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Y'all know I'm officially a SIMP for my boy Omen and I've read, what? Five sentences about him?
So real talk, what does his partner do for him that makes him soft?
I'M SO EXCITED TO TELL YOU BABY 🤍
To everyone else that would like to send an ask about Phantom Squad as a whole or any of them individually, send one HERE
What Do You Do That Makes Him Soft? - Commander Omen
Making Omen soft isn’t quite as hard as you’d believed it would be.
At first glance, he’s fucking terrifying. Strapped to the neck with blasters, blades, and bombs. Toweringly tall. And most likely dead silent. Many women have tried to be… foreword with him. But none have ever really hit the mark on really getting to the epicenter of his mind and what exactly gets past his hesitancy and stoicism. That is until you take a confident approach and win him over with just how unaffected you are by the outward image he presents to everyone.
Not that you weren’t cautious of the -very real- threat he could present or his clear position as something analogous to an armored assassin. However, you didn’t publicly fawn over him or even try flirting in a conventional way. You just acted normally. And let him decide if you were something of his type or not. It just so happened that Omen couldn’t begin to ignore a woman with real confidence and the appearance that she didn’t give a single fuck that he was in the same room. He was intoxicated the longer he was around you.
The first time you got a clue as to just how deep Omen’s desire for a dominant woman came very organically. Although a bit unexpected. He’d appeared on your doorstep unannounced, in the middle of the night and visibly exhausted. Despite knowing you’d never given him your address, or anything remotely identifying other than your first name alone. You couldn’t help but feel concerned. Being half asleep- but still worried about him, you murmured;
“Oh you poor baby, come here.”
It was the beginning of not only your lessons in Omen as a subject all in itself; but a personal journey for him in which he began to accept that no matter how deadly he could be on a mission, when you praised him or sweet talked him, he was utterly destroyed.
The Commander knows his position is one of leadership and constant dominance in the field. His brothers need that and from the very beginning everyone understood and followed through with the belief that Omen was best suited for the task. However, in all of those missions-went-wrong, close calls, fire-fights, and asset protection, The Commander never received a “good job”. From anyone. No one expected anything less than perfection from him, so there wasn’t a reason to give him a commendation for performing as “expected”.
Until you. It wasn’t until you came along with a smooth smile, that desire to care for him and so. many. fucking. praises. that he could barely function without wanting to just drop to his knees in front of you and beg for more. Over big and small things, it didn’t seem to matter to you. You just had the overwhelming urge to give him credit for being himself and doing his duty to the best of his ability. Even if he didn’t believe he had done a credible job himself. Omen was at a real loss for words and not just choosing silence. His mind on the other hand was spinning so fast he could barely think straight. It took a very long time before Omen was ready to accept that he couldn’t live without you. You were just the best thing he’d ever had. No one else could have something so good. He couldn’t allow anything otherwise.
“You’re such a good boy,”
“You did so good out there Commander,”
“I’m proud of you Omen,”
“Come here. Let me give you a reward,”
It’s enough to turn the stony-eyed Commander into a pile of whiney mush. Grappling at your waist and wanting to pull you closer. Just to get anything you’ll give him. Bury his face in your neck. Kiss you. Touch you. Hear more of your praise and feel your gentle touch. Omen is a man of battle prowess. But he adores getting all of your undivided attention and praise with the knowledge that you’re not just doing it for your own benefit. You’re doing it for him. Because you honestly are proud and care for him.
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Doomdoomdoom
A small Jesse and Kix drabble
TW: None
W.C: 376
Summary: When you hear something others do not, you best go to your medic vod.
A/N: This is one of those small drabbles that can pop up into your mind when you think about certain memes, what ifs, tropes etc. I hope you all like what I did with it and as always, comment and reblogs are always welcomed 😘
"Vod, sometimes I hear this sound and I have no idea why. No One else hears it. I think something's wrong with me."
Kix looks at his brother sitting on the medbed and reaches for the handheld scanner. "What kind of sound is it and when is it that you hear it?" Starting at the top, Kix scans the entirety of the body coming up with absolutely nothing. As it is with all the clones, they are pretty much in peak condition until battle happens, that is when he will find issues with his brothers who have been injured one way or another.
Jesse sighs and takes a minute before he answers. "It's this deep and ominous sound. Like, doomdoomdoom. Can't say why I hear it, when I hear it…."
Kix frowns as he prepares to take a blood sample. Mulling over in his head the reasons why his brother could be hearing something none of the others have reported hearing. Force sensitivity perhaps? It has been around for centuries among all the species that are sentient and why would a clone not be included in this? They are as sentient as any other race and though created by the Kaminoans, it is not as uncommon to have a deviation in the genetic makeup of one or more of the clones. Clone Force 99 being a prime example of the experiments done. It would be worth reading into.
