#{or rhyme scheme?}

[mumblesplash]

i say if you’re gonna have the mysterious entities speak in rhyme you might as well commit (EDIT: part 2!)

(posting an unprecedented Part 1 of At Least 3 bc i actually have the entire script and most of the storyboarding for this done already)

#yknow. got an idea. had a breakdown. bon appetit #this was the creative impulse i was referring to on sunday #my art #secret life #secret life spoilers #slsmp #grian #geminitay #briefly #trafficblr #also #mostly bc i am proud of it and partly bc i want people to know it’s on purpose: #grian is not trying to rhyme at all in this part. he is being deliberately unhelpful #he lowkey tries to fuck it up on purpose in that second to last panel but the secret keepers just switch rhyme schemes #the one time he completes an end rhyme is because he lost his temper #anyway yeah this was motivated mostly by me wanting to see if i could do it

[muzzleroars]

the first and lowest sphere of paradise manifests the inconstant in faith, just as the moon is inconstant in its phases.

#ultrakill #gabriel #been thinking about this ever since i made the post about it #gabriel contemplates on the moon!!! the sphere of broken vows!!! #it's there that he questions what his service meant and his duties to god!!!! #quote is also taken from the ciardi version #i've read it twice and really recommend it! #it's great for keeping the rhyming scheme and provides a lot of footnotes vital to understanding the comedy #doodle tag

[txttletale]

#tattletxt #hieroglyphic every particle #i like my simple little rhyme schemes and rhythms :) #it is fun learning to move past needing them but they are fun to execute

[sysig]

Hey, hey! RnR not requested! (Patreon)

#Doodles #SCII #DAX #ZEX #Does anyone still use RnR lol #I think I was a little too late for that but in my brief stint on FF.net I did get a couple reviews so *shruggles* #ANYway lol #The topic of VUX poetry came up and it would not leave me alone #But at the same time it is so hard to English-phoneticize VUK ZIX into my preferred poetry method! #So I gave up and went with a playground chant lol #I also wasn't sure which direction it would be read in apart from bottom-up :0 #Japanese is top-down right-to-left so maybe it's inverse?? I don't know! #That's what I went with this time anyhow lol #Also making up rules on the spot lol - ''a'' is always contextually inferred by its surroundings #Have I thought about the implications of inferred subject/singular vs. plural phrasing? No! Give me some time tho ♪ #Lol #I have also pretty firmly come to the conclusion that -ing sounds just aren't a thing lol #At least not written and not comfortably spoken #You could force the sound but it's exactly what it says on the tin - forced #So the rhyme-scheme is a bit funny haha - that rhyme doesn't translate at all! But it is still fun to write a little ship-poem hehe #ZEX does not approve but it's not his poem is it! Tentacles to yourself! Don't stick your trunk where it's not wanted! #I do love when DAX is silly and lovestruck haha

[calamitys-child]

Something something the curtains are blue or whatever but underappreciated media analysis phenomenon is when someone else reads something you wrote and points out the blue curtains that you hadn't even noticed yourself hanging up while you built it. Like fuck they sure are I genuinely hadn't noticed I just flung em up I was concentrating on the carpet. Hey that shade of blue goes nice with the carpet huh. I should get more decor in that colour. Does this make sense to anyone

#like my pal proofread some poetry for me and one of the things they said was like #'your cadence is really good and i like how you do bouncy assonance rhymes when you're playing or introducing a concept #then sharper rhythmic rapid lines when youre passionate or angry and then switch abruptly to a completely different rhyme scheme to #indicate that you've gotten upset or reached a conclusion' #i never in my life noticed myself doing that. i just write based on vibes and mouthfeel. but now theyve pointed it out??? #dude its in like half my poems. its a really recognisable voice. i didnt know i had one of those and i definitely didnt know #that my choice of meter is such a clear emotional throughline to a reader #but yken what. i like that shade of blue

