t know what they’re looking for exactly. Let them get close, but not close enough. Add red herrings. If the plot twist is a shock to the narrator, make sure they miss things the reader doesn’t miss and make sure they aren’t super reliable. It all adds to that cloud of mystery around the reveal. It keeps the reader inside the narrative, not thrust out by a plot twist that comes from thin air. Trust the reader and trust your ability to manipulate the illusion of reality. 

The mild, unbelievable danger that the cliff-hanger so often relies upon is an idea that easily triggers examples. Again, mostly TV episode endings are guilty of this. What this involves is a life-or-death situation involving a main character that the reader knows (or at least believes wholeheartedly) cannot die. Therefore the cliff-hanger’s life-or-death danger becomes the opposite because the reader believes the character will leave the situation alive. How to combat this? Easy. Don’t put them in a life-or-death situation (this also goes for scenes that aren’t cliff-hangers). It’s boring if you think or know the character will live no matter what. However, hopefully by this point, the reader is invested in the character fully and cares about their wellbeing (because their life is safe). So, exploit that. Offer up a situation where the character’s fears, vulnerabilities, and weaknesses are played against them. Because even though they may escape this situation alive, the reader will (probably) begin to wonder what other things are at risk. The character’s happiness, significant other, assets, stability, et al.  Those things become muted points when the danger is heavily reliant upon an unbelievable life-or-death situation. 

However, there is an addendum to this. If your story features a rather large MC cast and you have proven your willingness to kill off some of them in the past, then a life-or-death cliff-hanger could still maintain its intended effect. Just… don’t overuse it. 

tl;dr TORTURE YOUR CHARACTERS AND DON’T PLAY YOUR READERS FOR CHUMPS. 

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If you take away only one thing from these 5 examples, let it be this:

The key to a satisfying ending is reflection.

It doesn’t have to be overt reflection (trust me when I say subtle reflection is usually better), but the ending should show in one way or another the changes that have taken place over the story and the resolution that has befallen the characters. The ending wraps it all up into a bite-size piece of text and is the last thing you leave your readers with. Proceed with thoughtful consideration and caution. 

Also a quick Q&A: 

Q: “I don’t know how to choose the right ending.”

A: Do a couple different things while brainstorming:

Imagine the ending of your story using each of these examples as well as others you think of

If the story is first-person or heavily driven by the MC, ask “how would this character end the telling of their story?”

Consider the overall tone and themes of your story– some endings fit those better than others

Ask “what ending offers the amount of closure I’m trying to give?”

Look at works of fiction similar to yours and their endings. Which work and which aren’t fulfilling?

This was a long post. Whew. You’re a peach if you read it all the way through. Hopefully this helps you on your writing journey. 

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5 Moral Dilemmas That Make Characters and Stories Even Better

Readers can’t resist turning pages when characters are facing tough choices. Use these 5 keys to weave moral dilemmas into your stories–and watch your fiction climb to new heights.

#1: Give Your Character Dueling Desires

Before our characters can face difficult moral decisions, we need to give them beliefs that matter: The assassin has his own moral code not to harm women or children, the missionary would rather die than renounce his faith, the father would sacrifice everything to pay the ransom to save his daughter.

A character without an attitude, without a spine, without convictions, is one who will be hard for readers to cheer for and easy for them to forget.

So, to create an intriguing character facing meaningful and difficult choices, give her two equally strong convictions that can be placed in opposition to each other.

For example: A woman wants (1) peace in her home and (2) openness between her and her husband. So, when she begins to suspect that he’s cheating on her, she’ll struggle with trying to decide whether or not to confront him about it. If she only wanted peace she could ignore the problem; if she only wanted openness she would bring it up regardless of the results. But her dueling desires won’t allow her such a simple solution.

That creates tension.

And tension drives a story forward.

So, find two things that your character is dedicated to and then make him choose between them. Look for ways to use his two desires to force him into doing something he doesn’t want to do.