Jesse undergoes the testing and scanning while mulling over the last time he heard the sound that none of his brothers seem to hear. Wondering if this is reason enough for him to fear decommissioning. “Kix… Do you think this could be a reason to…?” For a moment he pauses when suddenly his eyes widen. "There! There it is again! Do you hear it? Tell me you hear it too vod!"
Before Kix can try to answer the questions his brother is asking, they hear a snort and a cough. Quickly looking to where the sounds came from, they see their captain standing behind a man they did not expect to see on board the ship. Pong Krell seemed annoyed that he had to announce his presence instead of being noticed as soon as he entered the room.
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Hi scribs 💕
I don’t interact like this a bunch, but I wanted to let you know that you’ve got support. A bunch ofit from so many people. I’m not a giant part of the SW’s or Mandalorian community, but I appreciate you advocating for those -like me- who don’t feel like they have a big/substantial enough platform or following to address problems that hurt our creative motivation.
Much love 💕
Thank you so much, my dear. I promise, I hear you. Today’s been a little wonky with everything going on, so the support means more than you know. I appreciate you so much, and I’m sending much love back to you as well 💖
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Kinktober Day 11
Yes I am aware I’m behind, and yes I’ll be posting late on a lot of these whoops
Prompt list by @the-purity-pen
Kinktober 2021
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Mirror Sex with Commander Fox x fem!reader
Warnings: NSFT (Pegging, praise kink, fem!dom, use of color system, mirror sex), lots of self-esteem issues in this one boys
"I want you to see what I see."
That was what convinced him to do this. At least, you think so. Fox never said it out loud, but you knew he struggled with the fact he and his brothers looked alike, were considered interchangable parts in a whole that was supposedly much larger than them. That idea became so ingrained in his consciousness, his very psyche, that you could see it in the way he carried himself.
You know you couldn’t fix it. It’s not something you have the capability to fix, and with his work environment, every step forward would only result in more punishment and pain for him. You also couldn’t let him go on like this.
The best you can do is trying to get him to see what you do.
His breath fogs the mirror in front of him. His hands try to find purchase on the corners of the vanity. You lean over him. Carefully, telegraphing your movements, you reach around and tip his chin up to look at himself. Even know, he can’t bear to look at himself, see his own reflection.
“Look at you.” You murmur. “Maker, you’re doing so good for me.” You punctuate your words with a slow but deep thrust. He lets out a choked noise, the moan almost seeming as if it caught in his throat. His eyes are glazed over with pleasure. Fox tries to turn his head to look away from the mirror, but you hold his chin steady.
“Fox.” You stare his name to get his attention. “Color?”
It takes him a minute to answer. You watch his face. He seems to struggle with the question, as if he’s unsure what exactly you’re asking. Carefully, you take a hold of his hip and begin readying yourself to pull out when he speaks.
“Yellow.” He blurts out.
“What is it? Is it too much? Am I hurting you?” You rub your thumb in circles on his hip. “We can stop.”
“No.” The word is emphatic. He clearly wants this, wants more, but he can’t seem to find the words for what’s bothering him. “It’s... too much.”
“Alright.” You press a kiss between his shoulder blades. The movement must cause the strap to move inside of him because he lets out a keen. He falls forward a little, going onto his forearms and forehead pressed against the mirror. It takes a moment for you to see the tears prickling at the corners of his eyes.
“Hey, hey, hey. We don’t have to do this. We can just watch a holo or-”
“Don’t want to look at myself.” He manages to rasp.
Oh.
Well. That’s not exactly what you were expecting.
“Do you want to step away from the mirror?” He shakes his head. “Do you... Would it work if you looked at me? Or do you want to do something else?”
He lifts his head slowly. When his eyes meet yours through the mirror, it’s easier to see how wrecked he looks. His lips are swollen, bitten and kiss-bruised. his eyes are wide, almost needy. It makes you clench around nothing. Your concern overweighs the feeling, though.
He must sees whatever it is you see in him. His expression tells you as much. It becomes almost bewitched, as if he couldn’t look away from you if he tried.
“What do you need?” You prompt softly. “Are you okay with this? I need to hear you say it if you are.”
“Yes. I- This works.”
You press another kiss in between his shoulders, this time intentionally sliding further into him. You keep your eyes glued to his as you do so. He gasps. It’s hard to tell if it’s because of the look on your face or the feeling of your strap sliding deeper into him.
“Gedet’ye.” He nearly whimpers, eyes fluttering for a moment.
“Of course. Anything you want, my good boy.”
[Gedet’ye: please]
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38, 39, 40?
Wow I didn't even look through the list completely before reblogging, let's see...
38. Fic recommendations?
Well... I typically read on AO3, so jot that down. Some of these might also be on Tumblr but I'm not sure. Names on here are for AO3, unless I know it's the same on Tumblr.
I'd say Dominoes by @meridiansdominoes (though I haven't finished it yet shhh).