[swinging-stars-from-satellites]

a snapping of threads

oh, you know it's bad when I want to beg

bend on my knees with a weary head

you know it's bad when I start to cry

despite all the banners and bright blue skies

you know it's bad when I start to crumple

can't pick myself up from the littlest stumbles

you know it's bad because I won't lie

you ain't gonna find positivity in my eyes

oh, darling, you know it's bad when I pick up the phone

that last thing that keeps me from being alone

you know it's bad because there's the grief

stinging from my heart all the way to my teeth

you know it's bad because I haven't spoken

haven't said a word since I let you go

you know it's bad because my sinuses clog

and I'm sat here writing this damn song

oh, you know it's bad because I want to beg

pick up the phone to talk sense to your head

you know it's bad when I start to cry

brother, in the end I never could say goodbye

~ xoxo, Love yoU

#poem about/kind of vaguely directed at my brother #realized today that I am seeing multiple friends' babies born and grow up but I won't get to see my own fricking niece the same #Lu writes #sometimes I think I could write poetry #this is kind of supposed to be in the rhyme scheme/rhythm of a folk song

[adastra121]

Monster (Touchstarved MC Rewrite)

I've been really loving the songs from Epic: The Musical and decided to do a lyrics rewrite of my favourite song from the Underworld Saga, "Monster," for the Touchstarved MC, because I thought it was fitting, possibly for an MC turning to the dark side.

I did a lyrics rewrite for another song from Epic for my Alchemist!MC and his mentor a while ago, but I didn't change too many of the lyrics, so I might revisit that one in the future.

MC: How has everything been turned against us? How did suffering become so endless? How am I to finally wash this blood away? Or do I need to change?

MC: I'm surrounded by the ghosts of minds they’ve lost, Haunted by the blood and death that I have caused. What if the greatest threat we'll find is not the mist, But this?

MC: What if I'm the monster? What if I'm in the wrong? What if I'm the Soulless that's been lurking in the Fog? These hands of mine had killed them. What if I must bear the guilt? What if after this curse goes away, I’ll remain a monster, still? What if I'm the monster…

MC: Does the temple bear the guilt when they kill? Do their deaths keep the priests up in the night? Or do they take and tame in the name of faith, And believe they have served their gods right?

MC: When a childhood friend makes a promise and then Stabs the back of the one they swore to save, Did they learn to be colder when they got older, And now they can save themselves the pain?

MC: When an exiled mage builds a child a cage, Does she fear all the lines that she must cross? Or she commands respect, keeps her feelings in check To find answers regardless of the cost.

MC: When a traveller goes unravelling the mind Of a stranger who helped them, are they vile? Or do they have no say, made to drive insane And cursed to survive?

MC: If I became the monster, and threw that guilt away… Would that make me stronger? Would it keep the curse at bay? If I became the monster to everyone but me… What if there’s no price too high, As long as I am free? If I became the—

Caravanners: Monster… MC: Oh, ruthlessness is mercy upon ourselves. Traveller: Monster… MC: And deep down I know this well.

MC: I lost my best friend, I lost my mentor, my faith, Too many lives slain, I cannot wait! I must find the key to what I seek, or else more will bleed. So if I must face down dangerous trials and battles, I'll go where the Senobium won't travel, And if I must send another innocent to madness in an instant so that I can end this…

MC: Then I'll become the monster! I will deal the blow! And I'll become a monster like none they've ever known! So what if I'm the monster tearing through the Shroud? I must become the monster if I’m to make it out!

Priests: Monster! MC: I’ll find the key! Syndicate: Monster! MC: And if I must— Mentor: Monster! MC: Oh, ruthlessness is mercy upon ourselves. Kuras, Leander, Vere, Ais, Mhin: Monster! MC: I’ll become the monster…

#touchstarved #touchstarved game #touchstarved mc #touchstarved unnamed #touchstarved hound #touchstarved alchemist #epic the musical #lyrics rewrite #rewrite #song rewrite #Spotify #I wanted to include all the origin stories #“monster” is so very precisely and perfectly written with the rhyming and rhythm schemes but I tried my best! #shoutout to the bridge — it's what inspired me to rewrite this for the touchstarved mc #the “I lost my best friend I lost my mentor” and I thought that fit the hound and alchemist backstories #replacing a specific name is always fun and slightly painful in rewrites. XD #I think I had to do that in my arcana “in my dreams” rewrite as well #from “in Paris” to “I promise” #listening to the instrumental of the song it surprisingly fits the touchstarved vibe #like the music during the first verse sounds almost submerged similarly to the “every time we touch” cover #and the horn in the end I think it could be replaced with that fog siren sound from that cover #I also had fun with the chorus in the background I wanted MC to be haunted by the ghosts of their past #the traveller is mr.chokey by the way!

