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angelinuhh · 5 years

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Hi there A! Could we get a public review from you? Thank you so much and we hope that you have a breathtaking upcoming week! ~ Admin Catie

DISCLAIMER: this review is onlyreflective of my own opinions and is intended to provide constructivecriticism. there is no obligation to listen to or agree with anything said.

OVERALL:

the reality tv junkie in me loves this concept of this rp. and, asI look around, this typifies exactly what I love about the genre: characterdevelopment, fast-paced events and, of course, a healthy dose of competition. Ilove your color scheme and your theme. for a contained theme, I found it incrediblyeasy to navigate—which was a real and true blessing. however, I do think that there are still many things to improve, Ithink a little more consistency and editing in your descriptions and overallaesthetic could really elevate your rp and make it more accessible andattractive to prospective members. I also would like to see a change in yourrules, both in policy and in tone. overall, I wish you guys the best of luck.

PLOT:

I really do love the rp idea, but I do think the plot page leavesa little something to be desired. For appless rps, especially ones withoutblurbs on the sidebar, you really do need something that is concise, both eye-catching and attention-grabbing, all the while getting to the point. while the content you have on this page isn’tbad, you have a long-ish block of text that can read a little dry at time.

I’ve taken the liberty of editing your plot to take on a more activetone to show you what I mean. while you have no obligation to use it, you dohave full permission to:

There is no greater motivation in theworld than money – and nowhere is that more present than in ParadiseIsland, MTV’s new reality television show. Sent to a private island inpairs and forced to compete challenges and tasks set by the producers, contestantsoften find themselves doing things they wouldn’t normally do, all for a chance at$750,000.

Here at Paradise Island, the fun never stops. With 24/7 Streaming, viewers are given a real-time seat to the drama,the romance and more! While binge-worthyshows are great, the 12 million daily viewers know the truth: they never have to find something new towatch again.

After a rigorous application process, including video essays about why theywould like to be on the show, interviews and even a test challenge was preparedto see which finalists caused the most drama or had the most chemistry, thehundreds of potential applicants were narrowed down to just 40. The producersrandomly assigned each contestant into pairs and, for the duration of the show,these partners were to share a room in the mansion and work together to win thegrand prize.

But what happens next—will loveblossom? Will greed step in? Witha 1/20 chance of winning the $750,000, most of the contestants will do anything to get their hands onthat money, but there can only be one pair of winners.

Who will be victorious in the first Paradise Island?

paradiseislandhq is anappless 23+ pairedmuse roleplay based on reality television. Contestants have been sent to aprivate island and must work in pairs for the chance to win a grand jackpot of $750,000w/ additional prizes. We focus on weekly character development tasks &challenges, plotting between members, in-character drama, and. of course- vacation vibes! Applicants are free toapply for a wanted connection partnership or to have one picked at random foryou!

If you would like to take a crack at it, here’s what I tried to fix.

Have a more ACTIVE TONE

thisis a purely stylistic choice, but i would suggest varying up sentence structureand utilizing your bold and italic keys a little more as most people in thegenre do.

Try to avoid going on tangents

Inthe beginning, you start with the motivator of money above all and thenimmediately move to love and status, thus weakening the power of your opening

Ialso did not particularly think the tangent about streaming services in thethird paragraph was necessary. Your goal is to emphasize that the show is 24/7—you don’t necessarily have to explain that.

Is it… $750,000 or $750,000+, because both were used. That needsto be clear.

The first thing I always look for is the synopsis at the bottom,but yours is a little bit long.

Iwould center it as well. You can do this by entering into the html and putting , I think.

Side note: make sure your navigation tab’s blurb matches the one on this page.

I also spotted a couple of grammar errors. Your biggest and mostfrequently repeated error is run-on sentences and a lack of commas.

RULES

bh, your rules page was a hugeturnoff for me. I don’t think it was your intention, but it was very blunt, alittle wordy (ik ik… im legit the most wordy person on earth) and read kind of…rude. A a potential applicant and as a reviewer, I just- I wasn’t feeling itand would likely be very wary of applying because of it. There are also quite a few run-on sentenceshere, so watch out for that.

I’m not going to rewrite the whole thing, but here are a few specificchanges I would make and alternate wordings to your statements.

Edits

(++) I would put in a HOW WE RP section and add in the stuffabout the tasks, points and challenges. Because that should not go underinclusivity. I also do not understand how it works and I need much moreexplanation. I can guess, of course, but I shouldn’t have to. You need toclearly outline how this rp will be run and how tasks will be delegated and pointswill be awarded. Vaguely stating that there will be challenges and points andwhatever will not work.

