#i rewrote it three times because i wasnt happy with it

[intriga-hounds]

Prompt: No punctuation

this is actually from week 2, but i never shared it bc i hated this prompt!!! punctuation is my everything. 

anyway, i was unhappy with what i wrote, so i rewrote it from a new pov. the rewrite is at the top, the original is beneath. 

this is easily my least favorite thing i’ve written for this club lol

Revisit: Changed POV

Well the mall was open again today thank goodness I nearly committed infanticide about thirteen times during the shutdown and even while I was out I wasnt completely sure I didnt want to stop at Home Depot on the way home for duct tape and a shovel you know what I mean hahaha oh no you know I love Brynly and Jaxsen more than anything in the world I would absolutely never anyway as I was saying the mall was finally open again thank you Governor Newsom finally using some common sense and so I left the kids with Ryan to have a little time to myself but not all the stores were open so I had to sweep through real quick to see what was open so that I could plan the whole thing out luckily most of my favorites were open like Lucky Brandddd Nordstrommmm and Lululemon and I have been DYING to go to Lulu because I just started a hot yoga class in Huntington Beach that was supposed to be closed but has just stayed open anyway and you dont even have to wear a mask well anyway there was a line at most of the stores and just about every place was having a sale God there were signs everywhere 50 percent off this BOGO that basically it was a dream come true so I started at Lulu since you know thats my absolute favorite I mean I scoured the app the night before to look at all the cute new summer stuff and when I walked up there wasnt any line which was amazing but there was this girl like guarding the door seriously like actually guarding it like a bouncer she even looked like a bouncer like she was kind of you know on the heavier side and really mean looking but shes in head to toe Lulu so I know shes not actual security shes wearing like the spring 2019 Wunder Under tight and then she had that new Cates Tee Ive been wanting I mean it was MEANT for me it has the same name as me like Kate in a Cates Tee just has to happen so I go up to the doors to go in but Bouncer Girl stops me and is like maam did your appointment come up and Im like excuse me appointment and she goes oh yeah if you scan this QR code itll lead you to a webpage where you can join the virtual line to shop in the store the wait is about 30 minutes right now and Im just floored Im like 30 minutes and shes like yes 30 minutes there are a few parties ahead of you and Im just looking at her like wow I mean it was unbelievable I mean you could see into the store and it was basically empty and I told her that but she was just like yes thats because the store only has a capacity of 15 people according to the safety guidelines and I just was like really seriously that makes NO sense cant you just let me in when those people are done checking out and shes all no Im sorry maam theres a party of three who are next in the virtual line and I just start laughing in her face because that line isnt REAL and theyre not even HERE they wouldnt even KNOW I skipped ahead of them I mean I already know what I want anyway so just let me in I just want to pick up a few things and then she gets this tone with me shes like well these other parties just want to pick up a few things too maam were happy to have you shop with us but youre going to have to join the virtual line and I just cut her off there I was like whatever no forget it Ill just take my business elsewhere I mean obviously because if this is how they treat their customers why would I even go there just ridiculous and honestly Im still thinking about calling corporate because thats really wrong I mean Ive shopped there for years and most of the gals working there know me by name I dont even know who this girl was but she mustve been new because she just didnt have a clue and she was so rude because even as I was walking away she goes have a nice day with the fakest cheer Ive ever heard like I just know she thought she was so hilarious the next time I go to the mall Im going to see if the store manager is in because someone like that just shouldnt be working for Lululemon you know what I mean like theyre an established and really classy popular brand and for that price point they really shouldnt be abusing their regulars like this its just wrong but yeah anyway if you do go to the mall make sure you look out for virtual lines or whatever because it seriously ruined the whole trip for me

Original:

