I always thought the Broken Code should have been about Alderheart and Sparkpelt, but I also loved the good parts of A Vision of Shadows. So I decided to combine it into something I call A Broken Vision AU
Full AU under cut since it's kinda long
Replace Shadowsight and Bristlefrost completely
Sparkpelt and Alderheart are the main protagonists
Alderheart gets visions like Shadowsight
Sparkpelt is dealing with the pressure of being perfect and Firestar’s legacy
Starclan is cut off from the living
Alderpaw puts Bramblestar in the snow and he dies
Ashfur possesses him
Alderpaw and Sparkpaw receive the same vision of Skyclan
The sneak out to find Skyclan with Sandstorm because Brashstar (Ashfur possessing Bramblestar) won't let them leave
Needlepaw follows along
Sandstorm still dies
The find ‘Skyclan’ and Darktail
The discover he is nothing but bad news and kicked out the real Skyclan
On the way back to the clans, Alderpaw and Needlepaw find a kit
This kit is part of the prophecy
Plays the role of Violetshine and Rootspring
Note: the Sisters don’t exist, it’s more of a Goosefeather situation
Needlepaw calls the kit Darkkit
They take the kit back
Rowanstar wants the kit and Brashstar doesn’t care so Shadowclan take Darkkit
Darktail does all his usually stuff
Brashstar refuses to help and grows worse towards his clanmates
He is manipulating Sparkpaw
She mentions to him that she is struggling under Firestar’s legacy
Brashstar names her Sparkfire and she is horrified but says nothing
Note: she is made a warrior very early
Darktail takes Riverclan
Squirrelflight begs Brashstar to do something about Darktail or at least help Shadowclan and Riverclan and he removes her as deputy
He makes Sparkfire deputy and gives her an apprentice at the same time
She is crumbling at the seams but trying her best
Darkpaw is living with Needletail and Darktail
He keeps seeing the ghost of Bramblestar but Needletail tells him to keep it secret
He does his best to ignore Bramblestar as Darktail continues his tyranny
Brashstar is making Alderpaw’s hell
Brashstar has exiled Leafpool and Jayfeather as well as other clanmates under the guise of them being codebreakers
Squirrelflight takes Sparkfire and they beg Onestar for help but he refuses
Brashstar finds out and he exiles Squirrelflight
He sends Sparkfire to hunt and she falls into his dog attack trap
Alderpaw struggles to save his sister but manages it
Darkpaw goes to clear his mind and falls into the lake near the Thunderclan border
Sparkfire saves him and Alderheart helps him heal
They come up with the plan to kill Darktail
Darkpaw doesn’t mention Bramblestar’s ghost even though Bramblestar is begging him to speak
Darkpaw tries to poison Darktail and gets caught
Darktail tries to make Needletail kill Darkpaw but she refuses
Darkpaw runs away to Thunderclan
Needletail dies
Squirrelflight fakes her death and Brashstar is upset
Sparkfire is finally able to convince him to talk to Onestar and the other exiled clans since he is so depressed he won't argue
Shadowclan and Riverclan have been living on the outskirts of clan territory
They all go to Onestar and he confesses to Darktail being his son
Onestar and Darktail have their big fight and both die
Harestar can’t receive his nine lives but tries his best to lead anyways
Darkpaw mentions Bramblestar’s ghost to Alderheart and Sparkfire
They are not sure if the believe him, they were young when he was possessed so he has always been this way to them
Squirrelflight is living in Shadowclan in secret under Tigerstar 2, since Tigerheart’s Shadow happens a little earlier
Squirrelflight believes Darkpaw
Darkpaw receives a vision about Skyclan and leaves with Sparkfire to find them
Brashstar attacks Shadowclan when he finds out Squirrelflight is there
Alderheart is in shambles as Brashstar admits to being Ashfur
Brashstar steals Squirrelflight and drags her into the Moonpool
Darkpaw and Sparkfire grow very close in their journey to find Skyclan
Note: they are three moons apart in age
Darkpaw dreams of the Dark Forest and Ashfur since Bramblestar’s ghost has disappeared
They find Skyclan and bring them back
Darkpaw is Hawkwing’s son
Darkpaw finally feels at home in Skyclan and hasn’t been happier as he trains with his father
Alderheart fills everyone in on what they missed
Darkpaw says they need to go to the Dark Forest
Leafstar gives him his warrior name since he might not come back alive
