#flat out bad writing

[designernishiki]

ever think about the fact that nishiki largely spiraled the way he did because of being considered incompetent and unfavorable in comparison to kiryu by everyone important in his life, and thus was constantly neglected and forgotten about. and then think about how the bomb would never have had to go off if kiryu and/or yumi just paid literally any attention to him after the showdown. talked to him. helped him to his feet. kept an eye on him. anything. instead of more or less forgetting he was there and allowing him the opportunity to do what he did. do you ever think about that. i sure do

#there is. no conversation between kiryu and nishiki after they fight. at all. #which is. well #I don’t blame nishiki too much for going jokermode there because uh. yeah. ouch #all of this was supposed to be about him. the showdown was supposed to be about him and kiryu #and kiryu just ignored him and talked to yumi instead like he wasn’t even there- let alone the focal point for All Of This #anyway yeah having them not fucking talk to each other there and focusing on the pointless and Bad attempt at a love story was just #flat out bad writing #because it’s not in character at fucking All for kiryu both due to who he is as a person and- more importantly- the relationship they built #beteeen him and nishiki in y0. like. how fucking close they were. like yumi had literally nothing to do with anything here #they were literally basically codependent and hadn’t lived their lives apart ever for the most part up until the sentencing #and they just sorta. gloss over that. in favor of yumi. who we know nothing about and have no development with and no dynamic in place with #her and either of them or anything #it’s #anyway #I need to stop bsnchdjmfd #nishiki #yakuza kiwami #yakuza kiwami spoilers #akira nishikiyama #rgg #yakuza #rambling

[bonefall]

Does Heartstar/Tigerstar II have thalassophobia(fear of deep water/drowning) would certainly make sense given his family's entire Deal with the lake. Also does Rowanstar drowning in the Moonpool mean that there's just. A rotting corpse in the moonpool now? Don't the medcats drink from that water?! (Sorry if yiu see this twice! I think tumblr deleted my ask?

I've said it before and I'll say it again. The desire to CinemaSins Ding poetic imagery is the death of visual metaphor and the bane of creativity. Kill the impulse. The moonpool is as deep and clean as it needs to be in spite of being canonically a stillwater pool and logically full of algae and microbes. Magic cat god water, full of StarClan Magic (tm)

We do not need to see the cats fishing Rowanstar's body out, or an accurate estimate of pool depth, or its PH level. StarClan's emotions do wonderful things when miracles occur. A wizard with a big pool cleaning net did it.

#I get a ridiculous number of asks about this and the answer is always the same so I've started deleting them #Why don't they fly the eagles to Mordor? Same reason Barbie must travel to the Real World in her sports car #It is the journey #as for thalassophobia no she doesn't have that. Sometimes I get questions for like... situations where the answer is simply no gfgfdsgfd #And I'd feel bad answering with a flat “no” or writing out a bunch of paragraphs that soften the no #SO generally I simply don't answer them either #I think it'd be cool for Flametail's spirit or Jayfeather to fear drowning though #Especially since Flame was denied his Sharing of Stars for a long time because the Dark Forest got him first #So the poor baby was like #soaked with ice water for several months #In a cell where the demons kept him prisoner #LITERALLY the wet beast #bone babble

[ask-squidbeaks-agents]

So…. How’s this talk going?

//It's... it's going... yeah that's what we'll say- //Four's not letting them out yet, she wants them to actually talk not just blurt out a confession aka these two are gonna be in this room- a little longer lol-

Captain: Eight she isn't going to let us out until we talk... Eight: Fine- She wants a confession? I'll give her a confession- I'm... in love with you... have been for the past five years- THERE! I SAID IT! NOW LET US OUT FOUR!