[orcboxer]

wrote a traditional sonnet about unrequited love, from the perspective of a possessive god

#orcspeak #it's for the novel and I'm actually very pleased with myself about it #shit's got them iambs. it's got the ABBAABBACDEDCE rhyme scheme. AND it has a ''turn'' after the quatrains #I ain't a poet so I'm delighted it turned out good

[duckbunny]

basically all you have to do is attend a singing type church from the age of 0 and sing in the car and sing on long walks and sing on the bike and sing in choir and sing in the shower and sing in the kitchen and sing in your head and make up extra verses and sing quartermaster's stores and sing nelson's blood and sing parodies and steal from folk collections for things you can sing and change the names and cut out verses and put new ones in and sing sing sing and write and sing and write, and eventually you too can confuse internet strangers by parodying a parody on the fly to make an off-colour joke!

#I am a poetry-type beast and this is why #prose takes inspiration #song just needs a rhyming scheme

[mumblesplash]

part 2!!!! [read part one here]

transcript below the cut arranged into stanzas to help show where the rhymes are:

“that’s why they brought gem in? as a failsafe?” as a pawn. we were told to point her at whoever we need gone

“gem won’t hurt her allies. …yet.” the curse she carries will it’s had its eye on her since she lost the other eye she was specially selected for her hunting skill it’s quite the high honor. “wow. how generous.” we try

think about it: why does almost no one fight the curse? “given how fast scott killed skizz last season, i can guess.” [“any pain you spare your friends, you’ll have to suffer worse”?] it’s designed to shut down higher reasoning with stress

#if you still can't see the rhyme scheme try reading it out loud #if that doesn't work uh. idk. can't help you #my art #grian #geminitay #smajor1995 #bdoubleo100 #inthelittlewood #secret life #grian and his terrible horrible no good very bad eldritch coworkers: the sequel #cant wait to post the next part so i can be like 'my three secret life comics. and yes they all rhyme' #this one narratively doesn't work nearly as well as a standalone compared to part 1 #however i accidentally went way too hard and could probably upload the middle page + second to last panel as their own separate art pieces #tbh i'm considering putting an explanation of everything below the readmore buuut i don't feel like it atm. :3 later maybe #me and my 20+ life series headcanons i only allude to without explicitly stating don't need to explain ourselves #still experimenting with this webtoon-esque vertical comic style #still not sure i like it #it gets long too quickly #among other things #but it's very easy to read on a phone so

[anglerflsh]

ooo you like poetry because of the feeli- no I like poetry because I count syllables and accents in my head when I read and I love when it is all in a neat structure of sounds : ) and especially when there's a rhyming scheme that's hard to figure out it's like a puzzle for me : ) I don't give a shit for the inherent emotion behind it I just like structures and rules

#[.txt] #hyperbole ofc #I just think the most fun bit of poetry is metric and rhyme structure sorry for being correct about everything ever #it's why I don’t get that like. poetry without a scheme style. #i dont think theres anything wrong with it i just dont see the point in making it a poem if its not going to have a structure #“It is SUBJECTIVE. this is a hyperbolic SUBJECTIVE post. On God

[akkivee]

I feel like HypMic is at this weird point where they are lingering on how they want to proceed forward. I feel like the music for the 2nd DRB was very experimental, and I did appreciate that even if I didn't like all the music (except for that DragonAsh song tho that was ass LOL). It feels like KR is struggling with how to move forward with telling a story while using the voting system, as such they've kinda written themselves into a corner. Like it was obvious they wanted FP to win the 2nd DRB because it was needed for plot. But at the same time it really feels like the plot has slowed to a crawl at the same time, and between that and the music creeping away from rap you're kinda left with a feeling of disappointment overall. It esp hits harder when you're a fan of BAT and DH given how under utilized they still are in the grand scheme of things. But given how they placed them geographically it feels like yet another instance of KR accidentally writing them into a corner and struggling to rectify that so they can be more relevant but also make it make sense, idk. I still love Kuko no matter what even if the series is currently languishing. (it also doesn't help that there isn't really any unified fandom because of politics, too much content too fast, and people being so oshi-pilled they have no interest in touching content that doesn't interest them. Which again, sucks as BAT fan cuz we don't really have a translator solider for us.)

