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lifeisdabubbles-undersalmondean · 3 years

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La Pomme ~ Chapter Eight

Pairing: Sam x OC (eventual Dean x OC and Dean x Castiel. And I mean eventual.)

Series summary: George is a casual French-Mistake-universe Supernatural fan living in no-COVID 2020, who's life is upended when she's suddenly launched between realities, two years into the boys' past (S13E22). What begins as an insane, immersive fan experience turns into more when Jack goes missing and George offers up her AU information to help track him down. Soon it's discovered that she and Sam may actually have history. But that's impossible, right?

Word Count: 3,900

Warnings: {smut, fluff, angst, show level violence, swearing, mentions of suicide} ***Detailed warnings will be tagged for specific chapters.

A/N: Following the events of my prequel Paradise and second story From My Eyes Off. Reading those first gives context but isn’t necessary to start this one.

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Collapsing into one of the comfier library chairs set between some stacks, George took a sip of the small glass of whiskey she figured she'd earned. She'd just scolded a fucking demon from hell. What was she thinking?! It had been pretty cool, but pissing off an evil, powerful being was maybe not the smartest. She could have gotten herself killed!

It had been unavoidable though; upon realizing that Demon Tim must have been the reason they suspected her of being involved in Jack's disappearance, she had been furious. Not only was it not true, it was insulting, humiliating, and just plain rude. It was also simply a bad plan. So, she took it upon herself to enlighten him and to correct his offensive insinuations. Hopefully, it wouldn't come back to bite her in the ass.

Her focus shifted then to Jack. Reflecting over her time there, there were things she remembered having happened on the show. The refugees in the bunker, AU Michael attacking, Jack losing his powers, Lucifer dude being just a regular human dude now; all of it was familiar, even when it terrified her (see: AU Michael attack). But, when they told her Jack was missing, she was thrown off at first. It wasn't something she remembered seeing on the show. Then again, she'd only just finished binging from season 10 to the end of 13 a couple weeks ago and hadn't started 14 yet. So, maybe she was past the point of being able to tell when things were part of their prescribed timeline or not? Therefore, even if Jack had been kidnapped on the show, she wouldn't have any info for them, right?

The problem was, the more she thought about it the more she began to believe she had seen something about this storyline. Jack being missing, the three of them going to save him-

Was it Ryan telling you about some episode where they rescued Jack in the redwoods? They had filmed it on location at some tourist spot you went to as a kid all the time and she thought you'd think it was cool… where was that?

She couldn't remember, and it frustrated her. She was also worried that she was making this all up just to be helpful.

Taking another sip, she allowed her thoughts to wander between episode scenes like an internal microfiche as she tried to nail down her recollection, No, I can definitely picture all four of them in the woods and fighting. Someone had kidnapped Jack, wanting his powers for something… was it the angels?

"Well, that was interesting," Dean stated, startling her out of her thoughts. The three of them were walking into the library a surprisingly short while after she left them with Tim.

Looking up at them, she set the glass down on a nearby shelf and stood up. Dean didn't elaborate further while he poured his own glass. The expressions each one wore were indiscernible and she grew nervous.

"Oh?" George raised a brow and looked between them, "Did he talk? Because you know, I've actually been sitting here thinking about this whole situation and something about Jack going missing is very familiar. Now, unfortunately, I am a few seasons behind, and-""

Dean took a sip, looking at her with curious amusement, and interrupted, "I was talking about you."

George looked surprised and then grimaced, "No, no. I'm not interesting, not at all. I'm the exact opposite of interesting. I'm-I'm… I'm…"

"Uninteresting?" Castiel offered helpfully as she struggled to find the words. Sam and Dean rolled their eyes in unison.

"Right! Thank you, Castiel. I'm highly uninteresting." She gulped a bit and wrung her hands as the three of them kept watching her. In the silence, she nervously looked in Castiels direction and blurted quickly, "I'm also George! Hi! Really nice to meet you! Big fan!"

"Nice to meet you," Castiel smiled awkwardly and nodded a greeting, looking at the other two with a confused expression, "...fan of what?"

"Right, positively boring," Sam interjected sarcastically before he could stop himself. He definitely thought she was interesting. First she's just a beautiful woman, then she's a beautiful woman he may or may not have had a life altering dream about ten years ago, and now she was a beautiful woman from an alternate reality where his life was a prime time television show… who he may or may not have had a life altering dream about ten years ago. 'Uninteresting' was definitely not an adjective he'd use for her.

Dean snorted, "Yea, boring is the last word I would use to describe that scene earlier. You caused Tim to sing like a canary, by the way."

Her jaw dropped in disbelief, "Say what?"

"I almost say we hire her to be our monster torture hypeman," He joked, looking at Sam with a raised eyebrow.

Sam ignored him and addressed Geroge's question, "After you left, Tim-"

"Cleetus," Dean interjected sarcastically.

"Cleetus… well, he sort of... started crying? He said he'd tell us everything we wanted to know if we promised to keep you away from him." Sam looked strangely apologetic and she let a few nervous chuckles escape, unsure whether to believe what they were saying.

"We think you hurt his feelings," Castiel explained further. "Which fortunately seemed to motivate him to talk, so thank you."

"I guess his demon mommy didn't teach him about sticks and stones," Dean cracked, taking another swig.

"Huh. OK. Neat!" George didn't know what to say; she was confused and strangely proud of herself. But she didn't want them to think she wasn't chill, so she shrugged nonchalantly, "You're welcome, I guess. Anyway, as I was saying, I'm not caught up to the current season of my timeline but I think I remember this whole Jack-gone-missing thing a little bit. I want to say you all track him down somewhere in… Oregon? Washington? I'm getting a Northwest-ish feeling." She began unconsciously pacing around the room, gesturing energetically with her hands. "I can picture a battle taking place in the woods...Jack being in danger, you all being in danger, too...some fighting...maybe someone losing the fight? Or getting really hurt," She glanced worriedly at Castiel. He'd be the only actor they'd axe of the three of them, so it stood to reason he'd be the most likely to die if she was right.

Dean and Sam shared a look before Dean asked, "Fine, I'll bite. Do you know a city? A time-frame? Who we're fighting? Anything specific?"

