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okay so the basic plot is that Icestar took control of all four clans, merged them into only shadowclan and then died. now there's currently only shadowclan.

so then Whitetiger is born and xe is "reborn" of Icestar. (icestar can visit him in his dreams and he talks to him in his mind) so basically Whitetiger is trying not to become evil.

so here's what I have of the plot draft so far:

shadowclan:

Leader

Bumblestar - yellow transgender tom with green eyes, black tabby stripes and black fur. (he/him)

Deputy

Tansyspeck - orange cisgender she-cat with white patches and blue eyes. (she/her)

Medicine Cats

Harestripe - calico nonbinary cat with green eyes, spots on their back and a spot around their eyes. (they/them)

Apprentice, Whitepaw

Whitepaw - scarred cisgender white tom with black tabby stripes, paws and blue eyes. (he/him)

Warriors

Clawstep - brown transgender tom with darker brown patches and white fur. has green eyes. (he/him)

Apprentice, Foxpaw

Wasptalon - tan cisgender tom with lighter tan fur and brown tabby stripes. has amber eyes. (he/they)

Apprentice, Greypaw

Shadecloud - blue bi-gender cat with darker blue tabby stripes and white fur. has amber eyes. (he/she)

Apprentice, Vinepaw

Reedpool - blue cisgender tom with black stripes and white fur. has yellow eyes. (he/him)

Apprentices

Foxpaw - orange transgender tom with white and black fur and blue eyes. looks like a fox. (he/him)

Greypaw - grey and white cisgender tom with blue eyes (he/him)

Vinepaw - dark green cisgender she-cat with lighter green tabby stripes and cream fur (she/her)

Dead cats:

Icestar- white and black cisgender scarred tom with blue eyes. (he/him)

Scorchshine- large fluffy grey tabby transgender tom with a white chest tuft and paws with amber eyes (he/him)

Darkstorm- black and white cisgender tom with amber eyes. (he/him) + (Icestar’s father)

Rosestar- light pink and white she-cat with blue eye. (she/her)

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Prologue-

shows Icestar getting attacked by Bumbleheart and a few other warriors before getting pushed off a cliff and falling into his death. He then wakes up in the dark-forest and glances around. He then is shown a kit that looks similar to him and Icestar knows that this kit will allow his leadership to lead on.

Chapter one-

Explains how Whitekit is currently the cat Icestar is reborn into and how she is controlled by Icestar and how Icestar used to be able to control her.. But now Icestar is basically only stuck in her head and can only talk to her. Icestar and Whitekit argue inside their heads about how Whitekit wants to be a medicine cat to avoid fighting but Icestar doesn’t want her to be one. Finally, they agree and Icestar points out that being a medicine cat will make Whitekit able to gain power more quickly along with the knowledge of deadly herbs. Whitekit ignores this and goes and asks Bumblestar if she can become the next medicine cat apprentice. Bumblestar shrugs and says that as long as Harestripe agrees and Harestripes says it’s fine. Whitekit then becomes Whitepaw and goes to the moonstone. But when she’s at the moonstone she is taken to the dark-forest. Icestar explains that now that she is an apprentice she will get roughly trained here during the night. Whitepaw doesn’t like this but she deals with it. She then wakes up and goes to sleep in the medicine cat den.

Chapter two-

Chapter starts with Whitepaw getting roughly trained by Icestar and with her earning a few wounds. When she wakes up Harestripe asks what happened and Whitepaw says that nothing happened but Harestripe doesn’t believe her and asks again. Whitepaw just ignores Harestripe and is panicked but Icestar tells Whitepaw to lie and say she was attacked by a fox at night when she was trying to gather herbs. Whitepaw does so. Harestripe is proud of their apprentice for gathering herbs but tells Whitepaw to be careful next time and to not go out of camp alone again. Whitepaw, although ashamed she had to lie to Harestripe, agrees. Whitepaw and Harestripe then go out gathering herbs. Harestripe quizzes Whitepaw on some of the herbs and then they return back to camp and eat.

