#overuse of dialogue

[whump-queen]

whumper using victim blaming dialogue as a humiliation tactic—

“well I wouldn’t have done it if you didn’t make it so fucking easy.”

“if you weren’t so pretty when you begged and cried.”

“if you didn’t take abuse so well.”

“I just hit you and you whine like that— I mean, what am I supposed to think?”

“you know you deserve this.”

“go on, tell me you deserve it.”

“I want to hear you say it.”

and who knows— eventually, whumpee might start to believe they’re right

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[shoutout to @unorganisedalienrubbish for coming up with like half of these]

#whumper dialogue #whump dialogue #in which I overuse italics as usual #humiliation whump #psycholgical whump #victim blaming #degradation whump #sadistic whumper #manipulative whumper #tw verbal abuse #whump prompt #tw victim blaming #psychological manipulation #did we get everything? I hope so #akia.txt #my post

[xysidhequeen]

No idea who needs to hear this. Because I've been writing, professionaly as my job for over a year and this only just clicked for me.

Dialogue does not have to be followed with 'X Said/Told/Yelled etc etc.' You can just move on to an action. IE: "Can't believe you did that!" X dropped to the floor, narrowly avoiding a sword that flew through the air where her throat had been seconds before.

I know for many writers this isn't some grand revelation but maybe it'll cause an epiphany for someone else.

#BRB having an existential crisis about this #hahahHaHAHahaHa definitely shouldnt edit my 500k word book series with this in mind in a hyperfixation daze #i want to bash my head into a wall for being so DUMB for so long #how did i not realize this #it can make dialogue flow so much smoother especially if you have a pet peeve like me about overused words in your own writing #also this is definitely a result of sleep deprivation but for once im not mad about it #i actually discovered something that will improve my writing tremendously #writing #Writer #writer things #writing advice #writer problems #author #fic writing #writing tips

[luderailing]

Lat 🖋️

#I feel like the panels don’t really go together #and I realize some of the dialogue doesn’t make sense #but yknow….I’m just kinda proud to get something out #I feel like I had a long day haha #glad I was still able to draw something #and this wasn’t really related to anything. I just like doing these with characters #random comic strips/writing scenes #helps me get to know them better I think #I realize my blog isn’t really centered around any few characters? #I mean there’s definitely some characters I draw more than others #but I wanna develop my ideas about them #who am I kidding ive been trying to do this forever haha #at least you guys like the art so slow n steady I guess #I’ll get to wherever I wanna be someday. I’m still young ig #faith is key! #if ur reading this rn (u a real one if you actually read allat???) have some confidence in your future #that sounds very cheesy and overused but it’s true. I believe in u<3 #hetalia #aph baltics #art #aph latvia #my art

[dumblemonchickenwing]

I find it interesting how Rouxls tends to get fans in the dtr fandom based on how much people are willing to tolerate his speech pattern. Because some people who play the game, refuse to dive into his character simply because they refuse to read his dialogue

#i watched playthroughs and some people would say 'omg im not gonna read his lines..' and skip his dialogue completely #in all honesty though..majority of people do read his lines and do like him #rouxls kaard #i dont judge those who dont btw. I know it can be a nightmare if you struggle with focus or reading and then you get That #guy who overuses old english and makes it worse for you #text

[shrimpmandan]

Listen I think "said" is a good word. I think "said" has a time and place where it's better to use than a bunch of descriptive words, especially since too many random synonyms for "speak" can come off as jarring and clunky to read.

On the flip side, if you're one of those writers who puts "he/she/they said" at the end of every single dialogue tag, I actively hate you personally and every time I see that in any piece of writing it actively grates on my brain/ears and makes me close whatever I'm reading immediately

#personal #idk how to tag this lol it's not advice im just bitching #it'd be like if i used ''spoke'' or ''replied'' at the end of every single dialogue tag like cmon #overusing ANY word in writing is a surefire way to make it actively annoying to read

[scenedenial]

what are your fanfiction icks that will make you stop reading immediately. can be general or fandom specific

#mine are ooc dialogue (he would not fucking say that) #overuse of exclamation points #gratuitous fluff #weird names for dick #‘member’ especially #x reader #or not x reader but obviously self insert anyways

[thevoiceofdesertbluffs]

The Smiling God’s [second] Silliest Soldier

#wtnv #Welcome to Night Vale #Kasper Rhodes #kasper rhodes wtnv #cecil palmer #cecil gershwin palmer #i love this clip because i think it sums up cecil and kasper's dynamic perfectly #literally the basis of inspiration for all my fics w dialogue between them #or between kasper and anyone for that matter #he overuses the word ''buddy'' 100% #hes so silly

[orcelito]

i hate anytime anyone says like "You should just do this one specific thing with writing bc it's the superior way of writing and everything else sucks" bc im like well what if i dont want to do that with my writing. i rather like how my writing is as it is. & then it makes me feel self conscious of my writing. bc brains are bitches i guess.