George paused and then slumped a bit in defeat, "No. I've only really watched up through, like, literally now. Other than random things I've heard or seen in passing, I don't know anything that's happened since ya'll got back from the apocalypse world. Been purposefully trying to avoid spoilers, too, which is a decision I now regret, obviously."

"OK, well look, sweetheart, it's OK," Dean began, in an embarrassingly condescending, douchey tone, "We don't expect you to help us. I mean, we're grateful about the assist with Cleetus, obviously but this-" Dean vaguely motioned in her direction and she raised an offended eyebrow, "-was obviously just a weird magical mess that Rowena left for us to clean up yet again. So, you just sit back and relax, and once we find Jack we'll figure out how to get you back home in a jiff, OK?" He winked and finger gunned at her, adding, "Don't you worry your pretty little head about it." In his way, Dean was trying to convey to her a sense of ease and comfort that they would take care of things. But, unsurprisingly, he came off incredibly dismissive and patronizing. Her cheeks flushed an angry red; she'd had it up to here with him by now.

Sam and Castiel exchanged nervous glances at the look on her face and Sam tried to stop it before the inevitable happened, "Uh, Dean, mayb-"

Cutting him off, George slowly walked toward Dean, eyes blazing, "Listen sweet cheeks." She had a polite smile on her face as she tried her hardest to muster up the same condescending, silky, sweet Dean-tone, "I'm sympathetic to the fact that you can't help but be an insufferably arrogant ass most of the time-that's just how you were written," for a split second she saw Dean's cool-guy-smug-face falter and she relished it. She could tell she landed a blow, even if it was a small one, "but maybe you could do us all a favor and try to ignore your cro-magnon dated natural urges and attempt to be open minded for once in your life? Just try to consider the fact that, like it or not, I might not be a total useless red-shirt? That maybe I-once again the lone female in the entire world according to Supernatural-might actually be useful? Hmm? Might actually have useful-albeit vague-information for you? Or would taking your lead from a woman be too threatening to you overbearing, uber-macho, 'we-get-it-you're-totally-straight' masculinity?"

Dean's head jerked back in offense, "Now, wait a minute! What's that supposed to mean?"

"Don't worry your pretty little head about it," She mocked him in a deep, goofy tone, high-fiving herself internally. Nailed it! She'd always hated how damn smug his character was. Yes, fine, he was hot and charming and smart as fuck and right at least like 75% of the time, but he didn't have to be so fucking arrogant about it all the time. She preferred a man with some humility.

Sam was smirking at the look on Dean's face and muttered teasingly, "How does it feel, Cleetus?"

"Except, you actually don't." Cas interjected begrudgingly, as he thoroughly enjoyed watching Dean get verbally bitch-slapped. In fact, he could watch it all day, but they needed to focus on Jack.

"Scuse me?" She said, maintaining her sweet tone while staring daggers at Dean. "Don't what?"

"Have useful information for us," the angel said begrudgingly matter-of-fact.

"Er," Sam interjected seeing the look on her face, "Uh, well, it's just according to Tim-Cleetus-whatever, Jack is being held captive inside an old church in a small ghost town outside Butte."

Dean slapped his hands over his mouth in mock surprise and then, taking a few steps toward George, he mimed a balloon being popped by an impractically large needle. He had an impossibly large grin spread across his face.

"She still has a point, Dean," Sam sighed in an annoyed, if not slightly embarrassed, tone at his brother's display.

Cas nodded in agreement, "Yes, you were incredibly condescending and unfriendly in your attempt at being friendly earlier. Even though she's wrong about Jack, she's right about your inability to relinquish control-to anyone, though, not specifically women."

"You all suck." Dean said flatly.

George ignored him and shook her head. She was more and more sure about her information by the second; despite her doubts she could feel she was right. "Listen, I'm telling you, Jack is not in some bullshit church in Montana. He's…" She struggled to remember. "Erg, somewhere rainy and wooded!"

"Rainy and wooded, you say?" She cringed angrily at the sound of Dean's voice. "That's really great, very helpful. Say, maybe we should look up your little murder buddy-OwnsHisOwnAxe69, was it?-and ask if he's got Jack stashed in the Marin Headlands?" Dean's voice dripped with sarcasm.

George shook her head at him and closed her eyes tight in an effort to block out his negativity. Walking slowly away from him and into the map room, she started talking to herself, in a pointedly loud voice. Her focus bounced between episodes from the show and conversations with her friend, Ryan, a Supernatural Encyclopedia. She was hoping she could piece together something useful.

"OK, hang on, Jack is born, gets sucked into Apocalypse World, comes back, has his grace stolen but he's safely with you guys, he's happy, he's great-albeit, moody and not the best at video games. Then he disappears and you can't find him, yadda yadda."

While she rambled, her mind's eye began conjuring images of what she assumed were scenes from the episode she was trying to think of. While helpful, it was also disconcerting since she'd never actually seen it. She thought perhaps she'd seen clips on youtube while watching bloopers? She never could stay away from them, even if she hadn't seen the episode yet; they were just too funny. Maybe her overactive imagination was just creating scenes around what little knowledge she did have, "...and there's an epic-potentially deadly-fight scene at the end of one of the last episodes of the season. An episode that was, oh so noteworthily filmed on location iiiiinnn…" She tried to demand that her memories behave for her but it was challenging, considering she shouldn't have any memories of having watched the damn thing at all. "...where? Fuck me!" She snarled, chasing desperately after her murky visions as they swirled too abstractly for her to discern.

In a sudden moment of unusual clarity she could see the words displayed behind her eyelids. '...False Klamath? Where the fuck… why does that sound familiar? She flashed to the location in her memories and saw big wooden statues towering outside the scenic little tourist trap

Her eyes popped open with a gasp, "Johnny Appleseed!"

"Johnny Appleseed?" Dean teased, mock exasperatedly, "We're trying to find JACK."

"The Johnny Appleseed statue at The Trees of Enigma! Just outside False Klamath, Oregon!" She slammed both her hands down on the table in front of her in uncontrollably jubilant victory. "HA! Take THAT!" She jumped up excitedly and punched her fist in the air. "I did it! I remembered!"

