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wackus-bonkus-maximus · 1 year

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odnlb writing process/workshop

this is mainly for my own reference. however, if this post ends up helping you with yours, then even better! 😊

most of you know, i wrote this fic as a practice for using save the cat (aka snyder) structure, and so now that it's complete i have the outline to come back to in a way that i understand and can use in future wips! did i deviate from this structure? yes. a lot. did i still follow all the beats though? i think so! check out how i formatted my outline!

my starting point: marinette 🐞

want: revenge against monarque

need: replace hate with love

this gave me a very clear picture of the emotional journey she would undergo. once i figured out her emotional need and decided what she would do to fulfill that need, i was able to pretty much plot out the entire fic. we needed a hero (in her case, an anti-hero) we could follow through an entire 45 chapter fic, and odnlb marinette gave us a reason to care about her and root for her right off the bat!

here's what save the cat's 15-beat structure looks like at a glance:

(isn't it just beautiful? 😍)

for odnlb, i combined this structure with the 3-act, 9-block, 27-chapter method:

lol so i did not exactly stick to this, as was my plan (my huge cast of characters wanted more from me.) however, i did stick with the proper beats...it just ended up expanding into 5 acts.

this is how my outline ended up looking (orange = save the cat, purple = 3 act 9 block 27 chapters):

act 1 - ladybug meets the villains

block 1

opening image - marinette leaves a rose at chat noir's statue. her eyes are dead (like him)

introductions/setup - 6 years later, marinette works for chloe. adrien still models for gabriel & is estranged from her and his old friends

theme stated - alya says, "you're getting better." (marinette has not been focused on hatred, but her personal growth)

catalyst/ inciting incident - bunnyx steals the rabbit miraculous & draws out the villain team

debate/ immediate reaction / fallout - villain team decides to abandon plan to use rabbit miraculous & get ladybug's miraculous instead. marinette decides to get cat walker's miraculous & kill monarque with it.

block 2

actions - ladybug interrogates adrien agreste bc he is close to lila, chloe, and felix (primary suspects). he doesn't give her any information, but reassures her he is on her side.

consequences - volpina attacks ladybug, villain team overpower her

block 3

pressure - ladybug is outnumbered, cannot stand against all the holders & their power-ups. villain side: ladybug is onto them. ladybug needs an ally & turns to kagami (also close to felix), but kagami turns ladybug down (but why?).

pinch/plot twist - cat walker contacts ladybug: tells her monarque is going to resume akuma attacks unless lb gives her miraculous

break into act 2 - monarque attempts to akumatize ladybug, but cat walker saves her. realizes villains' motivations are split.

act 2 - rise of monarque

block 4

new world - luka and zoe come to town. adrien is in trouble but felix stands by him. su han abandons marinette; he cannot teach her bc she has too much hatred.

fun and games/ b story/ies - felix and adrien switch so adrien can meet his friends for drinks. chloe sneaks snake miraculous back to luka. felix and lila threaten each other. felix likes kagami.

bad guys close in - monarque akumatizes nino to punish adrien. marinette finds out cat walker is a sentimonster

juxtaposition/ old vs new - luka/aspik shows up & joins marinette's side (she's not alone anymore). adrien realizes he has to be alone bc of what happened to nino. kagami confronts felix and gets the dragon miraculous (war begins)

act 3 - adrien identity reveal

block 5

build-up - luka and marinette plot to find the sentimonster. luka confronts adrien indirectly, suspects monarque is gabriel. marinette sleuths on felix (suspected peacock holder) only to discover adrien is a sentimonster/cat walker. kagami finds ladybug & offers to spy on felix & the villain team for her. monarque akumatizes zoe to punish chloe. ryuko gets her felix's amok in the fight, but gets it back when ladybug uses it against him. to stop ladybug harming argos & ryuko, luka reveals chat noir is still alive.

midpoint - montparnasse scene: ladybug confronts cat walker, he admits the truth. stand off with monarque until aspik & mellona rescue ladybug.

reversal - marinette is no longer hate driven, but driven by love to save adrien

act 4 - angrybug reversal

block 6

reaction - due to big emotional distress, ladybug goes into the avatar state (foreshadowing 👀). luka and chloe calm her down. feligami get together. adrien pleads to his father not to harm ladybug.

action/trials (raise the stakes) - the more adrien breaks his amok, the more he breaks his miraculous. marinette is set up to "spy" on adrien for the villain team. villain team plot to corner ladybug at dj wifi wedding.

dedication - adrinette kiss scene. adrien promsies himself he will harm himself before he lets harm come to ladybug. marinette promises no more harm will come to him.

block 7

calm before the storm - lila flashback: she killed nathalie and has been akumatized/transformed for 6 years. balcony scene: marinette tries to keep adrien close to no avail.