what’s really really annoying about that, is that it has been put out there that we’ve entered the third act in hypmic’s story and tho it’s not always necessarily the case, usually that means we are heading towards an end. and we are starting to see an end with a lot of og division plot threads so to be closer to the end than not and still having like a third of your cast floundering around is not good!!!!! at all lol!!!! unless there’s a max effort push to bring nagosaka into the fold, it really does feel like nagosaka, no matter what, will feel under utilised

hypmic’s slow to come plot bombs have been a staple since the beginning so i’m not mad at it, esp since i suspect those long waits have something to do with production values and making the next shiny, economically stimulating thing lol, but you’re right about it not being great rn when everything else is not great lol

but i will say hypmic has its formulas. like the way first solos were surface level character introduction raps and the second solos went into depth, for the og divisions, their first drb and preceding dramas were introductory and the 2nd drb dramas really dug deep into them. so hopefully the same will happen for nagosaka when the 3rd drb drama hits them lol 🤞

#vee got an ask #thedragonofbadasstemple #oh a fellow showdown hater!!!!!!!!!! it feels so good to not be alone in that LOL #if bp hadn’t been followed by rhyme anima’s hit or miss songs maybe the conversation around hypmic’s music would be different ¯\_(ツ)_/¯ #like i’m still banking on 3rd drb being pairs battles in order to bring nagosaka further into the fold #bbbat has ichiro and his goals mtcdh has rei and what doesn’t fpmtr have lol but yeah #with true hypnosis mic as end goal that also sets the people who have been affected by the true hypnosis mic on individual pairs as well #kuukou sasara and yotsutsuji via jakurai plot beats i mean #so bc i can see potentials of where things can go i’m not yet at a point where i’m ready to concede defeat lol #i’m frustrated lol!!!!!!! but unless those potentials are gone i do still believe lmao #i don’t want to put it out there that nagosaka are cash grab divisions but sometimes they got me wondering if i fr fell for the scheme lol

[presumenothing]

警报 | THE GIVER

from zhou shen's second album 《反深代词》 | listen on spotify

lyrics by: 尹约 / yin yue [T/N: title is literally alarm/siren, as in "raise the alarm", because *faintly deranged background laughter* yeah sure why not]

迁就对方的节奏 matching – to their pace, 感受对方的感受 feeling – in their place; 请求对方的请求 seeking what they seek, 成就对方的成就 to reach for what they seize

原地不动 不忍失守 here, motionless / fearing to fail 你等在情绪代谢的最下游 you stand guard where the rivers empty of feeling 予取予求 照单全收 no give, just take / all asked, forsake 别人的任性汹涌 awash in waves – crash, of a thousand wills

为何你心情表情从来不相通 why do your feelings never match your face 为何你伤得越重笑得越轻松 why is your laugh lighter with every lash 不停点头 不折不扣 always, a yes / no tricks, no traps 一付出就是全部的最上游 all that you give is all that it takes 毫无保留 倾你所有 keeping none back / with every trace 竟还担心不够 yet still you say: help, if i may?

我发送 警报声 血红色 惊叹号 i'm raising / the alarm / in blood-red / i exclaim 提醒你自救 saying: save yourself 被遥控 被耗空 快失控 快断送 being controlled / giving all / soon, no more / you'll be gone 我替你看透 glance in my crystal ball 从借用 到利用 到享用 到滥用 borrow this / use me thus / enjoy this / ruin me thus 转身就走 done and dusted 他们绝不 为你而痛 for you, they won't / shed nay a tear

共情是一种劳动 empathy is its own toil, 温柔是一种苦衷 gentleness its own turmoil; 善良是一种沉重 kindness brings its own burden, 原谅是一种纵容 forgiving a mere lenience

人前人后 思前想后 for them, to them / your thoughts astray 你被困进人情世故的中游 stuck stranded in these rapids of the world's affairs 为难左右 无力追究 troubled, you pace / too drained to say: 你终将何去何从 in the end, where can i stay?