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Chapter three-

Starts with Whitepaw starting to like being a medicine cat apprentice and is eager to learn more. He thinks that his mentor is kind and is starting to look up at Harestripe and consider them a parent figure. Since Whitepaw’s parents were killed in the battle with Icestar. Icestar tells Whitepaw that becoming a medicine cat is only so she can learn deadly herbs and become powerful. Not so he can escape fighting. This leads to Whitepaw getting angry. Whitepaw then asks Harestripe if they need anything and Harestripe says no so Whitepaw goes to sleep and is forced to train with Icestar again.

Chapter four-

Whitepaw is turning into a mental wreck. He barely gets any sleep due to training and Icestar is training him even harsher. Whitepaw has wounds often and is almost always covered in cobwebs although nobody suspects anything. Whitepaw is turning angry and bitter, not speaking unless she has too and lying in her nest forcing himself to stay awake. She is also questioning a lot about herself. Whether she really is a she-cat or not. During one of her training sessions Whitepaw is screamed at and called useless. She then wakes up covered in blood, sobbing and she unsheathes her claws and sinks them into her flesh out of rage and sadness. Just as she did that Harestripe walks in and is shocked. Harestripe comforts Whitepaw, curls up next to her and wraps her in cobwebs. They ask what's wrong and Whitepaw wants to tell her mentor everything about Icestar but instead she blurts out that she’s having problems discovering herself, that she feels useless, like a burden and thinks everybody hates her and that she doesn’t want to be a she-cat. But Harestripe isn’t mad and he in fact asks Whitepaw if she is transgender. Whitepaw is confused so Harestripe explains what that is. Whitepaw realizes that this is her so he starts using it/he/they pronouns and realizes that he is gay. Harestripe sleeps next to Whitepaw that night, curling up next to him as if Whitepaw is a kit.

Chapter five-

Whitepaw feels some-what better about himself and is getting stronger. But he’s still depressed but also he is getting closer with Harestripe. Whitepaw has a few scars from battle training and Harestripe thinks that their self-harm scars but Whitepaw knows they aren’t but he doesn’t want to tell Harestripe about Icestar, thinking that Harestripe would think that he’s insane and that Whitepaw would lose his only support system. Icestar kind of feels bad that he’s training Whitepaw harshly and he promises to calm down a little.

Chapter six-

Whitepaw is still training with Icestar. But he isn’t getting trained that badly and is able to tolerate Icestar. Although he still doesn’t exactly like him. Whitepaw sees a fox on the high rock and is shocked. But he realizes that this is only an omen. He then is ordered to get catmint and Whitepaw leaves the camp to do so. Once he’s out of camp and heads towards the two-leg place he is greeted by a she-cat named Fox. Fox and Whitepaw talk and the two hit it off. Whitepaw forgets to take catmint back to camp but they bring Fox back and Fox talks to Bumblestar and Fox becomes a warrior apprentice, getting the name Foxpaw and getting apprenticed to Clawstep.

Chapter seven-

Whitepaw goes out of camp to get catmint again and this time he actually gets it and meets Foxpaw on the way back to camp. Foxpaw is a decent warrior and everybody likes her. Whitepaw likes her as well. But they don’t think much of it in the end. He drops the catmint off and has a chat with Harestripe and shares prey with them before going into the forest and taking a nap. Greypaw and Vinepaw are made warriors with the names Greydust and Vineflower. Whitetiger never really liked Vineflower. He then wakes up in the dark-forest with Icestar, who laughs at Whitepaw and tells him that he has a crush on Foxpaw. But Whitepaw is confused and says he doesnt. The two train and then Icestar tells Whitepaw that his time to strike is soon. Whitepaw is worried about this but he wakes up and goes into the medicine cat den, trying to fall asleep although he couldn’t fall asleep due to his stress.

Chapter eight-

A few moons had passed and Foxpaw had been settling into the clan well. Whitepaw spend a lot of time with her and the two were close. Whitepaw realizes that he has a crush on Foxpaw, despite Foxpaw being a she-cat and he talks with Harestripe. Harestripe warns Whitepaw that medicine cats aren’t allowed to have mates but the two talk and Whitepaw realizes he’s abrosexual. Whitepaw has been spending a lot of time fighting and getting stronger for Icestar’s plans. Despite not fully knowing what Icestar’s plans exactly are. He then talks with Foxpaw and the two spend time together. Whitepaw decides to sleep next to Foxpaw in the apprentices den but Whitepaw dreams of Icestar and the two fight and Whitepaw wakes up in his nest, some blood matted in his pelt and him being terrified. This wakes Foxpaw up and Foxpaw is shocked and asks Whitepaw what’s wrong with him. Although Whitepaw is scared he decides to take Foxpaw out of the camp and tell her about how icestar is in his mind. Icestar doesn’t want Foxpaw to know but Whitepaw doesn’t care. Whitepaw tells Foxpaw everything and Foxpaw believes him. The two then return back to camp and cuddle and Whitepaw goes to sleep.