#captains in a slight state of shock- even if he was aware of Eights feelings he didnt- expect a flat out confession #also this is totally not me being very bad at writing romance nope not me #ask the agents #ask #agent 3 #agent 8 #splatoon #splatoon 2 #splatoon 3 #art #agent 24

[puppyeared]

Atla live action 😐

#thats my honest reaction 😐 #to be fair ive only seen 20 minutes of the s1 finale bc my parents are watching it but. mmmmm kinda mid #like. the casting is definitely an improvement since the last time they tried a live action but it feels like the writing falls flat #or maybe im being harsh bc ive only heard negative criticism on it beforehand. but fr anytime u bring up the original its already #good and not just because its the original. so much fucking detail went into it to the point of someone noticing azula wielding mai's knive #to how well thought out irohs character is used as a way of uniting the cast especially as zukos foil #i heard that sokkas sexism was toned down and i have to agree that feels like a cheap move. like i get WHY they think it would be better #but its not about how that reflects on real world its about how it affects the story. sokka starts out as a misogynistic asshole because #it makes it that much more impactful when he changes. toning that down makes it flatter and makes his character development weak #and someone pointed out they didnt even make him wear the kyoshi warrior uniform and i know it feels like such a small detail but #come on man. they did that in the original because not only does it help him really walk in their shoes - wearing 'feminine' clothing and #makeup and having suki explain its significance but it also ties in with the shows theme of harmony and intersectionality #i was also disappointed when they had the fire sages explain how the water tribe draws power from the moon because in the original it was #IROH who explained it to aang and everyone else BECAUSE we as the audience is under the impression hes with the 'bad guys' #and it builds up to how he learned from the other nations which reconciles his past as a war general and his character overall #AND its an excellent starting point for the cast and audience to understand how the nations arent as closed off as you would think #plus you would think its only fire nation doing propaganda but they expanded on that with earth kingdom censorship and it WORKS #a lot of things in the live action also feel arbitrary like. they gave momo a near death experience for 5 minutes for no reason #im firmly on the stance of bringing back filler moments instead of putting major events right after each other so that u give your #audience a sense of time passing and to really absorb the story. but i think thats more like shock value than filler and yeah its a small #thing to gripe about but those things build up and its really annoying. the thing abt avatar filler moments is that however small #its at least meaningful. hell even the beach episode emphasizes how isolated zuko and his friends are as child soldiers #i also swore to never watch the first live action since it was that bad but i really liked the stylized tattoos they used for aang #anyway. those arejust my thoughts. im not gonna watch the rest because im a ride or die for the original aftr growing up and #rewatching it at least 20 times as a kid. but theres definitely room for improvement and i wish ppl wouldnt take it as 'better' just cuz #netflix is adapting it. i wouldve killed for them to just reanimate the entire avatar series and touch NOTHING ELSE no redub #no changes to the story. just reanimate the thing and leave the rest alone and youd make easy money just the same #ALSO its very jarring not hearing jack desena and dante basco voicing sokka and zuko cause their voices were the most recognizable to me #i get that its because its live action but im allowed to feel a little sad abt that. and uncle irohs accent was really soothing #yapping

[kuruk]

oh my god I know like it sounds weird to say this when it's just avatar but the original show has aang go back to the southern air temple to show katara and sokka his home only to find evidence of the genocide of his people and the loss of his loved ones and it's quiet until you see his grief and his rage but you just see the aftermath a hundred years later and the netflix adaptation makes it feel like they wanted it to be a cool action movie with an epic scene showing the fighting and running of the airbenders like that side by side with aang running away and it's like ??? okay it's "darker" congratulations I can see that's what the goal is based on the differences in firebending and early on screen deaths go and focus on every bit of violence for the audience's lazy sadistic pleasure instead of any of the characters personal narratives especially the women that can all be taken right out + the discovery of different places all over the world in the earth kingdom and outside of it. put everything in omashu so they don't get to meet people and see the diversity of the world and each town and SEE what life is like for them under war and have these experiences with all these people build up to something bigger at the end

#changing the order of when the audience discovers new information in favor of a more linear storytelling was a bad idea #it came off as so bizarre like adding in these types of scenes so that it's just cooler and more intense #when the original show had 20 min long episodes 20 episodes per book not much time was needed. but so much was missed in the live action? #because they had to add and drag out things like this that just feel wrong #and it's not very good every event in the live action felt very smushed together like no scene stood out no contrast just the same level #of flatness all around you dont even get a chance to really feel anything about what happens on screen #when everything happens so surface level and without much real emotion it just happens so something can happen after that and so it can end #it felt like watching a bad movie everything that gave the cartoon any meaning was taken away #adding in that weird airbenders genocide scene towards the beginning but leaving out katara's inspiration of haru and those earthbenders #was it not cool enough did it take too much away from sokka's romance plotlines #one of the most important book 1 katara episodes #it felt like the natla script was written by people who are writing from memory based on what they watched 10 years ago