The mall was open again thank goodness Kate had nearly committed infanticide about thirteen times during the shutdown and even now wasnt completely sure she didnt want to stop at Home Depot on the way home for duct tape and a shovel mostly that was a joke to herself a little Wine Mom humor if you will after all Denise had said something similarly hilarious last week at Mom Group but it wasnt really something you could say to just anyone or theyd call the cops or something thankfully there would be no need for that the mall was open and Kate could actually leave the kids with Ryan and have some time to herself though not all stores were open most of them were including many of Kates favorites such as Lucky Brand Nordstrom and Lululemon some had lines to enter but others were ready and waiting for her their windows filled with giant sale signs and bogo deals slashed prices and numbers with percentage symbols it was altogether overwhelming Lululemon was first on her list as she had already scoured the Lulu app for cute new arrivals she was interested in trying on surprisingly there was no line just a plump girl in patterned 28 inch Wunder Under tights from last springs collection and the new Cates Tee in brick an aptly named top Kate felt since it was at the top of her wishlist but as she went to enter the store Wunder Under stopped her with a maam did your appointment come up appointment yes if you scan this QR code itll lead you to a webpage where you can join the virtual line to shop in the store the wait is about 30 minutes right now thirty minutes yes there are a few parties ahead of you Kate gaped at her this is unbelievable she said the store is practically empty yes thats because the store only has a capacity of 15 people according to the safety guidelines well cant you just let me in when those people are done checking out no Im sorry maam theres a group of three who are next in the virtual line theyre not even here so why cant you just let me in I just have a few things I want to pick up yes well we are happy to have you shop with us maam but youll have to join the virtual yes okay whatever I get it maam are you going to no forget it Ill just take my business elsewhere okay have a nice day yeah

Challenge from the book: punctuate the following sentence with only three semicolons

All that is is all that is not is not that that is is not that that is not that is all.

#writing

[kissofbelladonna]

the first - t.h.

pairing: tom holland x reader

type: one-shot

words: 1,285

warning: none for once???

summary: as it turns out the tom you were texting and talking to was the tom holland. 

a.n.: i know it’s very short, but i honestly had such a hard time with this for no reason??? i rewrote it like six times oops-

anyways, this is a request that stated:

hi! i’m not familiar w the terminology so u can do this in what format you think would be best but i wanted to request something w tom holland! tom and the reader start dating and after a month tom has to go off to film so they start doing long distance and after a while reader accidentally says “i love you” for the first time on the phone one night? hopefully this makes sense haha            

i hope this was to your liking anon! i tried my very best to stick to your request but it kinda escaped me??? also, the timeline is very wonky, so ignore that. 

---

It was all so very strange when you found out that the Tom you were speaking to was Tom Holland, the Tom Holland.

Tom Holland had quickly became your favorite actor when you had seen his debut for the Marvel Cinematic Universe as Spider-Man in CA:CW.

Thinking back on it, he'd ask you about himself - or rather his career - quite a few times and you'd gladly share and oh hell. All the embarrassing things you said during conversations popped into your head in that very moment.

One instance was when he asked about Infinity War and you told him about how you felt.

( Have you seen Infinity War yet?

Have i seen it??? tOm, I've seen it THREE times and like I'm still in tears??? I told myself i wouldn't cry and wore mascara, not waterproof mind you, and like five minutes in, there are STREAKS of it down my face.

Also, don't even get me started on my baby boy, Peter's death. That scene rips my heart into little pieces and to think it was improvised!!! I honestly want to sue Marvel and the Russo Brothers for allowing that damned scene in the movie.

Honestly Tommy-boy, I think that Tom Holland has replaced you as my favorite Tom. Dont be too offended but his acting and dancing skills are TOO much for my heart to handle. Also, his accent is like music to my ears. He's great.

Okay, but enough of my rambling, how did you like it?

No, continue darling. I want to hear more. I'll tell you later.

Well since you said I can, let me tell you... )

Or when you called him crying at 3am because you just had to rewatch the entire series again.

( Tommy, you up?

Yes, what's up darling?

Can I call you?

Of course.

"Good morning, Tom."

"Good morning, now how can I help? Wait, are you crying?"

"A bit, but that's besides the point. The point being is that sometimes i just wish that people would stop trying to hurt me so much."

"What is it this time?"

"I rewatched the entire MCU series and I feel dead."

"Come now, love. It can't be that bad, right?"

"Wrong. It's worse." )

Oh hell, indeed, because that was only the beginning. 