"Sam, can you translate any of this?" Dean asked, annoyed.

"On the show," She started smugly, before Sam could say anything, "the battle that you two get into when you find Jack, takes place at a tourist spot called The Trees of Enigma. The episode was filmed on location at said tourist spot, in-say it with me now-False Klamath, Oregon. Oregon, Dean. A place that is known for being both rainy and wooded." Her finger was placed on the map table in the general area of Oregon, "that's where you'll find Jack. I'm sure of it." Her adrenaline was pumping and she was so stoked. It felt really good to be useful; like she was part of the show!

"Yea, that's great, sounds fun," Dean started dismissively, though toned down a bit, "but we're not risking Jack's life to follow your hunch."

"Excuse me. Why is my so-called hunch less believable than a demon's word? Especially a demon named Cleetus. Rude," George looked particularly offended now.

"Tim gave us real, solid intel and we've never had a problem when we've relied on our trusted resources in the past," He answered confidently. George's head jerked toward him like she hadn't heard correctly and she gave Sam and Castiel some crazy eyebrows.

"Sorry, you understand that I do watch the show, right?" She asked rhetorically, with a doubtful expression. When he rolled his eyes, she let out a frustrated huff. "Dean, think about this! He's a demon! He lies! Look, I know you have no reason in the world to trust me but you've got to; just think about it. Even IF it is demons that have Jack, don't you think it's possible that the prisoner demon you're threatening to torture might give you a false lead? Especially if he's naive enough to think he'll be able to escape and doesn't want to get in trouble with his bosses? C'mon, this is not-the-sharpest-tack-Tim we're talking about!"

Sam and Castiel had agreeably expressions but Dean's was stubbornly disagreeable, though she could tell he knew she was right. The thought of them going to Montana gave her a dreadful, suffocating feeling, like death.

So, she tried one more tactic and held her hands up in prayer, "Dean please, I don't know what and I don't know how I know, but I know in my gut that if you go to Montana, something terrible will happen. And Jack's not there, I promise you." She dropped all the bullshit and gave him her best seriously-just-listen-to-me face but Dean still wasn't budging.

"Christ, I knew you were stubborn but this is ridiculous, ugh. OK, fine!" She threw her hands up and turned on her heel, heading toward the dungeon.

"Wait, where are you going?" Sam asked quickly.

"Obviously I didn't hurt his feelings badly enough the first time, so I'm going to go have another chat with Cleetus and get him to admit that he's a liar, liar, pant-"

"Er-you... can't do that," Sam cut her off apologetically.

"Sam, he's handcuffed to a chair. I appreciate the concern but-"

"He means you really can't," Dean added. George looked toward him annoyed and Dean continued, "After he gave us everything we needed we pretty much, chk," he finished, slicing a finger across his throat in demonstration. When she looked like she wanted to strangle him, he shrugged and offered, "RIP Cleetus."

George rolled her eyes in exasperation, "But he was lying! Don't you confirm the information before you cut off the source?! Oh my god, why am I even asking? You're the Winchesters, of course you don't." The three of men looked between each other guiltily and she placed her hand on her hip, "What if that was just an act and Tim saw an opportunity. Feeding you some bullshit so that you couldn't actually find Jack? Or, maybe Tim has nothing to do with Jack at all, and sending you to Montana is just a good old fashioned ambush?!" She paused for a moment and gave a surprised, appreciative nod, "Hmm, maybe I underestimated ole' Cleetus a bit. Could have been smarter than I thought."

"She does have a point, Dean. The chances that he was lying are incredibly high," Cas conceded slightly, giving Dean a questioning look. "We have no proof that his lead is any better than hers. Demon's lie."

"Damnit, alright, fine," Dean said, sighing angrily. "Sam and I will go to Oregon to look for Jack; Cas, check out Butte-carefully, strictly recon, do not engage-and call us if you find any trace of him." He shot a quick warning look at George. "We'll turn around and come right to you. Sound like a plan? Great, let's go."

"Wait, no! Don't send him to Butte! Didn't you hear me? If it's an ambush, he'll get his ass kicked!"

"Hey." Cas looked hurt and George softened her face at him.

"Oh, I'm sorry Castiel. You're a total badass when the plot calls for it, otherwise, getting beat up is just kind of your MO." Ignoring the confused look on the angel's face, She turned back to Dean, "and besides you need Castiel in Oregon, Dean. I've seen it!"

"Oh? I thought you hadn't 'seen this episode yet'?" Dean said sarcastically.

"I-I… Well, OK, I haven't, but I've seen the three of you and Jack all together for this fight. Just trust me, you need him there. What if Jack is hurt when you find him? Cas can heal him, right?" She made a questioning face to Castiel; at the moment she couldn't remember the extent of his powers on the show and he was always losing one or another for whatever reason, anyway. But if she was right, she figured that even if Dean wouldn't trust her gut, he might trust that having a healing angel on their journey would be a benefit. "Is that a power you have? I feel like I've seen you do that."

"She's right, Dean. I can heal him if we find him injured," Cas offered her helpfully and she shot him a grateful expression, actually looking him in the eyes for the first time, albeit fleetingly.

"Have you seen Jack get hurt?" Sam asked her, trying to help, too. He remained a neutral party at this point, but if he was honest with himself, he believed her. Maybe a little too much, which is why he was trying to stay impartial. If he was being blinded by his confusing memories and the undeniable-yet-currently-being-denied feelings he was developing for her and ended up wrong, Jack could be killed.

"Uh… I mean, no… not definitively, but it's pretty standard for the show. You're all constantly getting hurt during fights and when it's close to a season finale the danger factor is skyhigh for anyone who isn't you two…" After motioning to the brothers, she trailed off, afraid that this reasoning was going to hurt her more than help her.

Sam gave her a long, contemplative look before finally offering, "I can have a small team go check out Butte. Maybe Garth can join? Last time I talked to him he was near there."

Dean's teeth and fists were clenched as he took a deep, exaggerated breath, "Fine. We'll send a group to Butte and call Garth from the road-No arguments!" He held up his hand to her as she opened her mouth to speak. "The three of us are going to Oregon, just as you demand, but I'm not leaving anything to chance on some alien's hunch. Garth can handle himself."