(++) Your muses section is very confusing. Especially the agebut also the diversity part. I understand that you feel strongly about this,but I brought it up to some friends and many of them were just as confused as Iwas. I read your FAQ and things did not get any clearer. If I were you, I wouldsimply say “all muses and fcs must be older than 25. Please aim to make yourcharacter’s age believable with your faceclaim.”. And that, “to encouragediversity, if you have more than one character, at least one must be POC.” Asyou have it, it is very murky and kind of defensive?? almost. Like I reallywant people to be over 25, but I guess they can play 23, but also they canactually be 40 but they can play in their 20s. It’s convoluted and I get alittle frustrated trying to read it. In my opinion, you just have to pick asingle age and go with it.

I feel like your unfollow rule is extremely lenient for one ofthese rps. It may lead most of your members being inactive before they getunfollowed.

Alt wordings (some suggestions)

Although it is expected that in-character partnerships will needcharacter development, please make an effort to interact with all member.Bubble RPing is NOT permitted and we aim to make an inclusive environment whereall muns can explore their characters.

Youroriginal statement really put the onus on the RPer like they’re already doingsomething wrong.

We are happy to oblige with hiatus or semi-hiatus requests. Lifecomes up and we want all of our players to be comfortable. However, we onlyaccept these requests through asks that come through our inbox.

Reallythe CAPS and the Do not inform by im… don’t really feel like you want me tocomfortable.

We allow small/medium gifs. Please do not use large gifs. In orderto be accessible we do not allow gif icons under 90x90. >>>>In order to be accessible, large gifs and gif icons under 90px are not allowed.We prefer small/medium gifs.

Feel free to cause in character drama. However, no OOC drama willbe tolerated !! >>> While in-character drama can be fun, OOCdrama will not be tolerated.

idk why but those exclamation points were felt in my soul, man. Sdfjdkf. Look, it’s just a little intimidating.

ACCESSIBILITY :

I knowthis sounds like a small thing, but I really am impressed.Container themes are notoriously hard to navigate but I had little to notrouble going through yours. If your rp grows, that muse tab is going to behell to update so I admire your commitment.

My onlycritiques are that

youneed to finish updating your nav so there are no broken/nonexistent links—whichI’m sure you will do

on your/map page, you have ‘wanted connections’ spliced so both wanted and connectionare links.

I’dmuch rather see a page with all the tags to track than just having them floataround on the navigation. But this is totally up to you to change.

AESTHETIC/GRAPHICS:.

Lovethem. Whoever did them, mostly, did a good job in maintaining the color scheme.My only critique is that I’m not really feeling the headers for, like, the plotpage and the wanted connections…etc. These harsh black borders and script fontsstand out a lot and, while the images are nice, they have a completelydifferent color scheme (dark blue-ish tones to the warm and tropical orange ofthe rest of the theme). I wish they would! Because otherwise, I really do likewhat you have here.

MORE.

I would edit or remove the first question onyour FAQ.If anyone asks the question, you can say to promote age diversity andthat’s reason enough. As it stands, the question and the answer just makes me confusedand, some of the statements like “actors over 25 have more resources” is justuntrue.

thebiggest flaw that I see in your RP is inconsistency and occasional lack ofclarity. here is a list of things I’ve found that varied from page to page.

1. Sometimesthe jackpot is 750,000. Sometimes it is not.

2. Theblurb on your navigation does not match the blurb on your plot page

3. Yourefer to this rp both as appless and semiappless.

TLDR; what i would like to see changed, vaguelyin order of most of least importance. Feel free to ignore any or all of these.

REDO your rules page to include a HOW WE RP detailing thepoints, tasks and challenges

CHOOSEa clear and consistent ruling on your age bending/limits. It might make senseto you and promoting age diversity is very admirable, but, look, we’re alldumb.

EDITyour rules page to be… more affable. It’s not bad as it, but it just helpspeople get through it.

i wrote a few alternate phrasings you can look at

EDITyour plot to be more engaging and concise to really grab people’s attention.

i wrote something above that you may use

DOUBLE CHECK all your pages to make sure that you don’tcontradict yourself in various places.

as a last note and reminder, YOU DO NOT HAVE TO TAKE ANY OF MYSUGGESTIONS. There is no ill-will from me to you. As always, this is notintended to be hate and I genuinely want the best for you guys. However, I amterminally cursed to be nitpicky. I’ve done my very best to make sure my adviceis constructive, but please call me out if you find any of this offensive orcrude.