Chapter nine-

Whitepaw and Foxpaw decide to become mates although nobody knows of their relationship but Icestar. Icestar doesn’t really care. He just tells Whitepaw this shouldn’t make him get weak and not do his training. Whitepaw asks Icestar what he wants him to do. Icestar tells him that he will know once Whitepaw is made an proper medicine cat. Whitepaw shrugs it off and soon Harestripe tells him that today is the day he will become a proper medicine cat. Whitepaw nods and wonders what his warrior name will be. He then goes to the moonpool and gets the name Whitetiger. Whitetiger then heads back to the camp and dreams of Icestar. Icestar tells Whitetiger that its time for him to kill Harestripe.

Chapter ten-

Whitetiger is shocked and of course tells icestar no. he doesn’t want to kill Harestripe since Harestripe was like a parent to him. But Icestar tells him that he has to kill Harestripe because with Harestripe dead Whitetiger will be the only medicine cat and that he could give fake prophecies to Bumblestar and take control of him. But Whitetiger doesn’t want to. Icestar starts to get angry and threatens to kill Whitetiger. But Whitetiger doesn’t care and tells Icestar that he can try to kill him if he wants. Icestar then threatens to kill Foxpaw which makes Whitetiger finally feel bad. He then starts sobbing and Icestar feels pity. He tries to comfort Whitetiger, by placing his tail around Whitetiger but Whitetiger jumps away. Icestar tells Whitetiger that you have to do what you must to become powerful. Whitetiger is shocked and asked Icestar if he ever regretted anything he done. After a few moments of silence Icestar does say he regrets a few things. Like for example, not always being there for his mate, Scorchshine. He then explains how Scorchshine is now in starclan while Icestar stays in the dark-forest because he wants to harm shadowclan. Whitetiger asks Icestar if he will ever want to change. Icestar snaps and tells Whitetiger that he will kill Harestripe or else and that his backstory doesn’t matter. Whitetiger is shocked but after a while he agrees to kill Harestripe. Icestar tells Whitetiger to kill him near thunderclan’s old territory because a fox recently roamed there. Whitetiger agrees.

Chapter eleven-

Whitetiger doesn’t want to kill Harestripe and he feels bad. But he does as Icestar asks and brings Harestripe onto the old thunderclan territory before killing them. Whitetiger is shocked and full of greif. And he regrets his actions, collapsing onto Harestripe’s body and sobbing. But he forces himself to get up, clean the blood off his paws and then he takes a fox’s fur he sees by a fox and places it on Harestripe’s body. Whitetiger then claws himself up a little because Harestripe didn’t hurt him and partly because he felt he deserved it. He then rushes back to camp and reveals that Harestripe got killed by a fox. Bumblestar is shocked and Bumblestar sends out Clawstep, Wasptalon, Foxpaw and Tansyspeck to take Harestripe’s body back and remark the territory with their scent and Whitetiger goes along. He notices that Wasptalon and Clawstep are closer and wonders if there mates and if Wasptalon is over his past mate, Snowhare’s death. He then sees Tansyspeck filled with grief and Tansyspeck tells Whitetiger that Harestripe was a close friend of hers. That makes Whitetiger feel worse and they mark the territory before taking harestripe back to camp. They set vigil and Foxpaw comforts Whitetiger and makes him feel better but Whitetiger still feels bad.