pinch/plot twist - volpina and monarque attack chloe, luka, and zoe. vesperia and carapace get their miraculous back. ladybug tries to heal cat walker & free him with her power, but his miraculous is too broken. she can only save him by getting his amok.

everything goes wrong/ dark night of the soul/ all is lost - lila & felix flashback: lila is monarque reveal. ladybug confronts gabriel agreste & tries to kill him, but can't (bc she is no longer full of hate). realizes monarque is lila. monarque takes felix, but kagami takes the other miraculous back to ladybug.

act 5 - fall of monarque

block 8 - finale

power within - team assemble. chloe uses mouse miraculous to activate other holders. lila finds marinette's identity.

action - monarque attacks. luka sacrifices himself to get the upper hand. alya gets the fox miraculous off lila, all her illusions drop. lila akumatizes timetagger, bunnyx shows up to get him. team fights argos and his sentimonster, red moon, to the death. chloe incapacitates argos.

converge - monarque takes the senti-twins and runs. remainder of the team follow her to agreste mansion.

block 9

final confrontation/final battle - monarque tries to make felix fix her miraculous. ladybug and team show up. monarque morphs into monster and attacks. gabriel sacrifices himself to save lb, but monarque still gets the upper hand. chat noir cataclysms monarque with a broken miraculous.

climax - the broken cataclysm destroys the world, but carapace's shield protects remainder of team. with adrien gone, felix is free and emilie is awake. ladybug goes toe-to-toe with broken miraculous final form chat noir, but her power is too weak compared to his untethered destruction. then felix gives her the peacock miraculous and she uses it to create a new bond for adrien, tethering him to life with her love.

resolution/denouement - all of paris knows chat noir is alive! big parade for heroes. ladybug and chat noir do a william and kate kiss. alya shoos off su han. felix gives gabriel to chloe and decides to work for tsurugi tech so he can stay with kagami. zoe and luka decide to go back home for a bit then come to stay too. emilie wants to be close to felix and adrien, but she is def not the priority for them atm. marinette takes the butterfly miraculous back from emilie. adrinette go off on a honeymoon vacation. adrien practices his proposal on a beach.

final image - adrien and marinette playing in the water on a beach on la reunion. “camera” pans away from their silhouettes running around on the sand, back to their stuff on the beach. shows a ring box in adrien’s bag with plagg & tikki chilling.

if this helped you out, i'm so glad! it definitely helped me see how to organize a story. i think if i ever do a fic like odnlb again, i will definitely do this for it.

#i finally finished answering all my comments lol #and i thought i'd do this now while the story is still fresh in my memory!#hopefully this will be helpful to other people as well as me #i just know i would have liked a map-out of a story i knew very well with all the proper beats #but now that i know i CAN do this kind of story with this kind of structure then i know i can do it again #also i am not claiming to be a story structure expert by any means #i am just sharing how i did it and how i see it #i could be totally off about some of these!#constructive criticism is always welcome <33 #also i am not saying this is the only way to tell a story #save the cat is definitely not the end all be all of narrative formulas #many stories are told according to different structures! and told well!#this is just the one i wanted more practice with #and one i thought fitting for odnlb since it was such a huge story #odnlb #one does not love breathing #snyder structure #save the cat #3 act 9 block 27 chapter method #writing #story structure #5 acts #might update this as we go forward

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iworshipsappho · 1 year

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Like it's gold, you're a prophet

hi!! i wrote and published a fic!! :00 how surprising ik ahsdjkf. its wenclair!!!! :D

<33 :]]

#i swear ill make it longer as it goes #and i might even actually update this ashdsjfjgk #i am proud of my writing in this tho so #be kind!!#constructive criticism is always welcome tho <33 #wednesday fanfic #wenclair fanfic #my writings.

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caprisun-rat · 2 years

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You might not wanna use all caps for your image ids :) some screen readers will read out each individual letter if a word is in caps, so I’d just shorten it to [ID: xyz. End ID] which is how I do it, or just use lowercase :> (light hearted)

thanks dude!! i had no idea, thanks for telling me <33

#to you and all my followers feedback and (constructive) criticism is always welcome <33

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yippeerrrs · 10 months

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"I'm sorry."

Fem!reader x König x Ghost!! Second time writing so constructive criticism is always welcome <33

It had been 3 days. 3 days of you being annoyed by könig. 3 days of ignoring his calls and messages. All because of that date.

You and könig were on a date at a fancy restaurant, enjoying your meals, catching up and having fun! When suddenly könig excuses himself to take a call. He went back in wearing a nervous smile, he paid for everything and had to leave, you tried to ask him why he was in a rush but he ignored you and pushed you away.

A day later you find out he was called into his work again, you went to visit him, planning to surprise him with your pregnancy and wearing your best dress, grabbing a cute basket to bring him cookies, some clothes and a little box with a positive pregnancy test in it.