Another good one if you love Wolffe is Welcome Company by @uponrightful. (Just a note to minors, there are a couple nsfw scenes in there in chapter 8 and 14. The first few chapters are fluffy though.)
Gar Cabur by InkSplots is *chef's kiss* (Alpha-17 story).
The Chips Didn't Work by Peppermint-Shamrock is an alternate O66 story that will give you more than a few laughs.
And a last one... Just look up @dindjarindiaries on either Tumblr or AO3. She's got stellar work that I'm *trying* to get through myself. (keep in mind how the ratings range from General Audiences to Mature. What you read is your responsibility).
39. If you wrote a 'fix-it fic', what would you write about?
Well... Ahem... I've already done that. It's the Morut'yc Series on AO3, and it's where a character has memories of what happens. It isn't a complete fix-it fic, but it does make life better for a majority of the clones.
I also wrote Mar'eyir Aliit [Found Family] where the clones show up after getting rights to adopt their younger brothers from Kamino.
So I guess to actually answer the question, I wouldn't make a complete 'everything is fixed and Palpatine kicks the bucket for no explained reason' story, but I do like writing stories where somethings are better (like, for example, Umbara. All the named clones make it off Umbara).
40. If you could make your own Star Wars trilogy/series, what would it be about?
Ooh... my own trilogy.
*inhale* I'm not going to say the series I mentioned above. I'm not doing that...
So, I think... I want either a series about...
I can't pick. Here's three.
1. series about clones where we see stuff from their perspective. Some battles can be included, but mostly looking into their personal lives, down time, and leave. Dealing with war, but also shenanigans.
2. Series about civilians. I know, sounds boring. But I would want to dive into what it's like to live in Star Wars and the stuff that happens, maybe a different episode on different planet. It wouldn't be big save the universe stuff, but it could flesh out the galaxy (and give inspiration fodder to us writers).
3. Series about life in the Temple. Maybe following the younglings we met during the cyber crystal arc in Clone Wars. Or even from before the Clone Wars with known Jedi (and unknown Jedi) to see what they were like before they were knighted.
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Oooo, an ask game! I cant decide between the following for the ask game: 2, 7, 15, 17, or 18. So... choose which you want to answer!
Ee! All of these are great asks! 🤍
2. 🔁 A fic you’ve re-read several times
If I am ever in a Wolffe mood (which is 90% of the time tbh), Welcome Company by @uponrightful is an automatic reread. I really like the concept of the clones having a little home, but I also love that OC grows into their own person and their character isn't entirely dependent on their relationship with Wolffe.
18. 😭 A fic that ripped your heart out (but it hurt so good)
Peter Losing Wendy by @tenderclio will tug on your heart strings. Not only do we get a tender father/son moment with Jango and Boba, but we have an emotional Jango. It's a really sweet fic!
Send me a number or emoji for a fic rec!
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I just binged Coriolis Effect and HOLY SHITFIRE the BOND these two have! I am so in love! They are so devoted to one another despite their demons and then we have this larger plot trying to find out what is going on with the weapons? *chef's kiss* I cannot wait to see what happens next chapter! Cross hopefully gets out of the bacta tank and Dutchess gets a bit of care from her sniper? 🥺
I'm sorry I haven't gotten back to you until now 💔
But THANK YOU so very much!!
I'm so happy you're enjoying it love, and I have hopes to get another chapter done sometime soon 😅 I've been doing everything I can to make time for you guys and a post but it's just not coming along like I hoped it would! 🙃
Just be patient with me for a little longer! Thank you again for sticking around (and sending such a sweet message🤍)
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Oh I’ve been dying to ask this one! For fanfic asks: A) how did you come up with the title for Coriolis Effect?
The chapter where Dutch uses it to beat Crosshair at his own game isn’t until lots of chapters in so did you know that far ahead what was going to happen?
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A- How did you come up with the title for Coriolis Effect?
I FUCKING LOVE THIS ONE!!!!! Okay, okay, okay… Let me calm down and answer this properly. Hahaha
Let me start out by giving you a little background on me. I spent my entire childhood around guns -specifically rifles- and learning how to shoot long-distance. We were a family of hunters, and we liked getting practicing to make sure we did it correctly and didn’t waste a kill by making a bad shot. That means I was very inundated with terminology early on, but a lot of it didn’t apply when you consider there is a blaster bolt being fired instead of a slug projectile using a gunpowder ignition instead.
When I was trying to work out the logistics of how Duchess and Crosshair would meet, I knew that I didn’t want to do the standard nurse or bounty hunter working on Kamino. I’d never seen anyone use an Armory/Weapons Director, and the whole premise fit really well with what I had planned. The only thing was I needed to learn a fuckton more about Star Wars weapons, how they worked, and basically re-learned everything I already know about IRL guns. I spent almost a month beforehand looking at nothing but guns. I drew from the videogames, the comics, Wookiepedia, literally anything I could -Legends or Canon- to make sure Duchess and I would both have a legitimate working knowledge of weapons. At that point, I started drafting the first chapter, with at least five Word-Docs full of specs on everything from Blast-Tech’s range of items to Mur-Son, and so forth.