She made an indignant face at him-she wasn't an alien, she was from an alternate reality! Get it right. But, while she was afraid of someone getting hurt in the obvious trap that had been set for them in Montana, the thought of Garth going instead didn't give her the same full-body fear shudder. So, she figured she'd take what she could get and not push the issue further. Besides, she knew Dean wasn't going to be happy about her next move and she had to pick her battles.

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gojaimas · 6 years

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Late Comments

Hello people. It’s been four months since I finished I Wanted What I Saw That Day, and I’ve received many more comments since then. I figured I’d do some more responses, and give you all a quick update on what my plan is for writing more in the future.

So, I’ve been taking a bit of a break from writing, but I’ve been mulling over ideas for my next story and I think I’m ready to start planning it out officially now. It’s gonna be set in the Legend of Zelda universe, and it will be mostly centered around original incarnations of pre-existing character archetypes that have appeared throughout the series. But just so you know, it will still be a long time before I start posting again, so please be patient with me.

Now, onto your comments:

EternalWisdom: “I just gave a standing ovation for a fanfic of a cartoon from my childhood: That's how good you are. I've already praised much of the technical work such as your pacing and understanding of the characters, but I'd be lying if I said this Final Chapter didn't just play my heart strings like a golden violin. I intend for my own work to (eventually) convince readers of my characters having 3-Dimensional, 'clicking' personalities like the masterpiece you just bestowed upon our nostalgic, incest-supporting fandom. Best of wishes from an avid reader (with a somewhat pretentious name I came up with years ago), yours sincerely, EternalWisdom.”

Wow, thanks! It’s very nice to hear people found my depictions of the characters to be that well done. And don’t worry too much about your name. I’m already hoping I don’t live to regret choosing a broken japanese phrase for mine.

Anonymoose: “Sneaky how Lucy suddenly became the main character. Loved it the ending. I wouldn’t change it or create an alternate. It was perfectly bitter sweet.”

Lucy’s always been sneaky, after all. And thanks, I plan to leave the ending alone for now. I will still consider continuing it in some way in the future though.

justanaverageguy: “"I wanted what I saw that day."...I would pull a CinemaSins and say "Roll Credits," but I would also say it was well used in this work (Plus, it was in the last chapter, after all). I had always thought the "I" in the title was Gwen, but seeing that it was actually Lucy was a great reveal. Lucy truly was the star of this fic. Her character makes this one stand out among anything else (that I've read at least) from this community. I've always seen Ben and Gwen as a great duo ever since I first watched the show, and I will always enjoy fics and episodes focusing on those two. But seeing these three work as a trio was quite a unique take on the characters, and they work so well together. Hats off to you, my friend, for what might possibly be my favorite Ben 10 fanfic. I look forward to checking out what else you may do. I am a Zelda fan too, so I'll probably end up seeing your work again at some point. Until then, ciao!

I couldn’t resist the title drop! It was really fun holding onto the secret of the title’s true meaning for nine whole months while everyone else tried to figure out what it meant. I’ve said before that I’ve probably done more for the Lucy fandom than I have for the Bwen fandom at this point. I would certainly like to see her appearing in more stories. Thank you for your compliments, average guy! I look forward to your reactions to my Zelda story in the future!

jairoesme: “wow that was epic I wasn't expecting the title to show up in there as I read that part it felt so strong. Great story”

Thanks! Seeing everyone reacting to the title drop like this seriously has me giggling. I love it!

Spazbulba: “That was pure magic - it has been years since I was simultaneously both so happy and so sad with the end of a story. Gojaimas You truly are a Legend!”

Truly.

armandaza: “I wanttt moreeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee, no wayyyyyyy T_T”

More??

Guest: “Well, it took me 17 and a half hours to do it, but I finished it. All 300,000 words of it. I gotta say, this has been one of the best bwen stories I’ve ever read in my life. I was so excited to see that there was a new story to read after not looking for months, I read it all in one day! I was wondering something though. Since you basically have the market cornered on Ben 10 fanfic now that everythings died down so much, I was wondering if every now and then, you could post another story about it. Not necessarily long ones, just a one-shot every now and then and maybe a longer one if you’re up to it (maybe even a few stories with Lucy and Ben or even Gwen). It’s been ten years since Ben 10 ended, so there isn’t much more new material out there for the community to enjoy. I know you said you were planning on moving on after this, but maybe every now and then, when you’re stumped with writers block or you’re just bored, maybe you could throw together a little story for us. If it’s even a fraction as good this story was, it would honestly make everyone’s day to have something new to read, especially if you’re writing it. :) Cheers man, happy writing. -Just another fan”

Wow, 17 and a half hours? Damn, dude. I hope you got some sleep after that. But also, wow, that’s really flattering! I’m glad you liked it so much. Doing little Ben 10 one-shots set in my story’s canon every now and then as I work on my Zelda story is something I’ll consider. I grew really fond of working with those characters, so it’s definitely something I’d love to do again some time.

Guest: “Beautiful. What a journey this was” Dark Ace Demon: “What a journey. Thank you for posting this masterpiece up, truly.“

Thank you! Alexa, play “Don’t Stop Believing.”

Guest: “Just as an FYI, a werewolf is a man-wolf. Wer being the old english word for man." (Context: Chapter 12)

That was based on a real conversation I had with someone back when I was (even more of) a little know-it-all. Gwen is smart, but she’s still a kid. She can make mistakes too. I was the Gwen at the time. I was corrected by Snape when I watched the third Harry Potter movie.

GoodScottish: “That was an amazing read and well worth staying up all night to finish it but its just left me wanting so much more. There is just so many things that i want to know what happens next to. Like what happens to Lucy does she find that special someone? What do Ben and Gwen get up to on this summer vacation? Does grandpa Max find out? What happens when they get back can they keep hiding it? And most importantly for me what happens when their parents find out?”

Many thanks, good scotsman! I know there’s still a lot left unanswered, but that’s how Ben and Gwen feel now too. They still have a long road ahead of them. Maybe I’ll write more of it one day, but I think that was a good place to leave it for now. Also, today I’m finding out a lot of my readers have terrible sleeping habits.