You forgave him, knowing that it can be uncontrollable at times and that he is a busy man but it can't help but worry you a little, him having a dangerous job while.. you were carrying his child.

You go into his office after a 2-hour drive, happily walking in until.. you see him sitting down there, a girl on his lap and flirting with her. You drop your basket in shock, catching his attention.

"Maus?"

Your eyebrows furrow , you stared at him in disgust. Emotions rushing in, anger, annoyance, jealousy.. how could he? After all that time together?

"Don't 'maus' me."

You hiss.

"I can explain!-"

You feel tears stinging your eyes, turning away you drop your basket.

"Really? Is this why you.. you had to leave early?"

"Maus please! She's nobody! A fling, i promise-"

You cut him off, wiping you tears and masking your sadness with a laugh

"It's alright, I see now. I'll leave you two alone then."

You leave the room, könig running after you he notices the little box that was peeking out of the fallen basket of yours, he grabs it and his eyes widen at his findings. He knew he fucked up.

"Maus wait! Please!"

He screams out, trying to catch you while other soldiers give us looks. He manages to grab you by the wrist and pulls you.

"You're.."

Tears falling down your eyes as you try to pull away from his grip.

"Please.. i'm sorry"

You stop there, rethinking everything about him, your relationship. Was it really worth it? Even if he was cheating? Even if you weren't enough for him? No. It wasnt.

And so, you pull your hand away and run again, this time bumping into someone.. Ghost?

To be continued bcs i dont fucking know at this point

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paigeswrld · 1 year

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Heart of Ice pt. 2

Azriel x Archeron!reader

Warnings: mentions of depression, angst, longing, I think that’s it??

WC: 2.8k

A/N: you guys are all so sweet, thank you for all the love on the first part<3 that was my first time ever writing anything, and when I started writing it I had no plan, just started typing. The fact that I got so much love blew my mind! There will be a third part to this, I think that will be the final part. I decided to just tag everyone that commented..(I’m new to tumblr so idk if it’ll work) Thank you guys for the support! I know I didn’t reply, but I saw every comment and I can’t begin to express how happy it made me to see that people actually liked it??

I’m always welcome to constructive criticism<33

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After the night that Azriel promised to help you with your powers, you two spent a lot of time together. He tried taking you to the House of Wind to train, but you refused. You couldn’t stand to be around the others, not yet anyway. So, you began training in the woods.

Today was the start of the second week of training. Like yesterday, you spent an entire hour on silly breathing exercises for the mind, claiming that if you learn to control your mind then you can control your powers. Afterwards was spent doing physical training. With your lack of muscle, even the smallest things left your legs shaking and lungs gasping for air. Luckily, your new fae body had you gaining muscle much quicker than when you were human. Once you were entirely exhausted, he had you work on controlling your powers.

You still hadn’t managed to do more than conjure up a few snowflakes, and when you did manage more than that, you had trouble controlling where it went. Right now, Azriel wanted you to focus on making small, controlled patches of ice using water already in a puddle. It’s easier to use what’s already there then create something out of thin air, he had told you.

“Why do we do this last? Shouldn’t I practice when I have my full strength?” You turn to him after unsuccessfully trying to turn the small puddle to ice.

“If you learn to harness your powers while worn out, it’ll be easier at full strength. Besides, if you're tired, then your powers will be weaker, and there will be less risk of something going terribly wrong. Now try again.” He’s leaning against the tree, a casual day of pushing you to exhaustion.

You huff and turn back to the puddle. Deep breaths Y/N. Focus. It’s just a small puddle, you can turn it to ice. You willed your mind to stay calm, to focus simply on the puddle. You dig deep inside of you, invisible hands grasping the ice inside you and pushing it out, towards the puddle. It didn’t work. You hear a crackling, and a grunt from Azriel. You turn to him, only to find his legs frozen in a chunk of ice.

Never had you seen such shock on his face, which quickly turned to annoyance as he said, "Y/N, get me out of this damn ice."

You tried so, so hard to choke back the laugh that rose in your throat, but to no avail. Soon enough, you were doubled over in laughter. The sight of Azriel, the all mighty shadowsinger, stuck in a block of ice was quite possibly the most ridiculous thing you had ever seen.

Azriel, however, looked far from amused. "Y/N, you need to focus. Melt the ice and then you can laugh all you want, but my feet are getting cold." Even though the shadowsinger tried to look angry, you could still hear the hint of amusement in his voice.

“Okay, okay fine.” You took deep breaths, calming your mind, before putting all your focus on turning the ice to water. You weren’t entirely convinced it would work, considering you couldn’t manage the puddle.

“I’d rather not lose my toes to frostbite, so if you could speed this up, that would be great.”