For instance, a Mennonite pastor’s daughter is killed by a drunk driver. When the man is released on a technicality, does the minister forgive him (and what would that even look like?) or does he take justice into his own hands? In this case, his (1) pacifist beliefs are in conflict with his (2) desire for justice. What does he do?

Good question.

Good tension.

Good drama.

Another example: Your protagonist believes (1) that cultures should be allowed to define their own subjective moralities, but also (2) that women should be treated with the same dignity and respect as men. She can’t stand the thought of women being oppressed by the cultures of certain countries, but she also feels it’s wrong to impose her values on someone else. When she is transplanted to one of those countries, then, what does she do?

Construct situations in which your character’s equally strong convictions are in opposition to each other, and you will create occasions for thorny moral choices.

#2: Put Your Character’s Convictions to the Test

We don’t usually think of it this way, but in a very real sense, to bribe someone is to pay him to go against his beliefs; to extort someone is to threaten him unless he goes against them.

For example:

How much would you have to pay the vegan animal rights activist to eat a steak (bribery)? Or, how would you need to threaten her in order to coerce her into doing it (extortion)?

What would it cost to get the loving, dedicated couple to agree never to see each other again (bribery)? Or, how would you need to threaten them to get them to do so (extortion)?

What would you need to pay the pregnant teenage Catholic girl to convince her to have an abortion (bribery)? What threat could you use to get her to do it (extortion)?

Look for ways to bribe and extort your characters. Don’t be easy on them. As writers we sometimes care about our characters so much that we don’t want them to suffer. As a result we might shy away from putting them into difficult situations.

Guess what?

That’s the exact opposite of what needs to happen in order for our fiction to be compelling.

What’s the worst thing you can think of happening to your character, contextually, within this story? Now, challenge yourself—try to think of something else just as bad, and force your character to decide between the two.

Plumb the depths of your character’s convictions by asking, “How far will s/he go to … ?” and “What would it take for … ?”

(1) How far will Frank go to protect the one he loves?

(2) What would it take for him to stand by and watch the one he loves die when he has the power to save her?

(1) How far will Angie go to find freedom?

(2) What would it take for her to choose to be buried alive?

(1) How far will Detective Rodriguez go to pursue justice?

(2) What would it take for him to commit perjury and send an innocent person to death row?

Ask yourself: What does my character believe in? What priorities does she have? What prejudices does she need to overcome? Then, put her convictions to the ultimate test to make her truest desires and priorities come to the surface.

#3: Force Your Character into a Corner

Don’t give him an easy out. Don’t give him any wiggle room. Force him to make a choice, to act. He cannot abstain. Take him through the process of dilemma, choice, action and consequence:

(1) Something that matters must be at stake.

(2) There’s no easy solution, no easy way out.

(3) Your character must make a choice. He must act.

(4) That choice deepens the tension and propels the story forward.

(5) The character must live with the consequences of his decisions and actions.

If there’s an easy solution there’s no true moral dilemma. Don’t make one of the choices “the lesser of two evils”; after all, if one is lesser, it makes the decision easier.

For example, say you’ve taken the suggestion in the first key above and forced your character to choose between honoring equal obligations. He could be caught between loyalty to two parties, or perhaps be torn between his family obligations and his job responsibilities. Now, raise the stakes—his marriage is at risk and so is his job, but he can’t save them both. What does he do?

The more imminent you make the choice and the higher the stakes that decision carries, the sharper the dramatic tension and the greater your readers’ emotional engagement. To achieve this, ask “What if?” and the questions that naturally follow:

What if she knows that being with the man she loves will cause him to lose his career? How much of her lover’s happiness would she be willing to sacrifice to be with him?

What if an attorney finds herself defending someone she knows is guilty? What does she do? What if that person is her best friend?

What if your character has to choose between killing himself or being forced to watch a friend die?

Again, make your character reevaluate his beliefs, question his assumptions and justify his choices. Ask yourself: How is he going to get out of this? What will he have to give up (something precious) or take upon himself (something painful) in the process?