Mason: “Your country is proud of you son.”

Fuck yeah!

Kira Sema: “Anyone else reread this in the span of a couple days and start crying all over again? Because here come the waterworks all over again. I know I reviewed, but had to review again after a reread. I think I've said this before, but I relate to Lucy so much. It's hard not to be considering how she felt. Great story once again. Even though it's 48 chapters, all those chapters were worth it and all as much in character as they could be.”

Thank you once again, Kira Sema! I’ll admit I often cringe too hard at my own writing to reread too much of it, but I’m glad you enjoyed it as much the second time around!

Guest: “I read through this everyday... it’s a bittersweet ending. It was like waiting for an anime episode every week and you feel sad when it’s over, so you go through it again holding onto hope for a season 2.”

I know that feel.

“I’ll even wait as long as for an incredibles sequel if I have to.”

Um. I have some good news for you on that front, buddy.

“I had no idea the story would stop there though so it kinda threw me off guard... I was all “wait it’s really over?!” I thought we’d deal with more of having their relationship bloom, being exposed and we’ll have a year 4 summer trip before coming to an end. I mean having the epilogue near the end of a summer trip would really match the beginning of where Ben and Gwen started off in the story but show us how much has changed between the two of them. But I guess it depends on how we look at it, we could also view it as the “Start of Something New” with Ben & Gwen going to their trademark summer trip as a couple then they were as kids who couldn’t wait to get rid of each other at the end of it in the beginning, so maybe it’s a sign that their story isn’t over yet. Lucy was one of the most breathtaking and heartbreaking characters in this story, kind of like menma, a bit of an airhead. always happy, puts other people infront of her feelings.”

She probably was one of my minor inspirations for Lucy’s character. I think I watched Anohana at some point while I was writing this story, hence the inspiration for the title. I love that little cutie.

Thank you for the rest of your comment too, kind guest! I really appreciate you taking the time to write such a glowing review of my work. I’m glad I was able to give you another Bwen story to read!

Guest: “Mr. Gojaimas, I don’t feel so good...”

I love how Infinity War came out during the time I was posting this. I’ll always associate my story with this meme because of my fans, and I’m very happy about that.

TargaryenFire: “Hey Just came here to say i am loving this story, one of the best i have ever read with this ship. Not wanting to be a bother, but will Gwen's anodite blood come into play in the future?”

Thank you! You’ve probably seen your question answered in a different chapter by now, but just in case: Anodites don’t exist in my story, Gwen is completely human, and a lot of other stuff from the sequels is ignored.

Guest: “Your legend will live on...”

Hopefully in the form of oddly specific fandom inside jokes.

Shirokokuro: “You did an excellent job on this-especially in keeping within the 4-year timeline you had set! It was all so sweet, and that ending of them going on a summer trip together was amazing! Here's to you on being such a dedicated and awesome author!”

Thanks so much! I’m pretty happy with how everything turned out, and I’m glad you liked it too.

Lost: “I think I just binge-read this whole thing. Uh. It was riveting, to say the least. The final connection between Lucy's actions, her memories and the title was very powerful. Thanks for writing this! :)”

You are very welcome! Once again, Lucy steals the show!

Guest: “I read the entire story in a week. I loved the character development and how you effectively gave some deeper understanding of the characters not just Ben and Gwen, but also Lucy, Natalie, Joel, Emily, and Julie. I love you so much for creating this fanfiction and your undeniable talent in writing a story. That is why it pains me even more for how the chapter ended and contiualy wished that Proffesor Paradox or even Gwendolyn could just come up from the future and change Lucy's ideas or yours so that the three could be like a three- man couple. I am just so heart broken right now bailing my eyes out and just hoping there is a continuation (not a different ending) where it can be from Bwen to Bwency (I don't know if that's a word).”

Giving minor characters more development is something I’m a huge fan of, as you can plainly see with Lucy. I’m always happy to hear from binge-readers! Bwency is most definitely a word, and if I ever do a continuation, I very well might make it happen! But for now, Ben is simply following this sage advice from yours truly:

Slykke: “Beautiful shit here. Binge read this in 5 days. Really liked how this was wrapped up and how you turned someone that I forgot even existed in the OS into a favorite. Lucy was amazing in this story and now holds a special place in my heart after this. Thank you for the wonderful read and I cant wait to see your next work.”

“Yes, yes! Praise me more!” -Lucy

Amin: “This has such solid plot that every other fanfic seemed inferior. I kinda wish this story was real.”

Thank you! If any Ben 10 writers are reading this and wanna retroactively make it all canon instead of the sequels, that would be just fine by me.

Guest: “when are we gonna get the Lucy route?”

Not sure. Maybe someday. I am very interested in how I could make that happen.

Guest: “Gojaimas is... GOD. He does a miracle and then leaves us. This was the second coming of Jesus Christ.”

I’m flattered, but I’ve never made a tree.

Well, that’s all for now. Bye, everybody! I hope to hear from all of you again someday!

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Contestshipping Review - Part Eighteen - Spontaneous Cumbusken

Index

-The Title-

For this episode I actually finally figured out how to correctly spell “Cumbusken” and for a little fun fact about this episode, when it was originally released the people who made the episode title also accidentally misspelled it at “Cumbuskin” This was later corrected, though the error remained on the DVD version, foreign language dubs and when it re-aired several other times.

-Episode Link-

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=mhohlPGa0Mg

-The Review-

0:00

The episode starts out with the narrator explain how everybody has finally arrived on Chrysanthemum island.

0:14

And Ceptile still can’t use any attacks due to last episode.

Ash: Hey c’mon you can do those moves, you just have to try harder! Get that stuff out of your mind and do it!

Drew: You’re just making it worse y’know.

Everybody: Huh?? :turns over to see Drew:

Drew: You’re not thinking about it from Ceptile’s point of view.

22 seconds in and he’s already here to scold somebody on their training ability.

0:33

and now the theme song was immediately finished when that happened.

Huh.

0:43

So now it’s back to that scene like the theme song never happened.

So Drew

Drew: Telling your Pokemon to try hard just gives them more stress, and you don’t need that.