You sent a glare towards the male. “You know, I could just leave you here. Leave you to find your own way out of the ice.”

He smirked at you, his arms crossed, “You and I both know you’re not going to leave me. We’re miles from home and out of range of Rhys’ daemati powers. You have nowhere to go.”

Story of your life.

With a sigh, you focus again on that stupid chunk of ice. Despite being trapped in the ice, Azriel still thought it okay to taunt you, even though he relied on you to get out of his situation. What a fool. You were beginning to regret letting that stupid, arrogant, handsome male train you…

Suddenly, there was a crack of ice and the splash of water, your shoes becoming soaked.

You looked at Azriel, who was now free of the ice, everything below his knees soaked. Despite the cold of his legs, Azriel was grinning at you. Grinning at you like a madman.

“You did it! You did it Y/N!” He rushed toward you and before you could react, he threw his arms around your waist spinning you around while laughing, “I knew you could do it, I just had to get you mad enough!”

Finally, he put you down, that adorable grin still on his face. You looked at him confused, “What do you mean ‘get me mad enough’?”

“Like most people, your powers tend to react more to negative emotions, including anger. I figured if I was able to annoy you enough, you would be able to use those emotions towards changing the ice to water. I was right.” That smug smirk was back on his face.

Rolling your eyes you said to him, “Does this mean I have to make myself angry every time I want to use my powers?”

“No, but in the beginning, it might help.”

You nodded. What Azriel said made sense. Your magic did tend to act up when you were feeling a negative emotion, like anger or fear. But with that numbness still deep in your heart, it was hard to muster up any emotions, even negative ones. Your time with Azriel was the only reprieve you had from that feeling. With him, the ice caging your heart melted just the slightest bit, slowly melting more and more as the days with him went on.

Finally pulling yourself out of you thoughts, you realized Azriel must be freezing. “We should probably go, wouldn’t want you to get that frostbite you were talking about.” And with that you two were off, back to the city of Velaris.

As you lay in your bed that night, it dawned on you, that was the first time you had laughed in months.

***

As the weeks flew by, you began to master your powers. You could conjure up snow storms in small areas, trap people in ice, throw ice daggers, and that was just the surface, according to Azriel. Yet, you still couldn’t shake the freezing cold that followed you wherever you went, no matter how hot the fire or the amount of blankets you piled upon yourself.

While spending time with Azriel helped tremendously for that numbness that had been plaguing you, it wasn’t the cure. There were days, like today, where it was worse and you couldn’t bring yourself to get out of your bed. Azriel had knocked on your door twice now, but you had simply pulled the covers over your head and attempted to block out any and all light.

Darkness. Darkness was what you wanted. Darkness would welcome you with open arms, it would hold you as you fell back into that deep, dark, bottomless pit of numbing depression. You would stay there forever. If you stayed there, you wouldn’t have to face your sisters again. Or the inner circle. Or the feelings for Azriel that were becoming harder and harder to ignore. None of it would bother you, and you would rather lay here and rot than face those things head on.

To your dismay, the Shadowsinger walked in, creating a crack of light in your dark pit. “What are you still doing in bed? We were supposed to start training 20 minutes ago.”

You decided to just ignore him, pulling the cover farther over your head.

You feel a dip on the edge of the bed. “Did you stay up too late last night?”

Finally, you give him a response, “No.” In fact, you had fallen asleep right after you got home, neglecting dinner and a bath.

He sighs, “Then what’s going on? You need to talk to me.”

You try to come up with an excuse, to think of anything that will get him to leave you alone. You almost told him you had your cycle, but if that were true, he’d smell it on you.

“I’m just… not feeling well today. I think we should cancel training for the day.” Your voice came out muffled by the covers.

“Do you need to see a healer? Are you sick?”

An easy out. “Yes, I’m sick. Nothing serious, just need to rest for a day or two. Then I’ll be fine.” You stayed under the covers, not trusting that you’ll be able to keep up the lie if you look into those hazel eyes.

“When Fae get sick, it’s often very serious. We should probably get you to a healer. I’ll have Rhys get Madja.”

“No!” You sit up all of a sudden, pushing back the covers and your eyes wide, “I don’t need a healer. Please don’t call Rhys in here, or anyone for that matter. I just want to be left alone.” You pick at your nails, not having the courage to look him in the eyes.

Ever so gently, he takes your chin into his scarred hand and brings your eyes to his, “Tell me what’s really going on sweetheart. I can’t help you if you don’t talk to me.” Concern laced his features as he looked at you.

You look to the side, struggling to keep eye contact. “I just… I get this feeling sometimes. Where I no longer care about anything. About myself. And I just want to lay in bed forever, in the darkness. It’s like I can’t get myself to feel anything but numb, more so than usual. I don’t want to leave bed, I don’t want to talk to anyone. I used to be afraid of the dark, before the Cauldron, but ever since I was Made it’s the only thing that makes me feel safe, it’s comforting.” You could feel your cheeks turning red at your confession, you’ve never been so vulnerable with someone.