[griffincastle]

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#Honestly I kinda miss when forums were a thing #This is in ref to *previously reblogged* because YEAH the other social media websites are flat out boring about CODZ #The way people interact with 'fandom' has lost all it's fun #That's only the fault of social media websites- not people #You cant modify your profile anywhere - follower numbers are public and create a fake chaste system... #and they have this weird fixation with limiting interaction of person to person??? The only interaction they want is person to Content #I mean there's nuance in this too though: like saftey concerns ofc #BUT you cant write essays on why you think Dempsey's favorite color is blue bc word counts limit you- #You can't make bad art or you'll get bullied off planet earth- #Everywhere else creates a 'who cares what you think' environment if you have fun bc you don't have followers #(Important for CODZ too bc if a YouTuber has an opinion everyone else will echo it without knowing what it even means #((Like 'Jugg is a crutch perk' omg shut uppppp. Tell me what that means. You get it to survive more hits?? DUH. IT'S A *PERK*. #...anyway. that's why I'll always see tumblr as > than any other website #Despite the flaws it's the closest thing to the forum/personal website days #And weirdly enough....twitter/tiktok/insta- the creatively limiting places- are the unhinged sites...

[essektheylyss]

One of my favorite hobbies is opening the Genius annotations of lyrics I'm checking purely to roast the absolutely ATROCIOUS "analysis" some people throw up with full confidence on that site, oh my god.

#this was about 'the garden' by the crane wives today but I do this with some regularity lmfao #somebody literally went 'the line about hammers and nails is clearly a reference to the crucifixion of jesus' #WHEN THE ENTIRE SONG IS ABOUT BEING BURIED IN THE GROUND. IT IS A REFERENCE TO COFFINS BABE. #you canNOT just jump from eden to the fucking crucifixion oh my god. I cannot deal #what are you a protestant youth pastor??? NO #what kind of bullshit conjecture #YOUR ANALYSIS IS BAD AND YOU SHOULD FEEL BAD!!! #god something else just came out and I was looking at lyrics like 'holy hell they really just let you say anything here.' #like I do think genius is great for finding references to things the artist actually said about what they were writing about #but if you're gonna do specific textual analysis you NEED to actually write out the argument #a lot of it is flat out wrong but some of it is like 'maybe you're right but this is so disconnected that you NEED to make the connection'

[carnivalcarriondiscarded]

reopening the ask box is like... just finishing vacuuming shed cat hair, and then immediately going and petting said cat vigorously & watching with delight as So Much Fur sheds right back onto the floor

#knocked it down from 96 asks to 53 lets gooooo #i was gonna keep it closed for much longer but like. that was past me's opinion when they were way more stressed than usual #current me misses Conversing with the Masses! or something like that! #is it a smart decision? probably not! #between packing & comms i dont have much time #but keeping it closed felt so wrong... i dont like keep out signs.... #absolutely unprompted #i forgot how time-consuming and difficult packing is #im too out of practice.... #ive got all my sketchbooks and notebooks and paper and comics boxed up #Except my wof collection. im waiting for book 15 to be shipped before i box em all up. gotta keep things Together #but yes anyway sorry the box is Open for whatever your little heart desires #which is.... bad timing bc im gonna be chronically Offline tomorrow and probably a decent chunk of the next day #now if yall will excuse me im going to Attempt To Write Fanfic. #we'll see if i manage more than one sentence #i am doing. so much usps research for this shit its hilarious #like yes! i will read reddit threads! watch yt 'day in the life' videos! job listings! etc! #but hey now i know about casing and relays/loops and dps and flats and the difference between city and rural- #its fun to learn new things for writing! #i will be taking Liberties anyway! but at least they'll be a conscious decision yk yk #and if i ever post i can say 'hey i know this is inaccurate But its for the sake of the fic. im doing it on purpose! not outta ignorance!' #also i feel so so bad for cca's like... the work 'ethic' is so fucking inhumane are they ok-