I knew what the actual Coriolis Effect was long before I decided to make that the title. In reality a definition is: an effect whereby a mass moving in a rotating system experiences a force (the Coriolis force) acting perpendicular to the direction of motion and to the axis of rotation. On the earth, the effect tends to deflect moving objects to the right in the northern hemisphere and to the left in the southern and is important in the formation of cyclonic weather systems.
But it can almost be described this way (by a LD Marksman): This one is a bit tricky to describe. There is an amount of time that a bullet is in flight and while the bullet is in flight, the earth, and everything attached to it (like the target being shot at) continues to spin. So while the bullet is in flight, the target may actually move due to the spinning of the earth, even when the target is stationary. Of course, this only happens if the bullet flight is heading north or south, and the effect is smaller the closer to the north or south pole you are located. So if you are firing at a target directly north of you, the bullet impact will be slightly left, if you are shooting south, the impact will be slightly to the right. In reality, the effect is only noticeable at long ranges, and again, only if you are shooting north or south. If you are shooting at an angle, such as NorthWest, the effect is diminished.
Nevertheless, it’s a cause and effect of knowing where you are and what is going on around you, and most importantly how that affects you. In Chapter 7, Miscommunication, Crosshair actually connects Duchess’ presence to the Coriolis Effect and how he can’t ever seem to adjust for her in his daily life.
Maybe it’s the English Major in me looking for themes and meanings that don’t actually exist, but the idea of a human creating a “Coriolis Effect” for another human in an emotional sense held a lot of meaning and explanation for how Crosshair feels. Especially for someone like Crosshair who seems to know exactly what his place is, how to work efficiently and observe/calculate things just as effectively as Tech can. But Duchess throws him off. He can’t expect anything when it comes to her, and it’s not that he’s unintelligent, she’s just the perfect storm of attitude and insecurity all bundled up into this woman that he loves dearly.
Is this the answer you were looking for? If not, please let me know!
Much Love, Rightful
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Ooohh what about K and W 👀?
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K- What's the angstiest idea you've ever come up with?
So you won’t like the answer to this, but rest assured I don’t have any intention on following through with it.
When I first started writing Coriolis Effect I had the idea that I would have Crosshair go through Order 66, and at the end his love interest -Now Duchess- would be killed. I don’t know what possessed me to have such an idea. But it’s a real doozy isn’t it?? This idea came to me long before all of Crosshair’s canonical torture took place, and as I started coming up with more plotlines to think about, his love interest being taken from him just got more and more unacceptable as the show kept airing. Crosshair has been through enough, and although canon is canon… It’s still shitty and I would rather fix it instead of jumping on the ‘demonize Crosshair’ wagon that everyone seems so happy to ride on.
Nevertheless, I’ll tell you for 100% certain this won’t happen in my current fic, or anything else I write. That might be boring of me, but I don’t like books/movies/fics that have unhappy endings and I can’t stand the thought of crafting a character so deeply just to kill them off for emotional value. In the end, I’ll always have a happy ending.
W- Do you like more general prompts, or more specific ones?
So I’ve said this before, but I don’t really get requests for prompts or anything like that. I don’t know if I’m just not putting myself out there enough, or having made it easy for you all to interact and ask for them… (If that’s the case please let me know.)
If I did get into requests/prompts, I would probably prefer having them be somewhere in-between specific and general. I know, such a bullshit response. My main goal with prompts would be to provide a scenario that would make you/an undetermined MC happy, and having some key details on what you would like to happen sound pretty essential in my opinion. On the flip-side though, I would enjoy having some creative leeway in terms of having some choice in the matter. Otherwise it might get a little tiring having someone give me an entire plotline for me to just fill in the details for.
I hope I answered this one correctly. *cue my nervous laughter*
But seriously, I would love to do requests/prompts if I thought you all were interested. I don’t know how I would set them up for ease of access and completion, but I would figure it out for you all. <3
Thank you for the questions doll, I hope you’re having a great day!
Much love, Rightful🤍
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Thought just sprung to mind re-reading Chapter 13 of Coriolis Effect-we know what Crosshair was thinking watching Duchess work in the Underground Cantina but what are the rest of the bad batch thinking? Especially Echo (who has very sweetly taken her under his wing).
Side note: I may be slightly in love with this chapter-especially this scene! Thanks so much for your writing and for answering all my random questions about it-sending you all the Star Wars joy! -RebelMedic99 🌟
Commentary Track for "Coriolis Effect"
I hope you don't mind me making this into a commentary post! It would just fit in really well! We'll do this a little differently than normal!