---

When you had signed up on that dating app, you didn't think much of it. It was one where you only shared a biography of yourself, no pictures. It was to create a relationship out of  personality and with words and not looks. 

Tom had been one of your first matches and had been the one to bridge the gap between you two.

It was about six months before the both of you decided that it was time to meet the other.

You remember how nervous you were as you waited in that little bakery on 5th. You can clearly recall your knee bobbing up and down rapidly and how sweaty your palms were as you rubbed them on your jean-clad legs.

You had arrived first and ordered your favorite drink as you glanced at the message that he just sent.

"Be there in five minutes or less. See you soon ;)"

It did nothing to calm your racing heart but it did lift your hopes up a bit.

You'd heard about all the stood-up stories from other people who used this app, but you were quite sure that Tom wouldn't stand you up. He seemed too nice to do that. If anything, he'd let you down after the date was over.

You were glancing out the window when you were tapped on your shoulder.

You turned around and had said, "Yes....?"

As you soon as you looked at him, you felt your cheeks warm up and you choked on air.

"Darling, is that you?" His voice was heavenly and just the same as it was over the phone.

"Oh hell. You're Tom, my Tom." He chuckled as he took the seat from across you, a cup of tea in his hands.

"Well, you're not wrong, but I was expecting you to faint, to be slightly honest. After all," he did quotation marks with his hands as he said, " 'If I ever meet Tom Holland, I'm going to legit faint.' " Immediately, you laughed and rubbed the back of your neck.

"It's nice to meet you officially, Tommy."

"Likewise, Darling."

He smiled at you with that crooked smile of his and you knew you were a goner in that very moment.

And that was how it started.

From there on, you'd be with him for most of the time as he wasn't filming for another film just yet.

It was a few weeks of just you and him when he came to your apartment with a wide smile on his face.

He wrapped you in a hug and twirled you around and you couldn't help but smile right back at him.

"Darling, Darling, guess what?!" His voice sounded so happy and you reached out and held his cheek.

"Hmmm, did you get good news?" He nodded his head up and down with his eyes wide and shining.

"I got the role!!" Your eyes went wide and you moved in to squeeze him tightly.

He was laughing and you were sure his smile was brighter than the sun when you looked at him right then and there.

"Congrats, congrats!! I'm so proud of you, love!"

He pulled you in and kissed you, oh so nicely, and you knew you loved the man who held you in his arms.

He pulled away and just gazed in his eyes, they were nearly lidded but when you looked into them, your heart fluttered as did the butterflies thay rested in your stomach.

He wrapped his arms aroumd you and you felt content in the position. He smelled like lemon and pine with a dash of coconut.

It was lovely.

It was when you both pulled apart and sat on the couch when you asked him, "When do you leave?"

"In two days." He looked down at you from your position on his lap.

You grinned and said, "I guess we'll have to make the best of the rests of our days then, huh?"

He smirked and nodded.

"I suppose so, Darling."

---

It was three weeks in and you missed him dearly. You had yet to tell him of your love, nervous because what if he didn't love you back.

You told yourself many things but you couldn't utter three words to a man you adored more than anything.

You fell asleep with your mind filled to the brim with thoughts of your bright sunny boy.

Ring. Ring. Ring.

"... Hello?"

"Were you sleeping? If so, I can hang up-"

"Tom, you're fine. Now, what's up?"

"I just wanted to hear your voice. I miss you very much."

"Aww, you miss me, love. I miss you too. I can't wait till you come back."

"Well, I can't wait to get back."

You could practically see his grin in your mind as he says that. 

"Oh shit, I gotta go, my break is almost done. Bye, Darling."

"Bye. I love you, Tom."

Just as you were about to hang up, you heard his voice say, "Say that again, Darling."

"Bye. I love you, Tom...?"

"You... You love me?"

Your eyes widened when you realized exactly what it was you just said.

You wanted to deny it, just in case he didn't reciprocate your feelings but you decided not to be a little bitch.

"Yeah, I do. Like, a lot."

"Me...?"

"Yes you, Thomas Stanley Holland."

"I love you too. I really do."

You gasped and swallowed the happiness bubbling up in your throat. You were crying and-

you were just so happy.

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