[james-stark-the-writer]

sometimes the way you people talk about Riverdale really makes me feel like you guys are anti-art lmao

#the day society thought there was 'bad art' and that inherently meant it had no value and was better off not existing was the day we lost. #'oh we're so glad it's over' you don't even watch the show. #'how did they ruin such a good show?' i don't believe you have actually seen S01 bc it was actually garbage. easily the worst season. #like S01 legitimately is some of the most boring TV. #and if you like it that's fine but to say it was a good show in S01 is so wjfsjfnsbdhd #raise your standards please #anyway uh some of you just are assholes and very much anti-art with the way you talk about some stuff #art is like meant to communicate something and express a feeling and evoke an emotion. my god. #the way some of you conceptualize it as just mindless entertainment is so embarrassing and sad. #like truly i mean i'm sad for you. you're missing out on so many unparalleled art experiences if all you're looking for is 'good art' #won't get into it under here but that FriendlySpaceNinja Riverdale video is so dogshit specifically BECAUSE it embodies this exact idea #'good writing always wins' you don't get art. you flat out don't. #to conceptualize art as only being 'good' (having value) if it has 'good writing' is such a stupid and capitalist way of thinking about art #anyway that societal critique would eat away at my tag limit so i won't get into it. #james talks #riverdale #not exclusive to Riverdale by the way. also very much applies to something like twilight. #like we've already done such a cultural reevaluation of twilight but i still see so many takes on it that are like 'this shouldn't exist' #and it's very inherently anti-art. also fundamentally the idea of 'good art' is just such dogshit but like go watch the CJ the X video— #on subjectivity in art for a much more comprehensive take on that. they break it down a lot better than i can in tags. #disliking something and understanding it isn't for you isn't the same thing as saying it shouldn't exist btw. #'twilight was not my taste' and 'twilight ruined vampires' or 'twilight is toxic and should've never been written' aren't the same. #like disliking something as an artistic piece bc it doesn't do anything for you is fine! good even. that's like the whole point of art! #but the whole 'burn it down' and 'this is ruining culture and TV' takes are so insufferable and anti-art lol

[solargeist]

your uhh instagram stories about hazbin hotel are real based j think. his arms look weird. the colouring is weird . help !!!!!! ahhhhh help me !!!!!!!!!!!!

THE ART THEORY IS DRIVING ME INSANE I CANT STAY QUIET NO LONGER !!!!!

#ask #the colours are bad the composition is bad everyone sounds weirdly flat like . it got picked up and then got worse like HOW‼️⁉️ #i liked the pilot when it came out. with minor complaints…. I wonder how I’d feel if I rewatch it aksjsjs #since I was like what.. 19 or something.. #i personally do not enjoy helluvaboss humor or writing so. .. I think I will dislike the premiere phphph #I’ll probably check it out when it releases . if I can? no idea where it’s being posted . but I fear second hand embarrassment tbh #I’m way too opinionated I could feel myself festering . I’m just mostly shocked wahh #this ain’t me hoping on a hate train this is all genuine 😭💥 #disclaimer! i am not that great of an artist and I make these mistakes as well. however hazbin was picked up by a24 and no longer indie- #-basic colour theory mistakes shouldn’t happen at that point #the fact that all the colours need a drop shadow bc everything is bright red is not a good look. everything looks flat and jarring #colours? Characters**

[hauntedfalcon]

speaking as an able bodied person who thinks frequently about accessibility and wheelchair strategy on behalf of a wheelchair using acquaintance for whom I provide transportation, I do think that able bodied people should not opt to represent mobility aids in works of media unless they’re prepared to commit to portraying accommodations with some degree of verisimilitude. without that commitment they’re undoing whatever good they might do through representation