Like if you just listen to the tone of voice he is saying this is he isn’t acting rude or anything he’s just giving advice and overall acting nice. Granted, that might be the new voice actor not knowing what he was supposed to do although I highly doubt it becuase of the music playing in the background.

0:50

May: Uh, hey Drew, :hold up letter: did you send this to me?

Drew: Huh?

May: See, I’d love to be in the contest with you... but mark me words! I’m gonna beat you!

Drew: Except I didn’t send that.

May: Huh?

Drew: Come on May. :flicks hair: You should at least know that that isn’t my style.

Everybody: We should, huh?

I don’t get the joke what does the Japanese version say

1:10

Drew: Truthfully I’m not even going to be in this Contest.

May: Huh? You’re not?

Drew: I’ve been in so many Contests lately my Pokemon have been wipes, so we came to Chrysanthemum island for a little RNR.

He’s been in more than five contest lately I wonder who he lost to them.

May: RNR? Go figure... :looks back down at her letter: But if you didn’t send me this... I wonder who did.

1:30

Now for the Team Rocket scene. skip to 1:59 if you don’t want to hear it.

So Jessie wants to enter herself and Mime.JR into the contest.

Also, James:

James: Jessie the point of a Pokemon contest is to show of your Pokemon not how you look in an evening gown.

and

James: If you’re going to be a fool must it involve the children?

1:59

So May is using Cumbusken and Munchlax to win the contest, so before she is trying to train. When Munchlax tries to use focus punch on Cumbusken, he jumps into the air and how of the way, but Munchlax keeps going forward with the focus punch, already being in the air and all, and:

2:16

I think it was intended that she ducked but it looked like Munchlax was just a little off to the side.

May: I’m so sorry! Are you okay?

Briana: Ya! But I’m not too sure about your Munchlax.

“Naw I’m fine"

2:28

May: “chuckles” Me and that Munchlax. I guess we’re a little overly hyped!

Briana: That’s becuase you lost in the Wisteria Contest and Munchlax wants to make up for it, right?

May: Now, how did you know about the Wisteria contest?

May you seem to forget that there are thousands of people watching contests live and probably even more on re-runs.

Briana: Yup! I was there, I really wanted to meet you becuase I thought you might’ve been feeling bad after the contest, but I couldn’t find you and I left the rose and card instead!

May: :Hold up card: So this card from from you?

Briana: Yup! and now I get to meet you face-to-face in person! Oh ya! I’m Briana here’s a ro-

May: Munchlax how rude!

Hopefully they don’t do this to all of May’s roses. The roses are flowers that butterflies eat and the rose was meant for Beautifly.

It was totally meant for Beautifly.

Briana: Well at least we know that Munchlax likes roses too!

May: About the card, the confusion started becuase you forgot to put your name on it.

Briana: Huh??? :takes card: Oh! that’s awful! I’m sorry!

You know what I’d also like to point out that she only wrote one sentence on the letter put nvm that...

May: That’s okay! I thought it was from a friend of mine named Drew and I just asked him about it.

You know what it was only back in “Hi Ho Silver Wind” that he was Rival zoned now he is Friend zoned.

But seriously she considers Drew as a friend now.

Briana: you did???

Briana: You mean Mr.Drew’s here right now???

3:23

You know what May is being so nice to Briana she wanted to meet Drew :)

Also look at how anti-nipple this show is. Like he doesn’t need a towl shouldn’t he be swimming?

My brother: Why is nobody in the pool?

The water is completely still wtf.

May: See there he is!

Briana: You were right! I’m actually breathing the same air he is!

Not from that distance you aren’t, unless you mean you’re breathing oxygen.

May: I could introduce you.

Briana: That’d be awesome!

May: :Both May and Briana start running over to him: Dreeeew!

Drew: Huh? :Looks over and sees May then sits up: May what’s up?

May: I’ve got a new friend! Her name’s Briana, and she’s a big fan of yours who became a coordinator after watching you preform!

Drew: :stands up: Wow you did?

Drew: Hey thank you!

You know what everybody keeps saying Drew is a douche and although he said some “rude” stuff to May that I’ve explained multiple times before to anybody else (That isn’t taking advantage of May like Harley) he is actually an extremely nice boy and he just seems to be trying to be nice to people, like for example Briana right here. He knows that he is a fan and probably has a lot of anxiety from meeting him so he’s just trying to be nice and all that.

3:50

Briana: It-it’s nice to meet you...

May: And it was Briana who sent me that card!

Briana: I didn’t sign my name and I feel like such a total fool!!!

Drew: You didn’t do anything wrong. May just made another silly mistake.

Back to the contestshipping I know and love. Just Drew poking fun of May.

May: Well there’s only one person like that that i know would send me something like that Mr.Rose!

Drew: Mr. Rose??? :blushes:

Rosellia: :Starts laughing:

Drew: Rosellia!

Rosellia: Throws arms up into the air: Rosellia!

I think Rosellia likes seeing her trainer in flustering situations

Did you see that blush?

I don’t even have to explain it DID YOU SEE THAT BLUSH WHEN MAY CALLED HIM MR. ROSE.

4:15 May: :turns to Briana: Y’know, If you’d like to shake Drew’s hand I’m sure he’d love to!

Briana: Ya! Really...?

Drew: I’d be happy to.

Briana: It’s so awesome to meet you...

4:24

“You’ve done this before right?”

“And you talk too much.”

This is the most popular Contestshipping gif becuase of how out of context it can be taken.

Drew: Starts walking off: Bye! Good luck at the contest!

4:36

Max: :watching from a distance with and Ash Brock: Drew is such a weenie.

Those of you who read these and have never watched any of these episode will not believe how popular that line is.

4:40

Briana: Wow... he’s cute!

Briana: :turns over to May with angry face and tone of voice: So! It’s you and me!

May: Huh?!?!

Briana: I’m aiming for you in this contest and I’m gonna win!

May: But why me???

Briana: Look. I’ve seen every contest that you and Drew have entered and I know for a fact that you’re the only female coordinator he has respect for!

He also has respect for Robert who is a guy so

Also what about Solidad?

Actually know Briana doesn’t know who she is

And nor did the writers at this point I bet she was just a really ruched in character.