Azriel’s voice is thick with emotion as he says, “And does anything help you to get out of these moods?”

You shake your head.

“Very well.” He stands up and walks out the door, and the feeling of rejection seeps into your bones. You had scared him away. Only a couple minutes later he returns, having changed out of his leathers into a t-shirt and sweatpants. Your eyes follow him as he walks over to your bed and pulls back the covers, placing himself right next to you.

“What are you doing?”

“We will spend two hours here, in this bed, and then we are going to spend the day outside, maybe have a picnic. Is that okay with you?” He settles down into the bed and turns on his side to face you. Unable to find the words, you merely nod your head.

“Good. I know that this is hard, and that being told that it will pass isn’t what you want to hear, but it’s true and it will. Until then, I will be by your side, helping you every step of the way. But Y/N,” you meet his eyes then, and he puts a hand on your cheek, “I can’t fix you, I can only be there to support you. This is something you have to do on your own, nobody else can do it for you. Okay?”

You could almost feel the ice inside your chest melting away. Tears were starting to form in your eyes, and your voice wobbled when you spoke, “Okay.”

A small smile formed on Azriels lips. He pulled you into his arms, and to your surprise, gave you a delicate kiss on the forehead. “Go back to sleep sweetheart, we have a picnic to rest up for.”

As your eyes drift close, Azriels shadows create a veil of complete darkness around you both. It seemed at that moment, something akin to love began to push its way through the ice in your heart, and not once did he mention the chill on your skin, or how his arms seemed to be the only thing that kept it at bay.

***

It had been three months since the day Azriel comforted you in bed. He has continued to do so anytime he found you nestled under the covers, refusing to leave. Some days he would hold you while you told him all of your thoughts, exposing every corner of your wretched mind. Other days you two would stay completely silent, allowing the darkness to be your only source of comfort.

But there was that one day… that one day that Azriel told you everything. He had laid his heart bare for you to see, showing you the darkness that lurked inside. He told you of his childhood, the story behind his hands, the fears and nightmares that still haunt him. The worst one, he had told you, was that voice in his head, his fathers voice, telling him he would never be enough. Telling him nobody would ever love him, for how could somebody love a monster such as Azriel? He wiped away your tears, and you his, as you told him that anyone would be lucky to have him as their own, that they should feel honored. You couldn’t help but see the resemblance… how you both never felt like you were enough. You hugged him tighter after that, and he drifted off to sleep shortly after.

It was that day that the bond snapped for you, as you looked at Az peacefully asleep in your arms. You let out a gasp, not loud enough to wake him. You could feel it then, that golden tether linking you two together for eternity. You couldn’t help but smile at the thought of the male you’d grown to love being yours for the rest of your existence.

There was one problem, you realized. You still hadn’t forgiven your sisters, and they you, and you weren’t sure you ever could. How could you ever get over such a thing? That feeling of love quickly turned to a feeling of dread as you realized, Azriel would have to choose. These people were his family, and even if you were his mate, that didn’t mean he would pick you. You had decided then that you wouldn’t tell him. You knew that if you did, you would lose your mate forever, and you would rather love him as his friend than not get to love him at all.

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It had been a week since the bond snapped, and you now stood skipping stones in front of a small pond as Azriel tried to convince you to attend family dinner at the House of Wind. He’s been trying to do so for the past couple weeks, claiming everyone wants to see you.

“I’ve already told you Az, it’s too much. What if something goes wrong with my powers again?” Not turning to face Azriel as you threw a stone at the water, sending it skipping across the pond.

You could almost hear the frown in his voice, “You have full control over your powers now, you can’t keep using that same excuse. They all want to see you, they miss you.”

You turned back to face him as your face scrunched up in anger, “Don’t lie to me Az. They don’t know me well enough to miss me. Those that do don’t care about me, they just want me to show up and act like everything is fine so they don’t have a guilty conscience. I won’t put myself through the pain of having to act like I’m okay just to soothe their selfish worries about their character.” You were almost chest to chest with the Shadowsinger, temper rising as you stared him down.

“If you just gave them a chance, Feyre and Elain both ask about you every time I come home, and even Nesta has asked how you are doing. What they did was wrong, but they’re trying to make things better. Shouldn’t you at least hear them out? If not for them, then for you. Give yourself that closure.” You could see the pleading in his eyes, begging you to do this. For you. For him.

You couldn’t bring yourself to say no, not as he looked at you with those big, beautiful eyes. You took a deep breath, closing your eyes before looking back up to him, “Okay. One dinner, and you have to promise that if I want to leave at any point— even if we just stepped foot through the door— you will get me out of there. Deal?”