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Echo: There are a few things in this scene that really catch Echo's attention. He sees how confident Duchess is, and that really lowers the "protective" instinct he had when they first walked in. Seeing Dutch relax back into her seat and treat it like she wasn't really on the job, but is just using it for show is mesmerizing. After his time with the 501st, he's seen a lot of different tactics, and add in all the times he's spent with Fives... It's no wonder he knows what a woman faking a 'good time' looks like. There are a few moments he feels tense -like seeing the target get too close- but he can’t really pull a blaster out in his current position without making the others behind him nervous, or alerting someone else in the bar that something hush-hush is going on.
He knows right away she’s had training, but being curious makes him ask the question. Echo is the only one who really knows what it’s like to lose brothers, and that in itself is a huge part of why he wants to learn about Phantom Squad. (He doesn’t know their name, I just said it for clarification.) There are a lot of things about Dutch’s training that he sees in himself, but just as much that reminds him of Rex after he came back from ARC training. Movements are less predictable, but still smooth and well thought out even when there isn’t a lot of time to plan.
He wants to know not just because it will solve some tension about her training, but because he understands how difficult loyalty to a squad is. There are ins and outs that take so much practice to inundate into daily use, and not only that, but you battle the desire to “stick to what you know” even though someone else has proven that you can still win by doing it different. Emotional connections to squads are permanent, and although Echo sees that Duchess is very confident -and performs well- there’s a part of him that wonders just how bad the end was to leave her so unwilling to speak about them.
Hunter: The Sergeant did in fact give the NAV tracker order to Tech. It would’ve been more risky, but in the end safer for the whole squad. The second he heard Dutch say she would do it instead, Hunter was quick to call her off and make sure she didn’t get into more that she could handle alone. Not that they wouldn’t protect her, but it was an unnecessary move that Hunter wasn’t comfortable with. Had it not been for her laid-back posture, that order would’ve went through.
Dutch looked way too calm. Right away Hunter could see that there was something going on, and he just wasn’t privy to it. Funny enough, that kind of thing doesn’t happen often. But when Duchess is concerned the Sergeant finds himself surprised almost every time. He can see her game from a mile away, and although he isn’t a fan of allowing her to use herself in such a way, there isn’t anything he can do when she’s halfway across the room and right in the thick of her ploy. He’s watching intently with a hand on his blaster in case something goes wrong, but every inch of his conscious is extremely confident that she’s going to be able to pull this off easily.
Once it’s all over, Hunter breathes a sigh of relief. Even going far enough to hide his own momentary nervousness by taking a jab at Crosshair who looks positively sulking about the whole ordeal. He can sense the jealousy and worry on his vod’ika from a klick away, but at this point, Hunter is just happy to have gotten the job done without any issues.
Tech: First off, Tech is pretty well preoccupied with the facial analysis to get too caught up in Dutch’s movements… That is, until he sees Crosshair stiffen up out of the corner of his eye. For Tech, his judge of concern for Duchess comes almost strictly from Crosshair and his reactions. Dutch is almost information-less in the grand scheme of things, and Tech’s best assessment is that if Crosshair thinks she can handle something, then he has no issue doing what is required of him until the situation changes. The second Cross straightens up, Tech reaches for his blaster with one hand -safely shrouded by the table- and makes a quick glance in her direction. The target has ahold of her, and it’s far too close for her to be able to get away easily, and although he doesn’t see her willingly let the target do that, he’s still on edge for Hunter’s order to get them out of there. Tech was extremely surprised that Crosshair didn’t step in at that moment. Normally he is a good judge of how Cross feels based on body language, and he’s never seen Crosshair look so close to ending every life within a one-klick radius.
Wrecker: What else can be said…? Wrecker is literally the most proud big brother there has ever been. Dutch looked kriffing awesome, and she got the job done so easily that Wrecker couldn’t really tell at what point the tracker had been placed. There isn’t a louder supporter of Duchess anywhere in the galaxy, and she’s garnered Wrecker’s affection so effortlessly. He thinks she’s smart, really tough, and so so sweet. Seeing Dutch work is like watching your little sister hit a target at the shooting range for the first time, and Wrecker is fucking here for allll of it.
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F: Share a snippet from one of your favourite dialogue scenes you've written and explain why you're proud of it.
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(sorry this is long, but I know you won't mind too much)
Excerpt From: "Welcome Company" Part 2
The girl poured a fresh cup of caf, smiling at the buzzed, blonde sitting sleepily across the bar from her. Rex had made a surprise visit, more than a week ahead of schedule with more than enough stories to keep her busy and listening for a full weekend. It was one of her favorite things, to sit and sip caf while hearing about the -less gruesome- details of her trooper’s missions.
“-It was hell back there, but at least Anakin didn’t need reinforcements like last time.” Rex shook his head in slight frustration.