His name is Darksong
Sparkfire and Darksong fully fall in love and spend time together
They assemble volunteers to go to the Dark Forest
Alderheart, Sparkfire, Darksong and all the other volunteers go to the Dark Forest with the help of past Dark Forest trainees
They get there
Same things happen as before, like Snowtuft and Ashfur’s ghost army and the black water
Firestar doesn’t possess anyone though because that is so dumb
They dig out the hole to Starclan
The big battle takes place
Ashfur tries to manipulate Sparkfire one last time and is about to kill her
Alderheart stops him but has no chance against Ashfur so Darksong steps in
Darksong, Alderheart and Ashfur fall into the black water
The three of them die
Sparkfire goes to jump in after them but Squirrelflight stops her
Bramblestar and Sparkpelt have a quiet conversation about losing brothers and legacies
Bramblestar renames Sparkfire to Sparkpelt
Sparkpelt is pregnant and yells at a gathering about the Warrior Code
The Clans decide to change the code for the betterment of everyone
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5 13 30 for the WIP ask game
Five = I’ve been steadily worldbuilding the universe of this series for a while now but I only just recently started to really really get into it. I’ve made this project my main focus and I’m putting a ton of effort into it and making it interesting, mysterious, and magical. The fact that it’s basically one giant guilty pleasure WIP with a ton of my favorite fantasy/romance/horror tropes definitively helps with inspiration and the writing process, hehe. :)
Thirteen = I plan for the series to have six protagonists, and thus three couples, each with their own narratives. The first two characters I’m focusing on are Raine and Desmond (tentatively named), who are probably my favorite because they’re so dramatic, problematic, and just overall a dumpster fire of a couple, lol. They’ve both been through some pretty traumatic things, especially Raine.
Raine = He was orphaned at a very young age in a very horrific way. He was placed in an orphanage and, of course, ran away and was found by what would be his adoptive father. Raine stayed with him for about six years until his adoptive father passed away, leaving Raine with no family, no connections, and little resources in a dark, dangerous city at the tender age of 14. Experiencing so much loss and being put out on the streets at such an early age affected Raine and his personality. He’s tender and sensitive at heart but has been hardened by his experiences. He can be described as ‘broody-eyed and stubborn-faced pretty boy’ and puts on a cold, stoic front unless he’s relaxed and around his found family.
Here’s a portrait of him:
Desmond = Desmond is a real piece of work, lol. He was raised in a harsh, ‘strong eat the weak’ Greek/Roman inspired magocracy empire (those with magic rule over those who don’t have magic). Desmond comes from a distinguished noble house and was disowned at a very young age, losing the protection and privileges of his house. It’s safe to say he had a not so fun childhood trying to navigate the politically dangerous and power hungry magical empire he grew up in. So, he’s calculating, rough, twisted, sardonic, and manipulative.
Here’s a portrait of him (he’s very spicy): 🥵
But that’s all the concrete details I have for now! I’m looking forward to sharing more about Raine and Desmond and the world they live in soon! Thanks so much if you actually read all that, haha! 😭🥺
Thirty = Oooh, I’m definitely a name queen and am super picky and annoying about names, so a lot of my names have meanings. Desmond, short for Desmondius, means to defend or to be a defender of mankind (not in real life, it’s a meaning in the actual lore/history of my world). Raine’s name is important because his mother (who had very little agency) fought for the right to name her own child because Raine’s father was at times controlling/abusive. She wanted her son to be named something meaningful, poetic, and special to her... and as he was born in the middle of a thundering rainstorm, she thought it fitting for him to be named as such. 🥺💕
I’m also thinking of naming him Loren/Lorian (and thus having him born under a laurel tree or something). I'm going the naturalistic route with his name for a very specific, plot related reason too. Curse my indecisive mind!
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