May: I didn’t know that!

Briana: Duh! I may be inexperienced and haven't won a single ribbon yet but one day I’m going to be a top class coordinator and Mr.Drew will respect me! And I figured that the quickest way to get his respect is to beat you in a contest!I’ve been training for this moment like crazy and I’m ready to go! So get ready for a fight!

You know Briana, you might’ve seen every contest that they’ve went to but you haven’t seen their conversations backstage or the exact reason why Drew respects May so much. Last time he fought he she was extremely inexperienced, the reason she respects her isn’t just becuase of how her capabilities have grown but actually talking to her and figuring out her personality outside of battles, and backstage conversations are also an important thing here too.

5:21

Max: Wow, someones after May again.

Like in order to undertand this you need to watch it just listen to max.

“Someones after May again...”

“This happens every episode...”

5:31

Yay! The contest has started!

5:52

Drew is sitting next to May’s friends for the contest.

I find this notable you can figure out why.

5:59

And now for Jessie’s appeal round.

So it starts out with Jessie running onto the stage with some Hawaiian outfit or whatever. She announces herself as “Jessiebella”

James: Now there’s a stretch Jessiebella.

Okay I feel like I need to explain this joke becuase most people reading this don’t get it.

Every time Jessie enters a Pokemon contest she changes her name slightly, we all know this. “Jessiebella” doesn’t seem like too much of a stretch, but actually let me explain.

As everybody knows James comes from an extremely wealthy home, but what confuses people is “Well if that’s true then how come those three are always broke and how comes James is a team rocket member in the first place if he could just live with his wealthy and loving family?” and there is actually a very realistic answer to this.

So when James was around ten years old he has a Growlith. This will be important later. He met a girl named “Jessiebella”and being ten he got a playful crush on her. At one point he was playfully chatting with her and he playfully asked her to marry him as ten year old do.

Somehow they actually got engaged and would marry once James becomes Eighteen (He is Seventeen if you need my indefinite proof on that I’ll tell you if you ask), but Jessiebella is actually a bitch and at one point she tries to make him get red of his beloved Growlith. After that James was able to realize what a bitch she actually is and isn’t able to call off the marriage so he ran way from home and if he tries to go home he’ll have to marry the bitch.

Also, this is how she looks:

The only difference between her and Jessie is what she wears, her name, her personality, and she has green eyes not blue like Jessie.

BACK TO THE FUCKING REVIEW

6:10

So then Jessie releases Mime.Jr and it comes out spinning on their head. Hopefully Jessie got some cuteness points from that. After that Jessie and Mine.Jr do the tango and we get this funny scene:

James: Groove Mime Jr. !!!

6:49

Now for May’s appeal!

May sends out Munchlax and immediately tells him to use Solar Beam. Because the sun is visible he is able to pull it off immediately. Brock explains this, and Drew says “It would’ve been a god attack for a resort like this.”

I wonder if there was any way for May to know that the sun would be out.

May calls out for Metrenome.

Max: Oh why is she calling for that attack at a time like this!

Ash: It’s a chance!

Drew: It’s a chance, but I think it’s worth it. If she pulls it off it’s a showcase. It puts your Pokemon in a great position.

Once the attack finally pulls off it becomes rest. Munchlax falls asleep. May doesn’t seem to worry too long when she pulls out her Pokeblock it immediately wakes up Munchlax and he jumps into the air to catch it, and in order to have a soft landing he uses focus punch right above the ground. Her rounds ends.

8:44

And now for Briana’s appeal.

Briana sends out a Sirskit who uses Ice beam on the ground and turns it completely to ice. Sirskit uses Agility to glide across the ice, until it jumps into the air and starts spinning like a top. this gives it a soft landing on the ice and once it does get on the ice it continues spinning like a top. it suddenly stops and poses signifying that the turn has ended.

9:34

May and Briana backstage.

May: Briana! That was awesome!

Briana: Thanks! After I remembered Mr.Drew was watching, I got so scared. I bet I’ll never made it to the second rounds after that!

Well based off of your preformence you seemed to have complete control over your nervousness and that must’ve what made your amazing preformence.

May: You’ve got to be kidding! You had the audience in the palm of your hand! You’re going to the second round for sure!

10:00

and now for the scores!

How did May and Jessie get a higher score than Briana?

I’m seriously judging the judges becuase of this choice,

10:30

Max: Drew, how do you think May’s going today? (preformence wise)

Drew: Is she using Munchlax is round two?

Brock: I think she said that she’d be using Cumbusken.

Drew: Aww give me a break! Doesn't’ she remember that Munchlax’ Solar Beam Recharges quicker in the sun? Well that’s too bad. It would’ve given her a huge advantage. Sorry guys, it seem that May messed up again.

Brock (In mocking voice): Gee Drew why don’t you tell us how you really feel?

I swear my soul Brock HAS to be talking about Contestshipping.

10:55

May: Watch closely Drew, you’re going to see a win you’ll never forget!

Briana: We’ll see...

May: I’m finally going to be able to show Drew I’m a winner!

Briana: Come on May!

May: huh?

Briana: It seems to me your feelings for Drew go way beyond Contests and battling!

May (voice a bit shaky): Huh? Me and Drew? He’s just a rival!

Briana: Oh ya??? Well I wanna know if you like Drew!

May: Like him? To be honestly... I haven't given it much thought...

Briana: Well after I win this contest I’m going to tell him that I love him!

May: That’s fine with me aside from the “When I win this” part!

Okay so this is the scene I’ve been waiting to review, waiting to talk about, waiting to explain what I’ve been saying sense the 12th review.

In the final scene of “Rhapsody in Drew”, May and Drew were talking. Drew said that he hoped to see her in the next grand festival, and told how how he and many other coordinators deal with loss. As he walked off May just stood there staring, and was extremely startled when Ash offered her the Ice Cream.

That is what Started what I’ve been calling “The unknowing crush”. She likes him, but hadn’t realized it. Little things like the letter. May was exited from the next contest, and that note made her even more exited becuase she’d finally have a chance to gain the respect from Drew, that in the back of her mind already knew she had, she just wanted to impress him, and didn’t really know why, or even realize it. That letter made her way more exited.