A this point she knew about all of the Generals, and almost knew all the clones by name. Of course many had come to see her, but putting names to faces wasn’t always easy. She found that putting names to tattoos and personalities was easiest.
As long as they show their personality.
“I’m glad you survived the Generals antics. Otherwise I wouldn’t get my updates so willingly.” She couldn’t help but giggle at the thought of asking Cody to talk about things so willingly. Of course Fives would be willing, but the quality of information was a whole other battle to fight.
“I’ll always come back, as long as you’ve got hot caf on drip.” Rex chuckled, taking a hearty drink from his mug. “I heard through the barracks that you played host to a new guest?”
She smiled almost absentmindedly, looking towards the rocking chair that had sat absent since Commander Wolffe’s overnight stay two weeks ago. “Yes, I did.”
“Angry bastard, isn’t he?” He commented with a light jeer, readjusting himself on the barstool he sat on.
I need to get bigger ones… they’re all too small for the boys.
“I don’t know what to think of him just yet.” She mused, tracing her finger around the lips of her mug, letting the steam coat her fingertips in a dewy sheen. “We didn’t particularly meet.” The look on Rex’s face changed with the drop of a hat, causing her to almost stutter in the attempt to rephrase herself. Whatever he’d heard, apparently didn’t meet up with her divulged information.
“I- I mean we didn’t speak.” She tried her best not to let her anxiety show, but that dreadful stutter had reared its ugly head. “I us-used signs to help him through the house.”
“You wrote out signs?” Rex parroted her with an incredulous expression, seemingly trying to piece together an image of what her nights must’ve looked like hiding from Wolffe and creeping down hallways without him catching sight of her. “Let me see them.”
She nodded timidly, still trying to gain back her confidence after realizing that Rex wasn’t actually mad. In one of the least-squeaky cabinets under the sink, she retrieved one of the black signs, and the chalk that she used to write the signs. Sliding them across the island, her gaze focused on Rex’s softening expression. Her remaining anxiety was slowly dissipating.
“You’re a special kind of patient, you know that?” Rex ran his finger over the white chalk, looking up at her under thick, dark eyelashes.
“He just seemed like the type who would want a different kind of love.” She shrugged her shoulders, feeling her face heat with embarrassment. It was easy to watch from behind the corners of her house, and enjoy to unguarded expressions of her warriors. But hearing any praise directly to her face was almost pure torture.
“All I’ve heard is when the Commander stepped back on base he looked like a brand new man. Even Cody was talking about how Wolffe’s armor looked better than the day he got it re-painted.” Rex paused to take another slug of his caf. “I haven’t seen the Commander… but I’m sure you gave him a kriffing good polish didn’t you?” He chuckled again, taking another hard look at the sign sitting in front of him. “I imagine the poor sap was standing up straighter than a rod with all the attention he got from you.”
“His were particularly rough… but nothing a little elbow grease couldn’t fix.” She retrieved the signs and put it back it it’s place under the sink. “I did use a little epoxy to fill In some particularly deep scratches.”
Rex gave her a wide smile and motioned for her to come over with an arm stretched out. She obliged, and placed herself within arm’s reach so he could pull her into a tight hug. He settled his chin on top of her head, giving a few quick squeezes just to explain all the things she knew Rex couldn’t say. For all the things the Captain could say, the girl knew that many of her boys were unable to speak though many of the things they felt. Instead, they liked touch.
At first, she’d been quite unwilling to oblige them. Feeling much too insignificant to be anyone that deserved any real attention from such important men. But after almost two years, hugs and the occasional request for head scratches or a haircut had become almost essential to her services. Even Rex hadn’t been keen on physical attention towards anyone but his brothers, however that changed after a few terrible nights spent way too late at 79’s. A particularly bloody battle left him beaten and bruised in more ways than one. And instead of coming straight to her, he’d found the door to 79’s and the bottom of a bottle of fire whiskey first. Two days of close attention and a true moment of vulnerability later, Rex became more than a regular. He practically cornered his own room at her house, where she was almost always on call for late-night or early-morning planet-side landings.
“You want him to come back don’t you?” Rex’s voice sounded muffled in her hair.
“I don’t want anything. You know that Rex.” He hugged her tighter with both arms this time, letting out a rough sigh.
“You’re more than deserving of whatever your little heart desires. Maker knows that… and if they don’t, well. I’d be more than happy to let them know.” They both chuckled, and split apart to take another drink of caf.
Only now that question still hung in the air. It wasn’t that she didn’t want the Commander to come back. But honestly, she couldn’t seem to distinguish what exactly she wanted to give him. Or whether or not Rex was talking about the Commander when he’d been oh-so willing to remind them of her own importance. Either option was enough to make her stomach knot. The girl always wanted to give, but had -according to Rex- a bad habit of never taking anything in return. But doing what she did for the troopers, allowed her the opportunity to do just that. The men hardly had anything to give, except a heartfelt thanks upon leaving. And she didn’t have to do anything but help. No transaction if the troopers didn’t desire it, and even then it was always guided by the understanding that they didn’t owe her anything.