Explore those slippery slopes. Delve into those gray areas. Avoid questions that elicit a yes or no answer, such as: “Is killing the innocent ever justified?” Instead, frame the question in a way that forces you to take things deeper: “When is killing the innocent justified?” Rather than, “Does the end justify the means?” ask, “When does the end justify the means?”

#4: Let the Dilemmas Grow From the Genre

Examine your genre and allow it to influence the choices your character must face. For instance, crime stories naturally lend themselves to exploring issues of justice and injustice: At what point do revenge and justice converge? What does that require of this character? When is preemptive justice really injustice?

Love, romance and relationship stories often deal with themes of faithfulness and betrayal: When is it better to hide the truth than to share it? How far can you shade the truth before it becomes a lie? When do you tell someone a secret that would hurt him? For example, your protagonist, a young bride-to-be, has a one-night stand. She feels terrible because she loves her fiancé, but should she tell him what happened and shatter him—and perhaps lose him—or keep the truth hidden?

Fantasy, myth and science fiction are good venues for exploring issues of consciousness, humanity and morality: How self-aware does something need to be (an animal, a computer, an unborn baby) before it should be afforded the same rights as fully developed humans? At what point does destroying an AI computer become murder? Do we really have free will or are our choices determined by our genetic makeup and environmental cues?

#5: Look the Third Way

You want your readers to be thinking, I have no idea how this is going to play out. And then, when they see where things go, you want them to be satisfied.

There’s a story in the Bible about a time religious leaders caught a woman committing adultery and brought her to Jesus. In those days, in that culture, adultery was an offense that was punishable by death. The men asked Jesus what they should do with this woman. Now, if Jesus had told them to simply let her go free he would have been contravening the law; if, however, he told them to put her to death, he would have undermined his message of “forgiveness and mercy.”

It seemed like a pretty good trap, until he said, “Whoever is without sin among you, let him cast the first stone.”

Nicely done.

I call this finding the Third Way. It’s a solution that’s consistent with the character’s attitude, beliefs and priorities, while also being logical and surprising.

We want the solutions that our heroes come up with to be unexpected and inevitable.

Present yours with a seemingly impossible conundrum.

And then help him find the Third Way out.

I hope this helped! I’ve been really busy today, seeing how my mom had surgery and I’ve been trying to continue writing my novel today as well. I thought I’d squeeze in some more stuff for you guys!

If you have any questions or just want to talk, feel free to visit my ask box!

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The writing process:

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Setting {How To Describe The Setting In Your Stories}

Describing The Setting Itself

1. Begin With The Basics

Where did the story take place?

When did the story happen?

What’s the weather or climate like?

What are the social or community conditions?

What is the landscape like?

What special details make it clear to understand?

2. Is It A Specific or Quick description?

Try to describe the character in a wider setting and gradually narrow to a specific location. Go from a description of the country/state/region, then move to the town, then neighborhood of the town.

You may also want to go from physical setting to the population by describing the type of people who live in the town. This is a common way to transition from inanimate objects to living beings that think, feel, and care. This starts to give the story meaning.

3. Keep The 5 senses Involved

Think about what the room smells like. What does the sand feel like under the characters feet? Is the edge of mountain cutting into the character’s hands? Describe the way the character’s favorite meal tastes.

For example: She entered the front parlor. Lady MacDougall sat enthroned like Queen Victoria on a blue chintz-covered settee and motioned Elizabeth to take the matching armchair opposite. The salmon-painted walls made the duchess’ white hair glow pink. Elizabeth flinched when a log shifted in the blazing fire in the enormous fireplace surrounded by the marble the previous Lord MacDougall had brought back from Egypt himself.

4. Don’t Let The Description Get In The Way Of The Story

The setting should enhance the story, not block it. This can happen if you stop in the middle of the scene to provide a lengthy description of the world around the characters. Instead of providing separate setting description in the middle of a scene, describe the setting through the characters’ actions. The setting should be integrated along with what the characters are doing.