She gets exited to see Drew again, and feels as if she needs to impress him, even if she doesn’t know why, or even realize why. She knows she already has his respect, but her mind tried to make up a reason for why she was even more edited to go to the next contest. It never hit her that she liked him, until Briana had to point it out.

I could go on with this for much longer, but I’ll stop here. I think I’ve gotten my point through.

Jessie: All spare in love and war, but don’t you think you should save it for the battle?

Jessie: Ah young love. I’d pay to see a battle between you two!

May: This should be good, you’re be second round opponent y’know.

11:53

And now for Jessie and May’s fight.

May sends out Cumbusken and Jessie sends out Mime Jr. May starts it out by using Fire spin. When the fire spin starts going towards Mime.Jr, they dodge and uses Mimic. Mime Jr.’s Fire Spin hits and May looses points. Cumbisken uses quick attack and it’s a direct hit to Mime. Jr. Mime Jr. counters by jumping onto Cumbusken’s back and tickling him. May lost an extremely huge amount of her points by that. Mime Jr. uses Fire Spin again. When it hits Cumbusken it actually heals him, becuase he is a fire type. Cumbusken then uses Sky Uppercut on Mime Jr. and wins the battle at 13:35.

13:52

Small scene of Briana beating her opponent with Vibrava.

Food for thought: Sirskit evolves into Masqurain and Vibrava evolves into Flygon.

She might have a Budew as well but you are only supposed to use two Pokemon in this Contest.

13:57

Small scene where May defeats somebody by using quick attack.

14:02

Small scene where Briana’s Vibrava defeats somebody by using Dragon Breath.

14:08

And finally time for May and Briana’s battle!

The battle starts off with May releasing Cumbusken and Briana releasing Vibrava. May starts off by using Quick attack, but it is quickly stopped when Vibrava uses Screech. In order, to make the Vibrava stop, Cumbusken uses Fire Spin. This land a direct hit, and Vibrava then slowly pushes the Fire back with Dragon Breath before it dissapeares. When it does dissapear, Vibrava uses sand Tomb, which completely covers Cumbusken's entire lower body in sand, making him unable to move. May begs for her Pokemon to get out, and suddenly, Cumbusken's top feathers and the sand starts glowing blue, and then Cumbusken jumps out of the sand with his feet also glowing.

*Cumbusken learned Mega Kick!

Vibrava uses Dragon breath which gets a direct hit on Cumbusken. Cumbusken then tries using Sky Uppercut on Vibrava, but misses. Vibrava attempts to completely cover Cumbusken in Sand Tomb, but Cumbusken uses Mega Kick which makes all of the sand go away, and while Cumbusken is falling back to the ground he plants his foot on Vibrava and slams the ground/dragon type Pokemon into the ground, knocking them out.

May wins the battle at 17:25.

18:08

You know what sometimes you just need to appreciate the backgrounds in Pokemon they are so beautiful but sadly don’t get much attention.

Briana: You were great, really great! I can see why Mr.Drew has total respect for your talent!

May: Thanks, that really means a lot to me Briana.

Briana: Tell you what, when I get my first ribbon then I’ll tell him how I feel!

18:25

Max: Hey you guys!

Brock: I had a feeling we’d find you two over here.

Briana: Oh no May it’s Mr.Drew! :hides behind May:

Ash: You two sure know how to have a great battle!

Max: That was a great win too May!

Brock: That makes three [ribbons] right May?

May: :nods: Hey Drew I was wondering you you thought of my battle skills sense you last saw me!

Drew: To tell you the truth, I think you got lucky with that Mega kick, so if I were you :flicks hair: I’d be really grateful.

May: Thanks.

Drew: Briana, that’s your name right?

Briana: Uh- yes sir!

Drew: You were good. Very good. It’s obvious you’ve trained your Vibrava well. It’s hard work making it all the way to Flygon, but I’m sure you’ll make it.

Briana: Gee thanks! I’ll work extra hard! :faints:

Max: He sure knows how to make an impression.

Brock: Like fingernails on a blackboard.

That made me burst out laughing but where did this sudden hatred Brock has for Drew come from?

19:12

Drew: Hey May.

May: Huh?

Drew: Just two more ribbons.

May: Just... curious... how many do you have?

Drew: What counts? I just figured in your case you might need somebody to remind you! :walks off:

-Conclusion-

“I’m hoping to see you back here next year to May.” - Rhapsody in Drew

“Hey, May, just two more ribbons.” - Spontaneous Combusken

May never forgot what Drew said after the Grand Festival. She never forgot how kindly he had said that to her. Now, she is blushing like “Oh my god I’m falling in love” blushing. After Drew has reminded her about those two ribbons, she was also reminded of what Briana had said and what he had said all the way back then. What Briana had said earlier made her finally start considering the fact that she has feelings for Drew. If I had to say anything about this episode, I’d say that this is the scene where May finally realizes her feelings for Drew.

Drew didn’t forget what happened after the Grand Festival either. He actually reminded her that she needed two more ribbons before the next Grand Festival he was hoping he’d meet her at. Their first serious romantic moment was on the beach after the Grand Festival, and now their here again with a whole new revelation on May’s part. Instead of being mystified at Drew’s sudden kind words she is standing there acting like a schoolgirl in love with her crush who is standing right in from of her. Just look and compare this scene to the scene after the Grand Festival, there has been character development, and there will be so much more.

To be completely honest no other ship in the entire Pokemon anime has come this close to being canon. Not Pokeshipping, not Penguinshipping, and not even Armorshipping, where they actually kissed. Pokeshipping came close, but it was more of a joke to the writers. Sure they had their moments, but it was mainly a joke. Penguinshipping felt forced in, like it came in during the episodes where Dawn was about to leave the show, and Dawn even rejected him in the end. Armorshipping is a similure story, Serena is about to leave the show and she kisses Ash right before she leaves. It felt like her crush came from almost nowhere, and it also felt like to most standered love story for a kids show. “This girl has a crush on this boy and as she is about to go she kisses him”. It isn’t even confirmed is Ash likes her back.

I honestly have no idea what to add onto this. Consider this the ending of the conclusion. :)

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