#speculation nation #like i do take writing advice into consideration bc it's not like my writing is perfect #there are still things i could improve on. & im working on them. #but. sometimes ppl r just so... generalizing. #this is Specifically with regards to the sentiment ive seen going around of 'it's best to just stick to 'said'' with dialogue tags #and i... dont like doing that. #i find it Fun to think on whether theres a more descriptive word! #and it can really embellish the writing when you find the right ones #and i also like to intersperse dialogue among actions and thoughts. to mix it up & all #'said' just feels very... bland to me. i dont like using it much. #im trying to work on using it if theres just not a more descriptive tag that properly fits. & there's not an action i can easily insert #bc i do agree that overusing synonyms of 'said' gets you that My Immortal type of screenshot #it's about moderation. it's all about moderation. #i know im overthinking this. i KNOW plenty of people have said they like how i write. #but when i see something like this that contradicts the way that i write. it makes me so incredibly self conscious i find it hard to write. #the thing is i try to seem confident on ao3 but i am anything but. even after 640k words posted my confidence is flimsy at best #so even one statement that could be read as anything other than a glowing review makes me so self conscious i wanna curl up in a ball #gaaaah brain's a bitch. anytime i start getting self doubts i try to just shut up about it so i dont bother anyone else with it #since it happens... unfortunately very often. VERY often. #ive been thinking about this for a few weeks tho & ive seen another post on the matter floating around #it's a joke post. not even that serious. but it still makes me so self conscious. #so i wanted to get it off my chest. mostly just complaining. i hate feeling so self conscious about my writing. #hundreds of comments of praise and excitement for my writing & im done in by a few posts that weren't even directed at me #self consciousness is so fuckin stupid. i hate how my brain works.

[harmonicaorange]

first book hangover in ages and it’s cause of FOURTH WING???

#i just really like dragons #like it was not well written imo #the dialogue was ridiculous lol but i found it fun #and i think the dragons sounded like they have twitter accounts and graduated college in 2010 #they should have sounded wiser #and spoken less honestly #also biggest book pet peave #and this happens on JLA books #is when in a high fantasy setting someone says ‘same’ #not ‘i understand’ or ‘i can relate’ but JUST ‘Same.’ #YOU DONT TALK LIKE THAT IF YOU HAVE TO USE A CHAMBERPOT #i hate it sooo much and xadan (terrible name) said it DURING SEX #it was crazy #also why are smut scenes so much better in fanfic #like i don’t like most book smut scenes tbh #they overuse the word cock and make their characters say too many things #like there is no way they have the breath to say all that mfer aren’t you busy!! #mine #natasha reads #fourth wing

[four-color-words]

I don't... Know what the Thanagarians are doing in the Sol system at this point or why they're treating moving Callisto from Jupiter to New Krypton as an attack. There is context I'm missing and nobody in the comic is explaining it

#i also don't know what half the Thanagarians' dialogue MEANS they're overusing space-slang and it's driving me up the WALL

[whump-queen]

whumper pretending to be mad just to see whumpee squirming and groveling and apologizing within a second because they don’t know what they did wrong but fuck they’re so so sorry and they’ll do anything to make it better—

“sir please—please let me make it up to you—I promise I’ll be better I swear—just please—”

#akia.txt #psychological manipulation #whumper just being an asshole for fun my beloved #ffuck I live for the instant begging and applogizing types 💅🏻✨💕 #wow finally I post smth instead of queueing it out of anxiety #finally got my meds so hopefully will have the energy to finish this comic tn #begging #broken whumpee #conditioned whumpee #toxic whumper #terrible horrible no good #im sitting on a gold mine of toxic whumper content soo #hoping I actually have the energy and motivation to post more now #whump scenario #in which i overuse italics as usual #whump prompt #my prompts #whumpee dialogue

[lilyvines]

*making my best little puppy eyes at you* Go on, tell us about the purpled + cbenchtrio vigilante au