Chapter twelve-

Whitetiger is depressed and even Icestar has been leavig him alone. Despite being the only medicine cat he mostly has been lying in his nest. Vineflower has been sent to the nursey because she’s expecting Greydust’s kits. Whitetiger thinks that she’s only a young warrior but shakes it off. Today is Foxpaw’s warrior ceremony so he tries to stay cheerful. He watches as she gets named Foxtail. He cheers for her and the two talk. Foxtail asks Whitetiger to talk alone in the forest and they do. Foxtail reveals that she isn’t a she-cat and that they are actually a tom and are transgender and use he/him pronouns. Whitetiger is of course supportive and the two cuddle for a bit. Foxtail then asks Whitetiger if something is wrong with him and Whitetiger tells him that everything is fine but Foxtail doesn’t belive it so Whitetiger blurts out he killed Harestripe and explains everything. Foxtail tells Whitetiger that he isn’t a bad cat and the two bond before returning back to camp.

Chapter thirteen-

It is now leafbre and it’s bad currently and greencough is out. Vineflower has greencough gives birth a moon early and Whitetiger panics as he tries to help her. She ends up giving birth to five kits named Dawnkit, Dewkit, Dustkit, Dovekit and Lostkit. But Lostkit ends up dying and that leads to Vineflower getting depresed and she snaps at Whitetiger, blaming them for the death of her kit. Foxtail points out that Whitetiger did his best and that it wasn’t his fault that Lostkit died. But Greydust comforts his mate. Whitetiger goes to sleep, feeling that this was his fault although Foxtail tries to comfort Whitetiger but it doesn’t work. During his dreams Icestar tries to convince Whitetiger to kill Tansyspeck but he refuses, still guilty over Harestripe’s death. -

chapter three is still a wip. so here's what I want to add. I'm thinking I want the first book (this one) to have 15 chapters and end on a cliffhanger or something:

now I want Tansyspeck to have to retire for some reason so Foxtail can become deputy but I want her alive for a scene later on then I need Bumblestar to die so Foxstar can become leader. then I want some sort of threat that isn't Icestar and Whitetiger. then I want Whitetiger to slip into a coma and confront Icestar while Foxtail, now Foxstar panics and is comforted by Tansyspeck. then I want during the coma for Whitetiger and Icestar to have a long talk and then Icestar admits he feels bad for what he has done and regrets what he's doing. then I want him to see his mate, Scorchshine in starclan (he reemeded himself. in my story dark-forest cats can go to starclan if they proved they paid for their actions) and then wants to get into starclan. but other cats such as Haresnow, Rocky, Harestripe and Rosestar (the leader that made Icestar deputy) Rosestar tries to kill Icestar and almost does but Haresnow is pissed and screams at her alongside Harestripe, saying that if they kill Icestar or let him die they are stooping to his level. Harestripe, Whitetiger and Haresnow go to find herbs and they save Icestar's life. Icestar is confused on why Haresnow wants to save his life and she reveals that he is his sister. the two have a moment and Icestar is saved, allowed into starclan. Icestar then tells Whitetiger he is sorry and that Whitetiger needs to make Shadowclan, Riverclan, Windclan and thunderclan into four clans again as one cat cannot hold that much power. Whitetiger tries to put out that there isn't enough cats but he wakes up and goes to the gathering place (the clans still go to the gathering to honor starclan despite there only being one clan) Whitetiger then blurts out what starclan told him about the four clans. Foxstar is shocked but agrees to it. then Foxstar makes the four clans again but with changed rules. you can go onto another clans land, you can have mates with a cat from another clan and medicine cats can have mates and kits. then cats began to switch clans and lead them. then the story ends on a sweet note between Foxstar and Whitetiger

I need to decide the new clan leaders and which cat is going where. then I need to decide what threat I can add in so Bumblestar dies, I was thinking a fox but I'm not sure. -

i'm thinking this book has some sort of conflict that kills Bumblestar and hurts Tansyspeck so Foxtail can become leader. i'm thinking the other part of the plot I added above can be in the part two of a book.

but any feedback you can give be is great <3

Remember to pace these events so we can get to know the characters.

Maybe make Icestar appear like a good guy so it makes sense why Whitepaw doesn’t fight back for a while.

Make sure to build the parent-child relationship of Whitepaw and Harestripe to make the results hurt.

Make sure White and Fox have buildup and chemistry to make it work.

For this redemption of Icestar, make sure to give him some good qualities or maybe make him misguided in what he does. Morally gray can work.

Maybe a dog attack or a fire could kill Bumblestar or maybe getting hit by a car could hurt Tawnyspeck

These are what I got, hope these help and if not ask for more.

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