“I want to be good.” She smiled, sounding like a broken record to Rex.
“I don’t know how I can make it any more obvious.” He sighed. “I’ve told you hundreds of times that you’re the Guardian Angel of me, and my vod.”
The girl felt another rise of heat in her face.
“Wolffe will come back. I’m sure of it.” Rex continued, “If he knows what’s good for him, he’ll never want to leave this place.”
This right here is probably some of my favorite dialogue I've written. Honestly, I don't think I write it well but the feelings I got while writing this made the whole scene that much more special overall. I loved writing for Rex in the 'big brother' sense. Rex is such a sweetheart, and the entire conversation was so very easy to write. Organic conversation is challenging for me normally, and for whatever reason -I think it's these two characters really- that made everything jive really well. Like I said, It's really nothing groundbreaking. But I'm proud of little-ole-me for doing it anyways.☺️
Thank you for asking me doll, you never fail to make me smile. 🥰
Much Love, Rightful 🤍
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It is so hard for me to choose just one! Just one part of a fic you wrote when there is so much to love.... But I will sent you this quote from your latest chapter to Coriolis: "You are doing it on purpose… devious little thing. I should be all over you for pulling a stunt like this and getting away with it for so long. Too bad I’m the only one falling for your tricks pretty girl." So please share all kinds of information/thoughts etcetera you had while writing this chapter.
Commentary Track for "Coriolis Effect"
Hi doll 🤍 I can't wait for you to hear allll about jealous!Crosshair
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The theme for the start of this chapter is "show, don't tell".
From the start, I knew Duchess was going to show the Batch just how well trained she is. For starters, Duchess is very unwilling to talk about Phantom Squad. (And that will be covered in chapter 14 😅... So until then, I have to pick my words carefully.) She's afraid they're going to think bad of her if they know the whole story, and although that isn't true, it's a really harsh point to explain over a drink during a mission. I gave Duchess and Echo's conversation sitting at the table a double meaning; Not only are they being vague to keep cover, but Duchess is able to use that as an excuse to give them background on her without getting into specifics she's too uncomfortable to mention outright.
Now for Crosshair, I really struggled. Not going to lie. It's almost impossible to refrain from making Cross out to be a total fucking creep. 😂 He's just so overprotective -for good reasons normally- and it can come off really slimy if I don't get the tone right. As I said before, Crosshair is best experienced in-person. And although we can't do that... I try my best to get his character across clearly, but keep as much of his intimate feelings unlimited. After all, no one is perfect, and I don't think Crosshair getting angry when Dutch is in danger is something he should be punished for. That's what any normal person would do.
To keep up with the "show, don't tell" theme, Crosshair giving her his shirt before he leave for the mission is a huge action that I'm not sure many people caught. Or if you did, I couldn't hear your thoughts.
We all know by now that Crosshair is almost always painfully awkward with words. His default is sarcasm and brashness. That doesn't bode well when you're trying to feel out the complexity of emotions, and how to explain them to someone you love. That's hard for anyone. But for Crosshair that's extra difficult because he thinks that makes him weak. That if someone sees that in him, it's going to get used against him, and it will hurt someone like Duchess or his brothers.
Even though Dutch doesn't see him the entire time he's on the ship, it's clear he's watching her all the time. Not out of hate or anger, but just simply keeping check on her like he always does. That's habit at this point. But knowing that she's out of clean clothes? That is new to Crosshair, but it comes naturally to act instead of speak. (To be honest with you, I thought about having a spicy scene here... But it felt super forced, and that's because Crosshair wouldn't do it. Not that he can't barge in and have some jealousy sex, but it wasn't the right time, and that wasn't his headspace.) In leaving his shirt, that's kinda his apology for acting like he did. I know, I know, terrible way of saying "hey you did a good job and I didn't tell you when I should have." BUT. What can you expect from a man who bullies as a form of flirting? Exactly, nothing.
Now for what you all hate me for... THE SHITTY PART.
THIS HAD TO HAPPEN. No other way around it, it had to. There were a million ideas worse than Crosshair getting his shit kicked in. (I thought of an explosion gone wrong, thermite melting his armor, and a bunch of other shit that you actually would have killed me for. Those examples are actually pretty mild. I didn't want to put you through the same thing Wolffe did during O-66. It isn't that deep.) Nevertheless, this is the first time Duchess gets to experience Crosshair being the one who's unwillingly vulnerable. It's scary -for many reasons- and there are a lot of things going on that she can't process. (I can't say too much because a lot is happening in chapter 14.)
What I would like to mention is Echo and Dutch's scene in the storage bay. I know it's short, but I packed a lot in there. Remember how Echo said Crosshair wouldn't stop talking about her? You'll find out exactly what our resident ram'ser was saying soon!