#just a lot of bad wheelchair hygiene lately in things I enjoy #picking up the wheelchair with the person inside = NO and I don’t care what your str stat is #the whole party is able to get down this hole. we don’t know how but it’s fine :/// #btw the answer to this is NOT to be like Emily St. John Mandel and say that #with the collapse of society the world becomes unlivable for disabled people #when institutional accommodations are gone interpersonal accommodations must pick up the slack #the sterile distance between the disabled characters of Station Eleven and everyone around them that was supposedly forming a ~community~ #was the most hopeless and depressing part of the book for me #absolute clown shoes to write a book about how important culture is after the fall of civilization #but let everyone with a Condition™️ flat out die from lack of community. do better than her #ableism mention cw

[bougiebutchbitch]

I'm sorry, but the argument that you shouldn't create fiction about historical figures 'because they're real people' is fucking ridiculous. Historical stories that reinterpret and explore a real person's actions through the medium of fiction are a HUGE part of literary canon across multiple traditions worldwide? Without it we wouldn't have a massive range of content, from the fucking Iliad to SIX the musical and Hamilton, to She Who Became The Sun, to Wolf Hall or Black Sails or OFMD or the Terror or any other story or show that was written about an earlier time, featuring actual historical characters.

How is fanfic any different? Why is inventively and creatively exploring the trajectory of a long-dead individual's life allowed, but exploring the 'what if' of how their lives might've been affected if they weren't cishet is Verboten? Some of the aforementioned works actually do that, too. Why are you okay with them, but not with fanfic? Could it be... possibly... because you see fanfic as an inherently lesser artform, and that is maybe something you ought to work on within yourself? :/

#like we can talk about the morality of rpf featuring current people living today. that's a different issue. #I personally think if the people involved have said they DON'T want fic written about them you... shouldn't #and tbh rpf squicks me out but I'm not gonna say it's Bad flat out when I don't really understand it or engage with it #but saying no one can say 'hmm what if this historical figure was gay? I wanna write that novel!' is like #next level censorship holy fuck

[fatmaclover]

going through loops and loops of "i got sick thinking about macdennis. i wanna write joymac" and then "thinking about joymac is making me so sad. i wanna go back to writing macden" and then it keeps repeating and i never actually write anything because i think about the characters too much and feel like a fuckin grouper with all my babys in my mouth. like oh my God dude. holy shit. can this show stop being so tragic

#it also doesnt help that all the joymac i wanna write is shit thatd never happen 😭😭😭 #ohhhh yeah kat youre gonna make such an in character piece where you have joyce and mac #sit down and tapk to each other about everything thats going on #like genuinely i think if joyce flat out told mac “you upset me a lot. i wish you were around more. i feel abandoned and lonely without you” #mac would HAVE to take a look at himself. and they would have to end up fixing their problems #because the hell are they gonna do stop talking to each other??? #i also think mac should have insane rsd. im not projecting. like can you imagine having the “feels bad about upsetting loved ones” disorder #and then being told that your friend of 4 decades actually has been fucking miserable because of you for like 3.5 of them #oh my god mac might actually just end it instead #im happy thinking about and writing angst for macden but joyce and dee are miserable to think about #in terms of angst #i cant do it i get too sad i need my girls to be happy

[edoro]

One of my personal litmus tests for if I give any credence whatsoever to someone's opinions on fiction in general or dark/controversial fiction in particular is how they talk about ASOIAF.

This series has serious issues that absolutely deserve to be discussed (and have been!) and is not for everyone, taste is subjective, etc etc, but certain ways people talk about it just betray that they either have never actually read it or have the reading comprehension of a flea.

"Why is there so much rape, GRRM must be a misogynist and/or have a rape fetish" GRRM clearly has an incest and lactation fetish and might also be into piss but i really cannot emphasize enough that the rape is not in there for sexual gratification purposes

the reason that the setting is like that is not because the author is a virulent misogynist. the reason that the setting is like that is because the author chose to write a misogynistic setting, where the possibility of rape is an ever-present backdrop to every woman and girl's life, and the likelihood of it happening increases or decreases depending on various levels of protection and value that she has, mostly relating to her station and the station and strength of the men to whom she belongs.