(No pressure, you don’t have to share anything you don’t want to ofc!! /srs)

ofc I will share!!! I love talking abt the aus in my brain

ok basically benchtrio become vigilantes after tommy has a brush with death and realizes a lot of areas don’t have enough heroes. through the power of comedic misunderstandings all the heroes and general civilians think they’re Very Scary Villains

anyway their motivations are basically

tommy: wants to save people

tubbo: knows tommy would die without help (also he wants to find his missing aunt puffy)

ranboo: both his friends were being vigilantes and it’s not like he had other plans

purpled shows up because they need his help with something, and he’s not really part of the main group because he’s just kinda paid to be there. tubbo has tons of money and just pays purpled really well so purpled is like yeah why not be a misunderstood vigilante

at some point purpled ends up getting caught by the police (probably jack manifold tbh) who are used to having to interrogate a specific kind of villain, which purpled is not, so it goes

police: I know your type. you want to save people, but your rage gets in the way. isn’t it difficult, that people don’t understand you?

purpled, who literally just wants money: yeah. so difficult

#at multiple occasions purp does something seemingly nice for the sake of it and tmmy thinks they’ve become friends #and then tub passes purp like 3k cash #the rest of the bed/wars gang will show up also as mercenaries #purp does kindaaaa warm up to them ig? someone else (an actual villain) tries to pay purp to kill them and he says no #tho it is never made clear whether it’s bc he likes them or bc tub just pays him really well #asks #sunlit-sonata #purp + b3 is such an overused group since they like never interact in canon but ya. They’re in my Brain #tbh tho I don’t think I would be good at writing purp like in my brain he mostly just does sardonic dialogue and violence

[theseptemberist]

From the ask that was rude towards you:

I didn't mean to sound rude, English is simple not my fist language and I am not so good in conversation in general. Many people don't understand when i sarcastic or ironic, didn't mean to attack. But sorry that my words sound like that. I am trying to do better sorry!

well thank you very much for the apology and the clarification. i certainly could have responded more charitably, and i would never dream of judging someone for having trouble communicating in english — you’re the one out here who learned a whole second language which puts you well ahead of me ahaha.

just a word of advice for the future, it may be best not to joke about that topic with strangers or really anyone short of a close personal friend who you know is okay with it. sometimes slow updates really are caused by fic falling by the wayside, other times they’re a result of stressful life demands, physical or mental illness, grief, or any of a hundred other sensitive topics. whatever the reason, almost universally authors feel a sense of obligation to update and guilt and angst when they don’t. even a humorous comment about being slow can bring up those feelings, especially from a stranger.

anyway, we good. you have my forgiveness and admiration for reaching out even after i was a little bit pissy. this was just to clarify why i responded the way i did and how jokes like that can be quite unintentionally hurtful. thanks!

#salt #not that this is salt but uhh relevant to previous salt i guess #it’s really just a matter of etiquette #if you don’t know me well enough to know why i haven’t updated #then you don’t know me well enough to roast me for it lmao #there are so many other extremely roastable things about me like my overuse of the word damnable in obi-wan’s dialogue #and my stupid gay little earring #and the fact that i just took this unrelated post as an opportunity to tell everyone i have a stupid gay little earring now #ANYWAY

[your-talos-is-problematic]

Hey can one of you do me a favor and skim that word was afonya and tell me if the lack of dialogue tags is weird

#i’m low key insecure about it #avoiding overusing said and having too many weird descriptiors by not using dialogue tags at all 😊 😊 😊 (do not do this 0/10) #tes

[starswallowingsea]

cannot say i'm a fan of the translation of marionette on the wiki.

#shay speaks #feels like they overuse the phrase 'you know' or variations of it. like i just saw it three times in the same sentence ending each clause #really not necessary to have it in every line of dialogue. #augh. this sucks!!!!

[pagerunner-j]

Jesus fucking Christ, Matthew, stop saying "interior."

It's not the smell of the interior of the chamber. They're in the chamber. Interior is implied. It's the smell of the chamber.

Unless you're talking about pipes, electrical wires, and insulation, you don't actually mean the "interior" of the walls. You mean the surface of the walls, and you don't have to say so, because again, it's implied. Just describe the walls.

You don't have to talk about the shadowed interior all the fucking time. Describe the shadows if you must. But we already know we're inside the room.

This is a weird verbal crutch and it is driving me up the exterior of the walls.

#cr talk #yes 'exterior' is also on notice #but seriously this is reminding me of books i stopped reading because the author's stylistic tics drove me out of my gourd #the plot was good #the characters were cool #it was clearly going interesting places #but if i saw one more dangling participle or overuse of ellipses or wordy dialogue tag i was going to hurl the book out the window #and it sucks when i'm into everything else but what the narrator is doing