Also, this is Echo and Dutch's big turning point. Not only is Echo extending a comfort by calling her vodka (like the Phantoms) but he's expressing what Crosshair can't. That might be a little cheating to speak for Cross, but Echo knows him well enough to be truthful. Not to mention Dutch is freaking the fuck out, and there needs to be some substantial support. Because none of the Batch are going to give her that in a way that is relatable. Remember: Echo knows what it's like to lose brothers. This moment is terrifying for both of them because it's a hallmark of how easy death can come.
The two of them are facing this fear with each other because they're the only two who get it. And that's really important considering Echo doesn't have to do it. He could ignore Dutch and take care of Crosshair like everyone else. But instead, he sees that pain and panic and addresses it in a way that he feels will ease that response he recognizes in Duchess. I consider this a turn in their relationship, and from here on out, things with Echo and Dutch are going to be different. (Don't worry. I don't vibe with PolyAm stuff, so it's strictly platonic.) But you'll see just how close Duchess and Echo get after that moment in the storage room.
The key moment here being how Duchess isn't willing to let anyone near her or Crosshair, save for Echo.
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You know I want to talk about Coriolis Effect, but uh, like, I like all the scenes (except the last chapter 😡). So, what’s your favorite scene?
Let me apologize :( I'm truly sorry, but you'll feel much better soon. I'm not going to leave you all on a sour note like this for a month. I'm hoping to have a chapter out within a week or two. (My wedding is in 45 days, and I'm doing what I can when I can 😅🤍)
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Honestly, this a hard one. I don't know why, but there's part of me that really likes the scene in Chapter Nine where Crosshair and Duchess have their first "so are we sleeping in the same bed?" moment. I know it's not super special, but I really enjoy the nuance. Duchess is so fucking tired that she couldn't give a shit about anything, and Crosshair is so bratty that he can't just ask her to sleep with him. I find it humorous and oh-so-Crosshair.
He can never be the slightest bit vulnerable -even when he's with a girl who can't stand on her own two feet because she's so tired. He's watched her scour over Chain Codes for hours, thinking about nothing but her and how he ever got to this moment. All the while trying not to feel like a wimp for wanting her to climb into bed with him. (Such a sweet boy) So when she doesn't even think about doing so, Crosshair's first reaction is to give her a hard time and blame it on her data pad keeping him up. Which he knows is a god-awful complaint, but he doesn't really care if it gets him what he wants.
To make it that much more Crosshair-esque he makes her "clean his rifle" as "punishment". Which is really cute because if she had said "I'm really tired" he would have caved so fucking hard and just let her curl up into him and fall asleep. BUT NO. Even as tired as she is, Dutch won't let him have that satisfaction and proves that his little game isn't too hard for her. She does a thorough job, and that kinda entertains Crosshair. He knows she's tired, and seeing her push just to spite him in a sense is really fucking cute. He loves that shit more than he's ever going to admit.
Then to top it all off, he makes her look like the one who wanted to sleep up there in the first place by acting like he doesn't have a care in the world. But Duchess always matches him punch for punch, and in one last act of "you're being difficult on purpose and I don't like it" huffs down next to him with her back facing him. It's a silent back and forth, and I see it so clearly in my head. They're both wanting to quit and just cuddle, but neither one wants to loose.
For My Own Pleasure: Crosshair is the one that breaks first. He can't help but curl up around her and just sink into the bed because being in that cot has never felt as good as it does with Duchess in it keeping him warm. She always has this all-encompassing vibe that Cross can't figure out, and the only way he can reciprocate that is physically. So he literally covers her up and gets every inch of himself possible against her. It's so soft, and so vulnerable. Even though he doesn't mean for it to be. And the "My Duchess"... Yeah... that's the good shit. (We Stan a possessive Crosshair on this blog.)
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Let’s play would you rather: Clone Edition
As smutty or fluffy as you’d like, I’ll answer them all 🤍
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I really want to talk about fics. Anyone want to join me? Send in a little scene from any of my fics and I’ll talk about them!
You can send one in here!
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L for the ask game
✨Fanfic Ask Game✨
L- How many times do you usually revise your fic/chapter before posting?
Oh god. I don’t know how to tell you all this, but I will revise like… three times.
Maybe?
And it’s awful because I know that means I don’t catch spelling errors and such, but my average chapter is around 20-25k words. And to be honest, I can’t go back through with a fine tooth comb. I literally don't have the brain power to do such things.
After writing I do a full-read through, and make my notes of what needs fixed. If I don’t catch it then, on my second read through I’ll fix it then. The third is to read it for timing, and to make sure when you read through it isn’t difficult to pace.
That’s my crack-head way of revising, and I’m SO sorry if I do a horrible job.
Anyways, thank you for asking anon.
Much love, Rightful 🤍
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