I genuinely like the idea of the RP and appreciate the work you’veput in. Seeing Dev Patel used--- makes my day. Thank you for your time andpatience.

If you have any more concerns or questions, please feel free tocontact me.

#rpt #rp review #rpo #rpc #paradiseislandhq

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naileadevoras · 5 years

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theme makeover’s are currently: open theme from: cvmpbell + a mobile icon , a mobile header , a header for every page & a promotional graphic that can be downloaded here ( x )

#paradiseislandhq #theme makeovers #rpt #rph #theme makeover

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musepirations · 5 years

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Hi there Sien! If it's not too much of a bother, I was wondering if we could receive an opinion/review from you? Thank you so much! I hope that you have a wonderful upcoming week! ~ Admin Catie

❞ HI DARLING !! Mind you that this is just my opinion, and you know these can differ. The last thing I want to do is criticize or be rude. I hope this may help you out, sweetheart!! Find the opinion on PARADISEISLANDHQ bellow the cut !! Xoxo ❞

RECOMMENDATION ? if you enjoy a good pairs roleplay with an original plot, then sure thing !!

* ✰. — icon & url ❞

i can actually be very brief about those, my loves -- i think your icon is beautiful and your url gives away nicely what your roleplay more or less it about. i think both are great !!

* ✰. — main ❞

very nice main !! i like your theme and graphics, and i really enjoy the over-all feel your page provides. i think it definitely suits the ‘ paradise island ‘ aesthetic/vibe. your theme is also very easy to navigate on, which is always a plus. the only thing that doesn’t seem to work for me is the ‘ online ‘ and ‘ visits ‘ links. i’m not sure whether it is supposed to show a number or something -- i like how it is put in circles, though -- but for me it simply says ‘ online ‘ and ‘ visits ‘ without any further information or something. i can’t really make out whether it’s a little error or it’s meant to be this way, but i just thought i’d share this one concern with you guys !! aside from that, i think your main looks just fine !!

* ✰. — pages ❞

i’m going to run over the most important pages here, cupcakes !!

navigation: it’s basically a tab on your theme, which i think is nice and easy -- nothing to remark there !!

plot: first of all, i love your banner -- it looks beautiful and i personally am a big fan of using banners for pages. i’m not sure whether you used a blockquote on your plot, darlings, but i cannot read the ending of your sentences, unfortunately -- so if you did use blockquote, i would recommend to get rid off it !! it may just be a screensize thing, but i’m thinking if it happens for me, it may happen for others as well, and that’d be too bad. your plot in itself is nice !! i love pairs roleplays and i love that there’s an option to be paired instead of doing the pairing yourself -- i like the reality show twist !!

rules: i feel like your rules are pretty short and sweet, and cover all the content that is important !! the only thing you may want to mention is godmodding -- just to make sure everyone knows what it is and how it isn’t tolerated in a roleplay. but aside from that, i think everything that needs to be mentioned, is there -- which is great !!

application & app count: nice, basic application – nothing to remark there. kuddos for separating gender and pronouns and making sure both are mentioned in the application !!

characters: n/a because appless !!

i think those are the main pages !! these are over-all very nice !! good job, guys.

* ✰. — over all impression & advises ❞

i think you have a nice roleplay with a cute, interesting plot and a lovely theme here !! aside from a few details, i think you are very much ready to go, and i hope this roleplay gets the attention it deserves, lovelies. great job on it !!

* ✰. — recommendation ? ❞

i do enjoy a nice pairs roleplay, and i think this one has a nice plot -- so yeah, it’s a rec from me !!

#rp opinion #opinion #paradiseislandhq

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lizadoesrph · 5 years

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Hi there Aliza! We were wondering if we could get a beautiful opinion from you? thank you so much and we hope that you have a breathtaking upcoming week! ~ Admin Catie

just keep in mind that everything below the cut is simply an opinion of mine!

if you are interested in appless pairs rp, look no further than this one!

✧･ﾟ: FIRST IMPRESSIONS

icon & url: so first off, i’m guessing that this is some sort of reality tv show sort of plotline based off of the url and icon. The icon is very well created, maybe you can change it to fit the blue or orange aesthetics of the main? Overall, very nice for both of them!

theme: alright so i love this colour palette. it’s super easy to read off of, the description is good. It fits the plotline pretty well. the graphics are absolutely stunning! Everything about them I love! the navigation page is easy to locate and click through. I love having the little updates on the side, it makes things so much easier for the applicant to see what has been happening! You might want to either try and delete (or just hide for now) the example sorter. it is a bit distracting in my opinion, but not too much of a big deal.

