writing workshop 1: show & tell | fiction variant
In the evening Maria sits straight-backed by the window in the parlor, one hand hidden in the pocket of her heavy skirts. Her face is pale and drawn; with the way the lamps light the room, it is impossible to see past her own reflection into the inky night. Her violet gown laced to the neck, a hand cupped in her lap, Maria waits. Listens.
The sound of ticking echoes in the manor.
Inside her pocket, the curving surface of the windup key is smooth, made warm by the constant stroking of her thumb. Its top resembles a figure-eight, or infinite loop, with two holes in the center for leverage when winding; it’s the path around these loops that Maria’s thumb travels now, in a continuous and familiar pattern. Her index finger braces the back. Occasionally her thumb and forefinger flex to turn the side of the key, her remaining fingers loosening against her palm to let the barrel of the key shift. The barrel is mostly smooth, made for easy use with a variety of devices and automatons, with two grooves close to the top.
It is the same sturdy key that Maria has been using since childhood, cast from an alloy of iron and some other dim metal, though now it is as mottled as frogskin. When her father gifted her the wind-up key on her twelfth birthday, it glimmered clear as silver in the lamplight. It had been made far away in the city, in one of my father’s factories, and arrived in a thick paper envelope that smelled of smoke. Her ripped the envelope in half and dropped the cold key into her hands.
“Here,” he said, pulling down an automaton from the mantle. It was one of his early models, short and oddly proportioned and burnished by the poor quality of the metals. It hardly looked like a man at all. And yet when Maria placed the key in its back and wound, it turned its head to her and blinked.
“Oh!” Maria gasped.
“You see, it’s simple. Now you can help your mother in the morning,” her father said, scratching his beard as he riffled through the remaining letters and parcels from the city. Maria stared at the little automaton, with its immovable joints and ticking gears. It blinked at her again.
And so the windup key made its new home in Maria’s right skirt pocket. She used it before breakfast to wind the devices at the windows, which raised the curtains and let the morning light in. When her father went away to the city and did not come back, he sent an automaton back who would follow people about and open doors for them. It was the largest automaton Maria had ever seen, and it did look much like a man, with round holes in its smooth face for eyes. She liked it, though it didn’t do much, and sometimes tripped on the carpet, and she had to use a hairpin to rescue it when her mother would lock in a storeroom.
When Maria woke in the morning, her mother’s servant would brush her hair in front of the vanity. The comb was merciless; the hands were worse, tugging and tightening strands of hair into place, fastened with pins that made Maria’s head ache all through the day. While she was worked upon, Maria looked into the vanity mirror imagining an automaton’s dispassionate and rhythmic movements instead, steady and gentle, no sneers or blotchy cheeks or sighs of exasperation.
One day, Maria thought, I will not need you anymore. And then you will go away forever. Her thumb rubbed the key in her pocket, steady and gentle.
Maria stayed in the house in the country. She did not go to the city for a debut or a season. Her mother did not mention a thing, but then her mother rarely spoke anymore, and her father only returned in the summer to install his newest inventions. Wielding the windup key, Maria felt a growing mastery of the house. When a new, steel-shining six-limbed automaton was installed in the kitchen, she waited until her father had departed to the city and informed the household servants that they were no longer needed via letters left on the dining table, sealed with wax marked by the figure-eight of a windup key. Maria’s mother wouldn’t mind—she hadn’t left her room in weeks.
And so Maria was left alone in the house, the house where she spends her time waiting at the window, listening to the gentle ticking of machinations at work, turning over a key in her hand, turning over, and over.
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do you ever see a person and you are overcome with incredible fondness? and you just think "oh." but not in a romantic or sexual way you are just filled with warmth and it makes you happy, it just does. and you think "i'm so happy you exist. i'm happy you are somewhere out there in the world, doing your thing". it's love but also not entirely
like people are lovely and i feel it in my entire chest like a burning candle that smells like roses and a sunny day
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