For example, if the character is running from a vampire in the woods, don’t stop and describe how scary the woods are. Have the character notice how dark it is and the lack of sound. Have the character trip over an exposed root and get a cut on her cheek from a branch. Focus on how the character can’t see anything, but can hear the footsteps behind her. This incorporates the setting with the action so it doesn’t block the story.

5. Show, Don’t Tell

“Don’t say the old lady screamed, bring her on and let her scream.”

- Mark Twain

To do this, use vivid language. Choose nouns and descriptive adjectives to describe the setting. Use concrete action verbs.

Telling: The girls were excited.

Showing: Giggles and screams filled the arena. The soft curls were now damp with perspiration and the anticipation of the event. They held tight to each other in a mock effort to contain themselves. Arms flailed upward, and voices echoed in varying tones. The moment was here.

6. Focus Only On The Important Details

Choosing The Setting

1. Begin With Location

Start by choosing a country, state, region, city, or town. You can be more specific, such as describing a neighborhood or a street. Decide if your location is an urban city, a farm, islands, or mountains.

2. Describe The Room

When you do this, setting helps give meaning to your story.

For example: The walls were made of dark stone, dimly lit by torches. Empty benches rose on either side of him, but ahead, in the highest benches of all, were many shadowy figures. They had been talking in low voices, but as the heavy door swung closed behind Harry an ominous silence fell.

3. Time Setting Is Key

Time of day. Does your story happen in the morning, the middle of the day, or at night? Each time of day has a specific association with it. Also keep in mind the different ways that characters may act at various times in the day.

Time of year. Is your story set in the summer, the winter, or the spring? Is it centered around a holiday, like Christmas or Halloween? Time of year can also include the anniversary of a significant historical or personal event.

Elapsed time. Think about the transition of time in your story. This includes hours and even months. You have to describe the passing of time through the setting. This can be time progressing as the story unfolds, or situating the reader within a flashback.

4. Weather

If your story is set in a harsh climate, you need to describe this for your reader. Describe the difficulties of living in the desert or arctic temperatures. Or explain the ease with which someone lives in their beach house.

For example: And after all the weather was ideal. They could not have had a more perfect day for a garden-party if they had ordered it. Windless, warm, the sky without a cloud. Only the blue was veiled with a haze of light gold, as it is sometimes in early summer. The gardener had been up since dawn, mowing the lawns and sweeping them, until the grass and the dark flat rosettes where the daisy plants had been seemed to shine.

5. Geography

Think about geographical formations, like mountains, rivers, lakes, or forests. The character should interact with these things and they should be important to the story. Otherwise, ask yourself why you are setting the story there in the first place.

6. Historical, Social, and Cultural Settings

Think about social and political settings. This is important for a modern or historical story. These things influence the values and actions of the characters.

Cultural settings can include religion, traditions, and community interaction. Population of your location can play into this. Is the place densely populated, or is it remote?

Use Character To Describe Setting

1. Action

Have the character react to the setting. This can provide important character and plot development.

2. Experience

A native New Yorker would describe the subway very differently than someone from a southern, rural farm. Decide whose point of view you want to describe the scene from and why it’s important to get that character’s perspective.

3. Mood

Think about how a high school freshman and senior would view a school dance. The freshman might be excited because it’s her first dance, while a senior may groan and complain about being there. A kid who has been bullied may be afraid of going to the dance in case the people who bully him are there, while the popular president of the student council is excited to see all her friends at the dance.

Plot events can also affect the mood of the character. A forest stroll in the afternoon may be a relaxing event for one character, while another character may be lost in the woods and be scared.

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Suspense Sentence Structure Techniques

Adverb Start - You can set the tone and atmosphere by just simply describing how the verb is being completed

Suddenly, he lunged for the knife.

Preposition Start - Draws out the sentence to keep the reader waiting and follows a trail of settings or objects and makes the reader wonder what’s at the end.