✧･ﾟ: PAGES

plot: the header is super cute! Maybe you can lighten the psd on top a little bit to make it fit the aesthetics better? It just seems a little out of place. ( i am being SUPER nit picky though. ) Forty seems like such a high number to be placed on a reality tv show!! But overall, the plot was very nicely written, well done!

guidelines: I now see why the character limit is forty if eventually everyone can work up to four muses. But again, that limits mun capacity since if a good amount of people have four muses, only ten muns can apply? I think, personally, having a muse cap, I would lower the amount of characters people can have. perhaps at the end, you can include a trigger page or just a list of general triggers and add to them later!

application: I like the addition of both the song and the aesthetics section of your app! Otherwise, it’s a pretty standard app for an appless rp!

✧･ﾟ: OVERALL IMPRESSION

it’s a very nice rp! I had to be super nitpicky about things because there isn’t much else to give critique on! pairs rps aren’t my thing or else I would definitely be looking to apply!

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chrissyassists · 5 years

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Hi there Chrissy! We were wondering if you could give us a lovely little opinion? Thank you so much and we hope you have a wonderful upcoming week! ~ Admin Catie

hey lovelies! i’ve already given you an opinion on your roleplay, you can find it HERE.

#paradiseislandhq #appless rp #pairs rp

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grantgustn · 5 years

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Hi there Aspen! I was wondering if we could receive a beautiful shoutout from you? I hope you have a wonderful day!-- paradiseislandhq is an appless 23+ muse roleplay based on reality television. Contestants will fight to win the grand jackpot in randomly selected partnerships. We focus on weekly character development tasks & challenges, plotting between members, in character drama, and of course- vacation vibes!

shoutout !!

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trinasleeps · 5 years

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Hi there Trina! I was wondering if we could receive a beautiful shoutout from you? I hope you have a wonderful day!-- paradiseislandhq is an appless 23+ muse roleplay based on reality television. Contestants will fight to win the grand jackpot in randomly selected partnerships. We focus on weekly character development tasks & challenges, plotting between members, in character drama, and of course- vacation vibes!

Check them out!

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spoliariums · 5 years

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Hi there Jess! If it's not too much of a bother, I was wondering if we could receive an opinion/review from you? Thank you so much! I hope that you have a wonderful upcoming week! ~ Admin Catie

Hi! Thank you for sending in an ask. I hope you have a wonderful week, as well!

Opinion under the read more. (@paradiseislandhq)

first glance; i love the color palette! very calming colors, yet still conveys that ‘paradise’/tropical vibe. great job! unusual theme in that i usually see themes like these for indies especially with the muses tab, but it works well! i do have one concern. however, i don’t know if it’s a technical issue on my end with my laptop resolution..but the background image is repeated. i would suggest messing around with the code a bit to prevent the repetition or scale the background image up. i’m not sure what exactly are tumblr’s 'official’ dimensions when it comes to background images, but both suggestions are worth a try!

aesthetics; again, love the palette! and i’ve already mentioned the background image, so i’ll move on with the other graphics. i love the graphics located inside the pages! they’re all cohesive and using a template for them really worked out. almost forgot, but your icon! very nice and i love the lil heart!

plot; very interesting plot! it’s giving me big brother/survivor vibes (i’m sorry i don’t watch a lot of romance-focused reality shows omg) and i think the rpc is very much into these kind of plots! i love the idea of while having a set grand jackpot, there is a possibility of bonuses being added to it while the rp goes on. i think it’s a very nice incentive for the characters. i do have to point out that the formatting of the plot could be a bit better. also, watch out for misspellings and slight grammar issues. I can recommend dropping it into a grammar checking program (i have a free one linked here !) to clean it up a bit.

characters/faceclaims; i see that y'all have oc’s, so i’ll try not to go too much into this one. i do like that the taken faceclaims so far are both that i don’t see being used so often (dev patel & hayden panetierre) so kudos for using underused faceclaims! i also love the incorporation of little quotes inside the muse profiles. it gives more insight to their individual vibe and since the quotes so far seem to reference romance, it’s definitely useful for this rp especially for pair formation.

last thoughts; i don’t go for much reality show related rpg’s, but i think this is a really cute idea with a lot of potential. good luck!

#opinions #paradiseislandhq #good luck yall!!#rp opinions

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