为何你心情表情从来不相通 why do your feelings never match your face 为何你内心越痛笑得越隆重 why is your smile brighter as your heart tears 千疮百孔 暗藏担忧 riddled in wounds / wall away these woes 你却看不见自己快要断流 yet you see not how near is your ruin 回应落空 希望尘封 ask, but none echo / a grave of hopes 求救无人听懂 cry out for help – but no-one fathoms

我不断 再计算 因为你 不计算 i'm counting / what they take / because you / never wake 还能撑多久 to ask: how much more can i take 给世界 最宽容 给自己 最苛求 to the world / you relent / for yourself / never bend 顺位排最后 always the last in every line 你心口 从伤口 到决口 不开口 in your heart / none but scars / now, too late / still none said 笑容始终 smiling, 'til the end 我学会痛 为你而痛 and so – i learn / pain you never earned

#zhou shen #反深代词 #shenself #周深 #long post #YIN YUE ARE YOU TRYING TO MURDER ME RN #this was so difficult my brain is coming out my ears #burning the thesaurus to drink it on main #(conan style dying message) rhyme and rhythm schemes #eta: ok 少管我 is gonna have to wait in its own queue LOL 3 in a row is a bit much even for me

[quibbs126]

Did you know shadow milk cookie’s color palette is pure vanilla’s inverted? Roughly at least

Yes I am very aware

I do wonder how intentional it is, because as far as I can tell from the other Beasts and what we know of their colors, Shadow Milk is the only one who has this. Silent Salt is somewhat close, since White Lily’s color palette mostly inverts to a pinkish purple, but it doesn’t hold up for anyone else, other than Golden Cheese’s accent blues inverting to red, but the rest of her inverted palette is also blue

#at least as far as I can tell now there’s no rhyme or reason as to why the Beasts have their specific colors #since they’re not all inverted or opposite the color palette or the same #and Shadow Milk and Eternal Sugar keep the same color palette as their successors’ Soul Jams #it’s just that Pure Vanilla doesn’t follow the color scheme of his Soul Jam #but yeah #I’ve known about it for a while #I inverted the rest of the Ancient color palettes later on to see if they were similar #but no dice #other than maybe White Lily #cookie run #cookie run kingdom #shadow milk cookie #pure vanilla cookie #answers

[cookinguptales]

By the way, if any of you really want to read and learn about Dante's Inferno, Purgatorio, and Paradiso, Columbia University has a free web course about it.

If you click that link, they have free versions of the text (in the original Italian but also both the Mandelbaum and Longfellow translations) that you can use to follow along with the lectures. They also have pretty extensive commentary on the text as well as galleries and audio recordings to help you understand things better.

It's a really excellent free resource!

#does anyone want to watch the lectures with me sometime I'm considering it #I've been using the mandelbaum translation as I put together these meta posts about malevolent lmao #it's the one I used in school and it's still nice and clear #I like that he didn't try to force the translation into terza rima #that rhyme scheme just doesn't work as well in English and often leads to some somewhat tortured translations #but you can look at the original italian right next to it which allows you to understand the rhyme scheme being used #best of both worlds imo

[supernova3space]

Greatest of the Greeks, grieving

Let me lie down with you one last time

On our bed of firewood and oil

Let the flames of your pyre consume me

Before the inferno in my chest reduces me to ash

Cast aside the laws of the Immortals

What good have they ever brought us, my love?

Your restless soul was void of peace

And now it will never know it, will it, dove?

Your breath was my music and now

Where has it gone, my sunlight?

Your eyes would dance, I lived in them

Won't they look again at me, my flame bright?

Did he make you cry in pain

As he brought upon your end

An end meant for me, my North Star?

Had I destroyed my own world when I sent you away?

As your blood baptized the ground on which you lay

I kindled my soul as firewood for your pyre

I gave you my heart and now,

It burns with you, what do I have left now?

#i should be studying #achilles #patrochilles #patroclus #the song of achilles #original poem #poem #poems on tumblr #poems and poetry #idk what i was doing #Idk what i was thinking tbh #Just listened to a combo of songs #Lines started popping up in my head while I'm trying to learn physics #No fixed rhyme scheme #grief of achilles #basically achilles being super sad cause his tentmate died #it was totally not his fault #man must have had a valid reason for it yeah? #considering the fact that achilles wasn't there when patroclus died #the iliad #theyre soulmates your honor #lmao have fun #poetryblr #I'm using a lot of poetic licence here #Randomly written in 5 minutes #tagamemnon #idk how to tag this