Behind the front brick terrace houses, over the deep, murky trench of a river, lay the vast skeletal remains of the “temporary accommodations” where he was supposed to be. 

Short Sentences - Speeds up the pace and creates a sense of urgency and panic.

Not here. Not near me. Why does he want me? Why is he following me?

Long, flowing sentences - It can draw out the scene so the reader has to wait, can suggest that events are happening in quick succession and contrast well with short sentences.

Another sweeping glance to the window revealed that his stalker was still present, striding along in large steps as if not comfortable in his present bone structure with a hunched back - not quite bent double but well on its way like the snivelling, snarling wolf that he knew his stalker was under that false face.

Non-Sentence - Speed up the pace and action and can sometimes reveal critical details in a scene but MUST NOT BE OVERUSED because they are not grammatically correct and you might give the impression of not knowing how to write with grammar.

The pocket watch. Covered in blood there and covered in fine silks here; somebody was going to die.

The more… the more - Conveys a particular detail in a scene and its effect.

The more he fought, the more the eye drained his power.

If, if, if, then - Emphasises the small probability of an event happening.

If only she had been born a boy, if only she had been born second or third, if only she had been born ugly, then she would not have been sent to live in such a dismal manor caring for a the vile beast which she knew would not remain faithful.

Adjective, adjective - Emphasised a certain idea about a situation and the characters within it.

Carved lit jack-o-lanterns warned them away, lit to warn them away from the land of the living.

Fronted adverbial phrases - Builds tension by prolonging the wait to find out what’s happening and describes the setting.

Heartbeat fading and breath slowing, he slumped down onto the decaying railings. (double)

Heartbeat fading and breath slowing, light fading from his eyes, he slumped down onto the decaying railings. (triple)

Repetition - Creates atmosphere and builds tension by reminding the reader of a particular idea or object.

Emptiness resided in his eye sockets, emptiness resided in the chest cavity and emptiness resided in his coat pocket where the empty box was found.

Dash - Can replace the comma, tag on extra information and speed up the pace.

It was not the particular vision of what now seemed to “live” in his home but rather who had recently decided to move back in after 17 and a half years, all bright, fresh and young - his dead wife.

Colon - The reader has to wait for the sentence to end to get an answer and the emphasis put on by the colon exacerbates the effect of what is after the colon.

Nobody should have to live like that: lonely.

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Hi!💕 First of all, I love your blog it’s so helpful. I have been writing a lot recently, but I find that I mostly write dialogue. It’s not really repetitive or anything but that’s all I write. I was wondering if you have any advice to help me. Thank you!

It’s okay to have a lot of dialogue, but you can’t have pages and pages and pages of it; readers need frequent breaks from dialogue or else they’ll start losing track of the conversation.

Here’s how to break up dialogue:

1. Describe the room they’re in

(You don’t need to go overboard, just give the reader an idea)

2. Give them props!

While they’re speaking you can describe the cup of coffee they’re drinking or the pen they’re fiddling with; it gives a whole new dimension to the story:

“Ugh,” he groaned. “I’m tired.”

Vs

“Ugh.” He clutched his cup of coffee like a lifeline, trying to drink it as fast as possible without burning his mouth in an attempt to keep his eyes open.

In the second one, he doesn’t have to say he’s tired because he’s trying to wake himself up with coffee.

This comes to my next point:

3. The characters don’t have to say everything.

It’s show don’t tell but with dialogue and description.

Instead of “wow that guy is weird; i don’t like him” it should be. “They all turned to him as he passed, shifting warily from foot to foot.”

4. Put some description in there.

You can’t have stories with just dialogue. How are the readers supposed to know what’s happening or what they’re doing if the characters are talking the whole time?

Just find a picture online of what the setting looks like to you and describe it; be specific if it’s setting the scene and basic if it’s a small setting change in the middle of the scene.

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Me @ my writing: …it’s fine, i have honestly seen worse.