He put his hands on your waist, pulling you even closer, “It’s a deal.” As you looked at him, triumph written all over his face, you began to wonder if maybe, for a chance at being with him, you could look past all that your sisters had done.

And so it was settled, two days from now you would be attending the Inner Circle’s family dinner.

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marvel-potter-1d-korea · 2 years

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Do you love her?

Pairing: Your choice of character x reader, your choice of character x fem!OC! character.

Summary: Your boyfriend has been acting distant since a few weeks. You have noticed him hanging out with another girl every chance he gets. He seems very happy with her. Does he love you or her? What happens when you decide to finally confront him?

Warnings: Angst, angst lots of angst, insecurities, one swear word, no happy ending.

(A/N: I have used an indian name for the girl. If you don't like it you can add your favourite name. Also (BF/N) stands for 'boyfriend name')

*gif credits to the owner

It was a normal day in college. Well, as normal as it could be since your sweet boyfriend was blatantly ignoring you for the past few days. You were sick and tired of this. It hurt.

You noticed he had been hanging out with Apoorva a lot. She seemed like a nice girl at first. But then you saw that he seemed happier around her, laughed more with her. He never laughed so openly with you. Break times consisted of you trying to talk to him, spend some time with him, but him speeding out of the class to meet her. The jealousy inside you grew tenfold. Whenever you saw her, you would get upset, turning around and walking the other way. But then after jealousy came insecurity. You knew you weren't the most beautiful in the class, and you always wondered why he chose you out of all the girls in the class. You knew from the beginning that it was only a matter of time before he found a more beautiful, smart and interesting girl than you. Still, it hurt to think he would move on after just 2 months of dating. You showed him your most vulnerable side, opened up to him, trusted him and he still chose to ignore it and shove your insecurities in your face. You knew this relationship was getting toxic but you couldn't breakup with him. You love him with all your heart. You lost the number of times you told him how much you loved him. You were feeling used.

And it was for this exact reason you decided to confront him.

"(BF/N), we need to talk."

"Sure what about?"

"About you and Apoorva."

He seemed to freeze for a moment but recovered from his shock rather quickly. "What about her do you wanna talk about?"

You closed your eyes and took a deep breath. Sighing you ask tiredly, "Do you love her? Or are you falling in love with her?"

Jaw dropping, he said "No of course not! She's just my friend! Where did this come from?"

His response didn't seem reassuring. So you asked him, "Why did you choose me? What did you see in me that you decided to make me your girlfriend? Do you even love me anymore? Did you ever love me? OR WAS I JUST A TOY? A TOY FOR YOU TO USE AND THROW WHEN YOU'RE DONE? HUH? TELL ME" you screamed, tears streaming down your face, absolutely done with his bullshit. "I WANT THE TRUTH AND YOU'D BETTER SPIT IT IT OUT!!" Rage, white hot fury flooded you. Maybe he sensed your anger, since it was very much apparent and he obeyed with your command. He sighs and says, "Yes, i like her." Atleast he had the shame to look guilty.

Three words. Those three words you've been dreading to hear. Your world came crashing down in seconds. You chuckled, humorlessly and said "I hope you're happy." And with tears in your eyes, you turned around and walked away from the life of your first ever love.

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Sooooo that was very angsty. I did not think i was capable of that. Lemme know what you think of it in the comments!! Likes and reblogs are appreciated!! Constructive criticism is welcome. As always, lots of love,Nivu<33.

Tags: @thewinchestergirl1208 @budugu @payasamlover @sellylove @jeonmahi1864 @rambheem-is-real @rambheemisgoated and anyone else i forgot to tag!!

#him x reader #boyfriend x reader #chris evans x reader #sebastian stan x you #tom hiddleston x reader #loki x reader #steve rogers x reader #bucky barnes x reader #fanfiction #ram charan x reader #boyfriend #angst oneshot

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ssahotchnerr · 10 months

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hi katie <33

i know we talked about this last night, but i just want you to know how incredibly loved you are on this app. every single one of the hotch girls that i’ve talked to think the same about you:

1. you’re one of the sweetest people we have met

2. your writing is to die for (excuse me the characterization??? 100/10)

3. you would do anything for any one of us that asked

4. you’re so incredibly welcoming in this fandom even when a lot of people aren’t

i could go on forever. what people say about you is never a reflection of you. it’s always a reflection of who they are and what they see in themselves. they’re almost always insecure and jealous. please know that you shouldn’t feel guilty for wanting to know how people perceive your fics, for wanting to know what people like and what they don’t like about them, for wanting constructive criticism. all writers want that. those anons saying you’re asking too much and being too needy are out of their minds. and they’re dead wrong.