(and i have criticisms of his approach to sexual violence, most notably that he has an ENORMOUS blind spot when it comes to sexual violence against men and boys, and creates systems that would absolutely result in large amounts of male on male sexual abuse occurring (the Wall, for instance) while completely failing to acknowledge this, so it's not like i'm saying he's totally perfect about it or anything)

and this is not a "the setting is historically accurate" argument either - it's not, it's pop medieval at best, but that's okay. the author chose to make the setting this way because he wanted to explore certain ideas and attitudes and themes relating to sexual violence and how it affects those who perpetrate it and those who experience it.

and anyone is absolutely free to not like that or want to read it, but if you read the actual presentation and treatment of sexual violence in these books, the various situations where it comes up, the feelings and thoughts of the characters who both experience and perpetrate it, how those characters live and navigate through a system where it is an unavoidable reality

and what you take away is "he wrote it like this because he thinks this is sexy and good and approves of it"

then you might just not be very good at analysis, actually

#ngl the comment that prompted this was someone just saying they think the writing is bad on a technical level #which i guess is an opinion you can have #but it also means i want nothing to do with your opinions about writing in general #but also like i do think that the 'he glorifies and sexualizes rape' people are just flat out wrong #i can cite passages. i can analyze to back this up. You Are Wrong. #asoiaf blogging? in this the year of our lord 2k23? more likely than you think #rape #asoiaf

[lesbianaglaya]

revoking people’s right to talk about the tolstoy marriage until they write and turn in to me a ten page essay on complex relationships

#‘tolstoy STOLE from sophia’s diary’ almost certainly not true. #at least not in the usual vein - sophia was (and should be credited as!) at the very least his editor and collaborator #with w&p at times i want to say co author but i also dont think we should diminish the importance of editing #they worked as a team! and in the later years when thier relationship was increasingly frought they were BOTH reading each others diaries. #the problem is there is genuinely an avenue to talk about how tolstoy drew from real life in less than ethical ways #tanya bhers/natasha rostova for instance. THE KREUTZER SONATA! FOR INSTANCE! #but diminishing it down to oh he stole from her is. a disservice to both of them. #sophia confessed her love by writing a story that blatantly copied real life and lev’s personal insecurities confessed in confidence #and honestly that isnt even BAD like there is a reason they were happily married for 25 years! they’re work is similar they were a team! #we dint need to flatten it out to sophia-wife-victim lev-husband-abuser. #nor do we need to ignore the many ways sophia suffered! #it’s just theyve been reduced to a famous literary disaster marriage when they really… werent that. #gabby.txt #genuinely tanya as the inspiration for natasha is far more upsetting to me than giving his diary to sophia before the wedding. #idk. idk! its like on one hand im so fully on sophia's side and im so happy that her diaries and writing are being translated #and. not even on the other hand these ideas arent in opposition to each other. reducing her marriage to a flat picture of suffering is. bad #actually i think in many ways the problem is solved by looking at sophia as an author instead of a wife. #which like. she was very much both. but if we afford her the agency afforded to an author i think the conversation immediately gains nuance #and that also comes with the caveat of female authors being far less respected - look at nadezhda khvoshchinskaya - but still #anyway GOOOOD morning

[doctorweebmd]

writing is ridiculous because you're like "what if i write the most dogshit chapter of all time, being the same person and having the same writing skills as I did last week" and it LITERALLY paralyzes you from writing

#in all fairness.... i think we've all read either chapters or books that have some dogshit parts #but honestly i dont think i ever noticed something chapter to chapter. just sometimes the plot falls flat but not like its written poorly? #does that make sense? #sorry i'm overthinking things i just REALLY struggle with writing atsushi. i hope i do him justice. #i want to get this chapter out this weekend or early next week. its just getting the 'voice' right #which is often just a matter of time and spirits of 'good flow' #l;asdjfalksdjfklasdjf SERIOUSLY. I WANT TO WRITE THIS SO BAD. WHY IS IT SCARING ME. #WHO IS SCARED OF THEIR HOBBIES #TEARS TERROR RIPPING MY HEART OUT #okay. i'm okay