it’s so hard and incredibly scary to publish fics that you write — that alone is intimidating as hell. you’re going out of your way to put your art out here on the internet for us to read and enjoy. stories that you’re already scared isn’t enough for us. absolutely that calls for feedback, especially if you’re asking for it!

you write whatever you want to and we will always be here in the comments and your dms talking about it. and you know what? if other people read it and don’t like it, they can MOVE ON and keep scrolling. it costs $0 to be nice and just ignore things you don’t like. taking multiple minutes out of your day to send someone a long message (longer than any feedback on fanfic would take) just to tell them what they’re asking for isn’t valid and making them feel like shit for wanting support is not okay and will not be tolerated.

morgan!!!! 😭💞 i'm so incredibly grateful for you you have no no no idea <3333333 you always manage to change my perspective to something positive and thank you so so so much for helping me through last night 😭 i hope you know how important you are to me, and to soooo many others here in the aaron community <333, because omg what would we all do without you 😭 i really don't know <333333 thank you for being you and for always being suchhh a light!!!!!!!!!!!! i love you!!!!

#and you're speaking all the facts 🫵🏻#katie’s inbox

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leqonsluv3r · 2 months

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hi as the anon who asked you about grammar i did say i didn’t mean it in a mean way sorry if you got offended or something like that 😭😭 im not a native english speaker myself and i just wondered where you were from because i assumed you were not a native english speaker from the grammar in your smut. i’m not “on” anything, didn’t mean it in a bad way at all!

i know anon!! don’t worry. i appreciate your concern and your constructive criticism. i always welcome it!! ❤️❤️ your absolutely okay. no worries <33

#leqonsluv3rasks #leqonsluv3rrambles #leon kennedy

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fictionaltrvlr-fics · 1 year

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Masterlist

Hello! Here's my list of currently available fics, i will continue to update it as more are added. Feel free to send requests! I can't promise when/if i'll get to each one but i'll do my best :))

Want to request something? Please read my request guidelines 💜

Notes: All my fics are sfw and will include a list of any potential trigger warnings at the top as well as the word count. as a general rule, I write platonic and/or familial pairings, and most of these are fluffy/comfort/cozy type fics. The use of x/& in reader inserts means they can be read either as romantic or platonic <33.

Please let me know if I leave out any warnings you think I should have included (also welcome to do this through an anonymous ask if that makes you more comfortable!). I am always open to constructive criticism/advice!

MARVEL

Bucky

Here With You (Bucky x OC or fem!reader) - Realistic(ish) oneshot about helping Bucky take care of his arm, comfort/fluff

I've Got You (Bucky x/& GN!Reader) - Short oneshot of Bucky comforting Reader through a panic attack

Let’s Get Out of Here (Bucky x/& GN!Reader) - Reader has some self injurious behaviour and Bucky is there for them

Loki

Genderfluidity & Loki's Bountiful Wardrobe (Loki x/& Genderfluid!Reader) - Comfort oneshot where Loki helps genderfluid/nb/trans reader feel comfortable/accept themselves

Shenanigans with Loki (Loki x/& GN!Reader) - Short little oneshot where reader teases Loki and silly fluff ensues. This just makes me smile idk haha

Natasha

I'm Proud of You (Natasha x/& GN!Reader) - Short oneshot of Natasha comforting Reader through their anxiety & self-harm (sh is not graphic or focused on very much)

Yelena

Lacy, oh Lacy... - Inspired by Lacy by Olivia Rodrigo. I think that at some point, Natasha was Yelena's Lacy. So this is just a one shot based on that, with no dialogue. Sad & angsty lol

Agents of SHIELD

Strength (Coulson x May) - Filler moment with Coulson and a slightly injured May, somewhere towards the end of season 5.

#masterlist #marvel comfort #bucky barnes x reader #loki x reader #natasha romanoff x reader

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caaaatoad · 2 years

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REQUEST RULES

SFW and x reader ONLY + please note that I am a minor (15 years old)

I am in no means the best at writing it is just my hobby so please do correct me if anything is ooc - constructive criticism is always welcome and very much appreciated <33

Please be patient! I will write your request as fast as I can <3 Thank you!

THE CHARACTERS I WRITE FOR ARE…

Kaeya, Diluc, Childe, Zhongli, Xiao, Albedo, Thoma, Gorou, Dainsleif, Itto, Scaramouche, Ayato, Kazuha, Cyno, Alhaitham.

TOPICS I WILL NOT WRITE

NSFW

yandere or dark content

Non-consensual actions done by the reader or character

Polynomial relationships

Cheating (on spouse)

Heavy trauma relating topics, mental illness, abuse of any kind, or anything relating to suicide.

Highschool AU or other fandom specific AU

**More may be added in the future!!

WHEN REQUESTING FEEL FREE TO SAY

The genre (fluff, angst, hurt/comfort, reverse comfort, enemies to lovers, ect)

If you’d like an AU (ex. Royalty, Coffee Shop, College ect!!) if not I’ll write your request in the canon universe!

Characters and format. For fics (1-2 characters) & for scenario and headcannons (5-6 characters)

Reader’s pronouns - I write for any! (ex. they/them, she/her, he/him ect.) If not I will default to gender neutral!

You can request specific plot details or simply ex. Kaeya fluff - feel free be as detailed as you’d like - I will work with what you give me in your request<3

Any request that does not follow these rules or makes me uncomfortable will be ignored and deleted.

#genshin x reader #genshin requests #requests open!

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nerdy-simp-7120 · 2 years

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• welcome to my blog! •

inbox: 1

status: open

request list

who i write for:

» Obey Me! SWD (everyone except thirteen, rafael, and mephistofoles)

» Twisted Wonderland (everyone)

rules:

all you have to do is ask, specify what prounouns are to be used, and specify what characters you want and i'll do my best to complete the request as long as it doesn't involve the things i refuse to write for. any requests that are made when my requests are closed will be deleted.

if you want a nsfw request then go to my side acc @cutiesgaloree

i won't delete current nsfw requests or posts but i'll repost and move current nsfw requests there. for any future nsfw requests pls go there!

things i won't write for include:

» requests with mental disorders reader bc i'd hate to misrepresent y'all :(

» anything that is supportive of racism, transphobia, homophobia, etc

» anything that includes sensitive or personal information, such as your full name, exact location (city, province, zip code), etc. this is to keep you safe!

warnings:

» lowercase intended

» spoilers for attack on titan, the tokyo revengers manga and anime, beastars seasons two, and the obey me anime. block these tags to avoid spoilers!

# aot manga

# beastars seasons 2

# obey me vip lounge

# tokyo revengers anime spoilers

# tokyo revengers manga

» minors are allowed to interact with my sfw content only. avoid my nsfw content by blocking the tag

# nerdy simp smut

» i am an affectionate person, so if you aren't a fan of someone who adds an excessive amount of hearts (ex: <33) to every response (that isn't hate) then feel free to leave

remember that the more details you add to your requests, the better they'll be!

if you wish to talk about a headcannon you read, vent, thirst, rave about something, or just chat, feel free to do it here! constructive criticism is always welcome. have a nice day <33

also thought i'd mention this since some creators don't like it:

SPAM LIKING N STUFF IS OKAY WITH ME <33 I DON'T HAVE NOTIFS ON SO GO HAM

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bbarnesbby · 9 months

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I’m only sending this because you said concrit is welcome, I’m not trying to discourage you from writing but just want to understand: why make Joel crude and pervy? What makes this “Joel” and not an original character?

Firstly, thank you for sharing your constructive criticism! You've put this really nicely so there's no need to worry about any discouragement <33

I completely understand and appreciate your enquiry around this, it's something I used to wonder myself when reading fanfics in the past.

But I think I can speak for myself and other readers and authors when recognizing that there is a good percentage of people on here that like to indulge in fanfictions where the author will put characters in different environments, scenarios or change and add certain characteristics to the character being written, creating AU's (alternate universes).

So in this case I'm taking Joel Miller as a base character (although not claiming ownership over the character) and adding pervy and crude characteristics to him, but still keeping with canon facts such as this fic being set in Texas where Joel is a contractor.

You are correct in the fact that I am using original character elements here, but instead of this being a straight up original character, I'm creating an oc!Joel Miller (pervy!contractor!Joel). This is for a number of reasons, including my own general interest and attraction to Joel Miller, as well as dark romances whether they be fanfic or general literature/books I read myself.

Despite writing this, outside of FICTION I cannot stress enough that I do not condone ANYONE to be pervy or crude towards people without prior explicit, discussed consent in which both parties are comfortable. This is just my twisted little brain spewing out a piece of fan fiction as a hobby.

At the end of the day, we all have our own preferences in what we like to read, and there's nothing wrong with that. I will always put warnings at the beginning of fics to help readers navigate what they would like to consume on my blog and on this app.

I'm sorry if my reply to this comes off as rambling or is badly worded D: I just don't want any misconception that I'm trying to take ownership of characters or ideas, or god forbid condone relationships like the ones presented in dark romances in the real world.

Again thank you for the ask, I'm always open to constructive criticism and glad I could help you with your questions (I hope lmao) <33

#asks <3

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haunted-house-heart · 2 years

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ok finally making an intro to pin <3

you can call me emery or ghost, or if you know my other names you can use those too! my pronouns are they/it. i’m autistic, queer, nonbinary, demibiro, and ace <3

you can also find me on ao3 (starry_eyed_knight) and tiktok (starry_eyed_ghost)